An End to All Hurt....

[Bounce]

Yes, to resize the verse on you display you just have to hit control and scroll either up or down on your mouse wheel at the same time. Most newcomers get this wrong in the begining, then they catch on...

[Eye`]

Nice drop Bounce. Enjoyed the whole entire peice, and ur drop went perfectly with the pic. It was very suspenseful and very deep, i'm glad to see you dropping here again. The imagery was nice as hell yo, I pictured most of it in my mind, and everything fell right into place. Good luck in WOP this round, I dropped weak as fuck. I rate this peice a 9.6/10, pz.

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^ Thanks for the reply..

About your wop verse, well I wouldn't call it weak. It was rather good in some parts, way too long IMO. I think you will do a good job here on the topical scene, but you need to nail down the topics better, you could have made that verse so much better and really made better use of the topic. The slave thing has been done to death on RB, although you did make up for that in other aspects, but the read kind of dragged a bit. YOu could do better, I'm certain...

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[Poeta Demonio]

very dope peice...the rhyme scheme was a little off throwing but still a excellant read...the depth and the feeling of the verse got to me the most,it was nice an complex with-out it being so complex that the peice is ruined...the vocabulary used was very good,beautifully descriptive and detailed.

to be honest though this was was obviously ment for a song rather than a written peice...so i think you should make it into one to do the peice justice.

iv'e read various peices from you and i have always found them to be very interesting and fantastic to read...i know you don't drop that much on rb anymore...but it is nice to sometimes see a peice from you.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=253347

[shizzybrane]

Topically this piece ripped.
Someone mentioned a unique ryhmescheme, and i agree.
Overall, i sensed a KORN-like whininess, but your flow and style more than made up for any doubts i had about this post.

[Bounce]

lol @ KORN like whininess... Thaqnks for taking the time to read. I can explain anything that is not clear or any questions you might have.

[Trema]

this was a good piece bounce i felt the vocab was very good. It was alot to read but a very enjoyable read. You stayed on point the whole way through with good rhymes and a perfect topic, keep it up i call this sum dope shit lol,

[DAKID303]

That was sick. Mad props. You do have a uniqe style and you can tell you caare and love ur rhymes. your a poet in its truiest form you remind me of a bard. A bard is a old school poet.

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Thank you all for your time and feed, it is appreciated. If you need me to explain in detail any portion of my verse please feel free to ask. If you have any other questions I'm always willing to discuss...

[Mordecai]

Very nice Bounce, the topic was decent and you played it the best. The wordplay was pretty good and your flow was hard to follow at first but i read it over a couple times and finally got it. I'm not gonna say what hasn't been said already, but this was a very good read. Keep it up.

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This Was Meh.......Ur Multiz Were On Point And Were Used To Prefection.....Ur Structure Was Messed Up So U Need To Work On That Big Time....The Rhymes At The End Of Each Line Werent Even Very Much Of Rhymes But They Were Okey....Ur Metas And Wordplay Were Kinda Weak But Still O.k.....7.3/10

[-KriminaL-]

Naw, i liked this piece, fresh and deep - that's the way to do it, you've got an original style, but tha's good - i think probably one of the best things i've peepd on here so far, So keep doing ya thing - know what im saying?

In the meantime - peep and leave some feed for my first drop? - http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=253670

-KriminaL-

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This Was Meh.......Ur Multiz Were On Point And Were Used To Prefection.....Ur Structure Was Messed Up So U Need To Work On That Big Time....The Rhymes At The End Of Each Line Werent Even Very Much Of Rhymes But They Were Okey....Ur Metas And Wordplay Were Kinda Weak But Still O.k.....7.3/10

OK, first off, my styructure is solid as fawk on this. The problem is the way YOUR browser displayed the verse. So before you go talking about something like strucutre being off, please adjust your browswer to display the verse properly. If you do not know how, then look a few replys back and I told another member how to correct for this. It's not my structure it's your browser display settings. I'm not a novice like that.

The verse should be displayed as 3 seperate stanzas, all of which are comprised of 11 lines each which add up to 33 which by the way is the age of Christ when he was killed on earth, complex metaphor. There should be no breaks in the lines or staggered lines, if so that is your browser, not MY structure.

Use your Contrl key and scroll wheel on your mouse to adjust your browsers display... Kind of simple...

Now if you want to get into the rhyme scheme, again you need to look at the way you are viewing this. My scheme does not use end of line rhymes. AA AB type schemes are way too played and conventional, and really don't help with the meter of a peice when translated into flow of an audio delivery. End of line rhymes are basic, simple and old... The last word in my lines are not part of the rhyme scheme. This is a very common over sight on the part of new members here... The entire peice is a mataphor, so I really do not know what you are talking about me not using metas to my advantage. lol, everyone of my peices dropped on here are chalk full of complex metas. So keep this in mind next time you reply to peices in our OM section. Might help BIG TIME!

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