Honesty

[warchild]

I got banned last night but for some reason im still aloud to post.
It was supposed to be my last day on the site today anyway so fuck it i thought id drop one last verse before i leave, peace.

I reach for my isolated pen and dust off my Note Book
I dont let the living enquire i only let the Ghosts Look
At the pages of my lyrical diary, verses and Most Hooks
I detail my savage state most mc's just Quote Crooks
I cant possibly censor my words when the Ink Pours
I had to raise myself through poverty and pain so i Think Raw
The basis of my raps are negative but i mix in the Positive
People tell me they care but in my heart is where the Horror Is
I cant confront my demons cause the booze helps me Stay Numb
My pen penetrates the page at night my mind is fucked when the Day Comes
If my personality was a parcel it would be a bomb with Ill Sleeving
I have Kurt Cobain tendencies but i cant falter im Still Breathing
A cold heart quick temper pen and pad as friends thats a Lonely Life Kid
Alcohol mixed with laughs weed mixed with women are my Only Vices
I write for my well being and those who have fallen on Hard Times
So keep on listening or ignore the words that i weave from my Scarred Mind

[The Vortex]

nice uppin of the multies

liked this part best-

have Kurt Cobain tendencies but i cant falter im Still Breathing
A cold heart quick temper pen and pad as friends thats a Lonely Life Kid
Alcohol mixed with laughs weed mixed with women are my Only Vices


i'd hasten 2 add its too short to really captivate my mind
i think its like 3 different flows here as well, each 4 lines moving on to another different flow
flow could of maybe been contained more.. or maybe thats just in the structure
I thought too many lines started with "I"
which cudda been replaced with got or have or sum other shit

was all worded pretty dope though.. and you now have some poetic touches up in yo joint

good ish

[Trema]

this was yet another dope drop u always come good with the multies and the vocab was nice man. I dont think u shud leave seems all the dope heads leaving rb. Anyway this piece kept me reading for the share fact u had good vocab and the rhymes were on point nice work

[warchild]

Links:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=238594
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=238283

[warchild]

Uppin this.

[warchild]

Uppin this.

[LISTEN]

nice spit, jus shorten up your lines, its kind of a mouthful. but u kan spit,keep spittin or die tryin
check my shit out do show diss nigga some love

[Violents]

yeh i was feelin this

nice multies nigga yo ushud drop 16s with hooks and shit rep what you do know what i mean....

I cant confront my demons cause the booze helps me Stay Numb
My pen penetrates the page at night my mind is fucked when the Day Comes

haha i know what you eman nigga thats al li do whe ni aint on the block is rhyme...

why you get banned anyway?

[This Aint Beef]

All the drops I see from you always flow very well. You have mastered the use of multies and you manageto pull em out on almost every bar. It seemed like you may have rushed this in order to get it out... but was still done very well. Dope work, and hopefully your back soon.

[J-Hova]

yo this was tight the multies was good vocabs good aint nothin bad to say bout this it was tight. Stay Up