wat its like round my way

[Bugzy Vendetta]

the streets is talkin and i aint talkin bout hov
im talkin bout shit is going down and the whole hood knows
huslas switching they stashes, while they flickin they ashes
huggin the block,eyes wide open,gripping they rachards
people say we got chronic depression
but we only depressed when the chronic aint present
stress from the reality of life got me blowin the essence
back 2 back blunts smoking the first while im rollin the second
and the celtics aint the one shootin in BOSTON
if you're used to runnin your mouth get used to a coffin
breakin buds, rollin phatties, loading snubs and totin matties
niggas will leave you stretched out like an old school caddie

[CrazyCarl]

You showed some potential with this. It doesn't meet the line requirement though. Wordplay was alright, got room to elevate, but on the right track. You had a little internal rhyming. You could have kept longer outer multis going. With a topic you're comfortable with, it helps to go into detail. If you add to this, work on being descriptive.
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[wyte boy$]

it was ok.......
jus drop 2 links man so it wont close......
and work on ur lyrics a lil

[Duece D]

it was decent drop...few more lines woulda helped.

and got those links so this doesnt get closesd

do ya thang homie

[J-RIPPA]

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Joined: Aug 2005
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it was decent drop...few more lines woulda helped.

and got those links so this doesnt get closesd

do ya thang homie
^AGREE

[AG/BETTA THAN U]

keep spitin that fire bv forget these prepies talkin bout good elevation an shit

[Charlie~Manson]

this is fire my nig i agree wit the more lines but overall u came off especially the line about chronic depression the one line made the whole verse 4 me plus i feel u on that one but keep droppin and u cant neva elevate enough ~respect

[sILLable]

need to elevate..your gettin better though..rhyme scheme is slowly but surely gettin better....your wordplay and vocab is gettin better..all in all i liked this better than some of your previous posts but you still need to elevate...yur gettin better though..and keep droppin as well.~1~

[ak-mixa]

home boi...............u showed potential and u weren't bad at all and I think dis piece would be a lot better if u would of finished making it longer.......but it didn't really seem rushed or nuttin.....but it's coo I liked it cause I can relate to hood shit.....cause I'm from da ghetto..........I give it a 6/10.....considering it's not complete...but keep elevating..and you'll get betta in no time.