hall of fame shit(abc rap) read every one

[gladiator187]

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H: Have a holocaustic hold when I hurl hymns Homiletically
I: I ill-fully intend to impale idiots with incontestable illegalities
J: Judicious JUJITSU will jump all juvenile jurisdictions justifiably
K: Killing KARATE KUNG-FU knew how to knock kids knowledgeably
L: Lyrically loving living loaded, it’s a long-shot lunging me ludicrously
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N: No-one noted now, I nut nuzzle nigglingly night by night notoriously
O: Obscene open oral orifice action observed obsession obnoxiously
P: Progression in plans to purge my potential proven prodigy
Q: Quickly I quizzically quarrel when queers quiver from my quotability
R: RAPidly rage in rhythm I ridicule, n reap regardless of reasonability
S: Secluding suckas symbolically, sparks sheer, several sharp shots shadow severely
T: These tongue twisting technicalities temp to transfuse THINCS thoughts temperamentally
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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...108#post3483108
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...158#post3483158

[Lambragini]

that was pretty cool i like it 9/10
it was funny to keep that shit up homie

[SyCo_187]

This Was Good OM
Its Not Hall Of Fame Shit But It Was Dope
Good Wordplay
Creatvity Was Nice To
Overall It Was A Nice Peice


Hit This Up Wit Feed


http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=251522


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[gladiator187]

well if not hall of fame then at lease the rap of the month
this type of shit takes skill

[-IsIs-]

That was fuckin dope. the most creative thing ive seen in the OM. straight up man. the flow was extremely dope. i loved the structure. and just the fact in mind that you kept goin like that the entire piece was fuckin unbelievable man. straight up.

Overall piece - 10/10

Keep dropin man.

-Peace

[Laish Tenedos]

Doesn't rhyme... no direction in the piece.

Try listening to 22 2's by Jay-Z.
He manages to do something impressive while still talking and making sense.

[gladiator187]

thanks for the feed back laish you too but let me see you do betta.peice was suppose to show creativity. what you mean doesnt rhyme???read again or are the words to big??plus sumthin called wordplay. and do i look like jay z to you.

[Laish Tenedos]

LOL... No u don't look like Jay-Z. But u could take a few things from his style.

And I can do better, I have. If I was still on this site, I would show you.

Like for Z, that doesn't even make sense.
And few of them rhyme line for line like it seemed you were going for.

[Young Trill]

plain dopeness right here... funny... good structure and rhyme scheme.. liked the topic in general.... this is reall nice.. i give it 9.5/10 keep it up

[-IsIs-]

yo b. what the fuck man. stop fuckin with gladiators shit man for real. you dont leave shitty posts like this in OM, you give him constructive critisism moron.

Directed to Laish.

[gladiator187]

laish why you the only one that replyed that dont like it then. that should tell you sumthin right. i dont like jay z style. i got my own style. then get back on the site. ok.
let me see your abc rap and let see if you can do any betta.
and dont take a month on it neither. took a day or so when i was in school and bored

[-IsIs-]

yo gladiator dont even fret that fag man. dont even know what the fuck hes talkin about. personally om dont need that faggot in here anyway you know what i mean. just keep doin what your doin makin your own styles man youll be dope.

[gladiator187]

thanx

[[DEF]]

Too many words of the same letter in there...my head hurts yo

But it was definitely a good piece, I thought the flow was off in some spots but, it was still nice, too many vocab words in thier that had little to no relevance to what you were saying I could tell that you had just thrown them in which is bad...nice multis not really any metophorical integration...but its all good...

not hall of fame work but it will do to get you these

Better luck next time...:cooliio:

[Laish Tenedos]

LMAO... Newbies. I would destroy every single one of you in a topical.

I commented on his shit. I did. Just because you're insecure fags who can't take it when someone actually tries to help you.
I said look at Jay-Z because he doesn't do rambling. This is rambling.
And I'm not writing something like this to prove to you that I can write better.
Look up God., Rex, etc. on this site.
Read my OM's, my battles, whateva.
I know wtf I'm talking about.

But hey, put your stock in this dumbass Isis, who named himself after a goddess and seems to be on your dick quite firmly.
That was constructive criticism.
That's what it looks like.
I'm showing you the perspective of someone who's not so dumb that they see big words and think its a 10/10. LMAO.