Song of the new soldiers Ft. DATBOIP

[DATBOIP]

Pakaveli
[DATBOIP]

Man we gone branded newcomers in this place,
[keep em commin tho, we gon' mark em at the waist]
so people talk shit, against our grace,
[thankin god for the food, that they couldnt even taste]
We posts on replys, fastly with pace,
[blinded by new lies, quickly to be replaced]
try to get a weight, get more value on our face.
[dont look me in the eye, you a big, discrase]
What's weight to do with skill,
[most of yall cant even ACT real]
We like natural, while some homiez out there takin a steroid pill,
[Thats a big "No, No, No", as heard on Jay Millz]
Stupids don't know pills don't effect vocab
[pick your words off my skin as if it were a dry scab]
They lie still,
[just like tmobile commercial when the dude sees the bill]
While getting dissected on a table in a lab,
[write a lable on his foot "died with the passing fab"]
Cause me an P, we put ta kill,
[from tha diry south so you know we get trill]
We know what we want, we aiming to gain our first mill,
[history of money, started out with just a dolalr bill]
Before the end of time,
[you get yo shit and ill get mine]
I already know i gotta go...i've heard ma death chime,
[god please forgive me, for the sins that i rhyme]
I commited one, two a crime,
[scared you 'crooks' into a blank faced mime]
but i neva put a brother down,
[tho ill enjoy watching my words make him drown]
told him he sound like a clown,
[silent with the o, but im violent like a pronoun]
Put on his face watery eyes and a frown.
[i come in silent, like santa clause]
[but come loaded with them thangs, that will make ya pause]
I may kill physically,
[my words leave a mark on you mentally]
But i neva kill the soul, pschycologically.
WE talkin bout what these other "gangsta" rapper done to us when we arrived,
they tried to take away our pride leave us deprived.
[Yea i could lie to you and say your flow was nice]
[that wouldnt be me, MOP said, "Im as coold as icee!"]
But the pricks neva new, like a phoenix we rise,
this goes outta all the people that despise,
Fuckas, cause of you homies are cause to lie,
mentally die,
Doesn't your heart cry,
Or has it gone stone and all dry.


Next time if ya got nothin good to say, tell the rhymer how ta improve, don't go sayin shit like elevate and u got no groove


http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=237476
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=237443

[EvOLuTioN]

Ok that was long...and i liked the duo style that was a nice touch. theres just 1 problem...the wordplay and vocab was basic...and the structure was off.

Next time if ya got nothin good to say, tell the rhymer how ta improve, don't go sayin shit like elevate and u got no groove

Ok well fix your structure up, try to make the lines even. the word play was simple and i didn't see meaning...dsont get me rong it was a nice piece it just didn't seem to have meaning...seemed like a title song to show yourselves as emcees. No hate...Datboip is my boy and he knows i only says what is best for him. Shoulda seen him like 2 weeks ago...he was terrible...lol

any way i rate this 7.2/10

keep it up guyz shuld make more pieces with the same duel feature. It was hott, yo dat i gotta talk to u about featuring in my "Changing World (Remix)"

[DATBOIP]

bwahah.
all good.
thanks for props.
me and him arent online at same time to make everything perfect.
but u know my deal
as true as mikkyd's bein a healthy meal.
lol

OM, meaing open mic. like kareoke.
no turnin back, baby!

what you say, when you say it, however you say it, whenever you wanna,
most likely the after effects of smoking too much marajuwanna...

good stuff...

gotta wait till tomorrow to get Pak's oppinions.
always can edit. lol

[noncentz]

All And All I Liked It Yes Its Basic But So Is Your Consumer Mostly I Think This Was Presented Well

[P. Mortuus]

Carry on uppin' , this is the foundation to many more colabs, everything in life is basic, just that people make it complicated, Dogs

[P. Mortuus]

Yeas read "what's life" i have put more deep thought in that

[P. Mortuus]

Also, Carry on with feeds, Uppin'

[P. Mortuus]

Also, Don't expect Pak ta retaliate with all shitty comments an all, cause i believe in right of say, so am still flowin eazy, ma Dogs

[EvOLuTioN]

bwahah.
all good.
thanks for props.
me and him arent online at same time to make everything perfect.
but u know my deal
as true as mikkyd's bein a healthy meal.
lol

OM, meaing open mic. like kareoke.
no turnin back, baby!

what you say, when you say it, however you say it, whenever you wanna,
most likely the after effects of smoking too much marajuwanna...

good stuff...

gotta wait till tomorrow to get Pak's oppinions.
always can edit. lol

Ey Dat... U ever think about seeing a psyciatrist??? I STRONGLY ADVISE YPU TO DO SO...lmao

[DATBOIP]

Ey Dat... U ever think about seeing a psyciatrist??? I STRONGLY ADVISE YPU TO DO SO...lmao

nah, i got better shit to do with my money.
like buy beer, and shit from wal-mart.
bought foglights for my car yesterday...
even went back in, and bought screwdrivers.
installed in on spot baby!


anywho, more comments! thnx

[Nan]

it was good, you know comin wit a new topic, but it wasnt makin sense in some parts , also i say fix the flow of it, cause it was off in some parts, you aint gotta throw college level vocab to the piece, but raise the readin level up, nam sayin?

good drop tho, keep em comin

[DATBOIP]

right, nan, nawatimean?
yup.
keep em commin. lol

[J-Hova]

yo it was ok flow was ok so was the structure

[Lock-Down]

yo it was aight ya just need to work on ya structure, ya need to come with better word play, just keep tryin and yall make it aight

[DATBOIP]

preciate it, ill take any helping hands.

keep em commin...

bump-bum-bump it up...