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    One In The Same

    ONE IN THE SAME

    Verse 1:
    From the moment I set eyes I was engaged by her beauty
    Enamored by the thought of her being with yours truly
    Starting off slow with some conversing and friendship
    Babbling endless, she was who my time was being spent with
    I could tell she was different as our true feelings emerged
    Finally made it official and I couldn't put my feelings in words
    Had our own language and everything ended in no I miss you more
    Waiting for this moment as I knew there was pure bliss in store


    Man what a bitch, hell it took you months to pull that
    Go ahead try as you might, but you can't fool facts
    Spent your time writing this chick a little passionate verse
    Next thing you know we'll see the kid grasping a purse
    Star's just being real as the truth attacks and it hurts
    She had your balls and you was the one packing a skirt
    So don't get it twisted kid you let your feelings take over
    Should just get the wig and make it official with a make over

    Chorus:
    Living the struggle with your feelings just slain
    The heartache, the pain, it's both one in the same

    Standing back knowing who we're wanting to blame
    Great minds think alike, we're both one in the same (x2)

    Verse 2:
    Months went by and our relationship starts to flower
    Spending every minute of every hour thinking about her
    Days and nights spent just holding her in my arms tight
    Living on cloud nine as I'm taking the charmed flight
    Her vision a perfection with each curve greatly placed
    Getting to know every inch, above or below the waist
    Being head over heels before we played with thin gloves
    And it was no thing to wait cause, I was in love


    Shut the fuck up and don't say nothing, not a word
    You were going down south quicker than a flock of birds
    Being left frustrated when she didn't reciprocate the favor
    You were severing her up and getting stiffed like a waiter
    Yo it's funny to me how you were playing the dummy to be
    To love blind to know the truth like it was to sunny to see
    So go ahead and say your strong and have it set to be filed
    Just remember this ain't the survivor remix with Destiny’s Child

    Chorus:
    Living the struggle with your feelings just slain
    The heartache, the pain, it's both one in the same

    Standing back knowing who we're wanting to blame
    Great minds think alike, we're both one in the same (x2)

    Verse 3:
    Now over a year has passed as we start to grow apart
    Agonizing over the lost and dealing with a broken heart
    We Just lost a spark as I come to terms with the outcome
    Found something special, now I'm living without none
    She used to miss me so much, couldn't wait to see me
    Then she disappeared like the chick from I Dream Of Genie
    I can't believe it's finally over and I'm stressed with how
    Used to have her but memories is all I'm left with now


    You was getting fucked like you couldn't keep ya ass together
    And you believed her when she said she wanted it to last forever
    It was all a game as she stewed the pot with her kettle full of lies
    Yet you didn't know you were dealing with the devil in disguise
    Had you wrapped around her finger as she was twisting ya mind
    I'm starting to feel bad, I mean how am I gonna be dissing the blind
    Should have know it was over when the attitude starts to switch
    I ain't talking Will Smith but you got done in by a heartless bitch

    Chorus:
    Living the struggle with your feelings just slain
    The heartache, the pain, it's both one in the same

    Standing back knowing who we're wanting to blame
    Great minds think alike, we're both one in the same (x2)

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...1&page=2&pp=15
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=206453
    Last edited by MonStar; July 13th, 2005 at 04:42 AM

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    I didnt think that i was really gonna like this piece but i did.
    Im not a big fan of the love'relationship type pieces there normally corny.
    But this piece was different you mixed in some dark thoughts to make the piece stand out plus you was talking from different perspectives which is hard to do in a story rap. Youve got skills at story telling, the imagery was good, the destinys child line was good, the flow was pretty nice throughout the piece, good work.

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    This drop looks set for audio, I liked the chorus, and the changes of voices. The I was in love...Shut the fuck up, transition had me laughing. You had internal and multi syllable rhyming which kept it interestin also. The wordplay in there also livened it up. I liked the concept, you got their tones across well.

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    Thanks for the feedback...upping for some more...

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    ...upping...

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    Pretty nice drop. I liked the flow. The emotion was nice. I was feeling the imagery and description. Keep posting.

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    i liked how you had a split personality or some friend tellin you love is bullshit, whatever that was supposed to be, i tihnk the hook/chorus could have been a little better but other than that it was a good piece, wasn't really feelin the destiny's child line, but it doesnt mess wit the song too much. overall good. 7 out of 10 lyrics

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    yea it was good but you need to be more agressive and tkae you enimies down in it but youll be ok later on.

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