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    Ill Techniquez
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    Still Missin' You

    Still Missin’ You

    Wanted to preserve you memory, once you had left
    And then I observed the theory of life after death
    Look to the sky, shout to you above from below
    Imagine you cry, lonely, waitin on me to follow
    Feelin empty, hollow, thoughts of a better tomorrow
    God grant me entry, cos im feelin too much sorrow
    Would you want me to? You always told me to shine
    Couldn’t live yours thru, ill live your life thru mine
    And then im cryin, with some more suicidal intentions
    Like im slowly diein, took one of my vital possesions
    Thought id answered questions, still good die young
    Were a short blessin, incomplete like day witout sun
    You were unique to me, like a hood hand witout a gun
    Now incomplete too, see, like a good man witout a son

    Sorry to wake you, but im still missin’ you
    Was my mistake too, and im still missin’ you
    When I blink, open and im still missin’ you
    Then I think thoughts of you, still missin’ you

    Visions of you, an angel sent down for 17 short years
    Purpose to miss you, to be remembered by your peers
    Out comes more tears, as I remember my last words
    When I didn’t care, mistaken pain was on my nerves
    And then I wonder, is that all of me you remember
    Exstinguished an ember, don’t remember that temper
    Doubt you would, how can others continue witout you
    Doubted I could, so left the hood abandoned the crew
    But you know this, in my dreams when you were told
    Tellin me not to, I cant help but miss, you were my soul
    Told me mournin is getting old, move on you’re an adult
    Atleast I could make peace, you sayin it wasn’t my fault
    So ill move on, let you get ya beauty sleep, but don’t forget
    Keep this song, when I get there itll be like we jus meet

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    Ill Techniquez
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    Last edited by Ill Techniquez; July 1st, 2005 at 12:44 AM

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    Ill Techniquez
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    feed please.

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    Get new links. You're not supposed to use links more than once, and those are from over a month ago.
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    Yung Caesa
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    Good rhyme dawg... Nice rhyme scheme, good concept and emotion, and a flow that was bang on...
    I'd say improve ur vocab and you'll be hot, as well as similies, metas n multis cuz they help an awful lot, depending on the topic...I know I always give that advice but it's honestly the most important thing I've cum across. Keep elevatin and improvin...
    Gud job.

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    Ill Techniquez
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    Quote Originally Posted by Jekyll
    Get new links. You're not supposed to use links more than once, and those are from over a month ago.
    aight my bad

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    this was deep and emotional . the hook had me going...........nice ryhme schme dude . I agree with cesea .....use more vocabulary and this will be tight as what . use more symilies and metas and you'll be aight . keep elevating

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    thanks for that bro. more feed please.

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