Armageddon's Anti-Thesis

[>Inertia>]

Vibrant depictions of gory dictions
Bless me with anguish and emotional friction.
Ectoplasm spurts with spasms, fissures spit flames
Mental chasms cause me to stab him like its a game
Unsheathed anguish hangs from the hips for me to brandish
Cleaving until life is vanished, Satan planned this.
Turmoil takes its tole, surrounded by the harlot of
midsummer, cuz my heart is hollowed canvas,
and satanaic disposition is the drummer.
Crumbled edifices torched amongst skeletal remains
Dagger of misdeed perched atop humanities veins
Waiting to plunge amonst the river of styx
Armageddon painted as brimstone and hell...
but not man-created painting can match this.
And yet..

Atlas bearing humanity perched atop solitary rock
Non-Chalant and chilling..mellowing to
80's new wave rock.
Summer breeze kisses the feathered tips of his hair.
Horsemen of apocalypse or reigning on earth..
yet he doesn't seem to care.
Engulfed by crescendos of lyrical ballad and tempo
The prophet warned of doom's open doorway,
he didn't know what it meant tho.
Golden shields upon his temples, absorbing
riffs and beats in the mental
Unaware of humanity's demise-
he doesn't know where they went still.
Lone crusader of the night unaware of
Adam and Eve's plight, becoming one with the dust and night
with only musical bridges to fight cuz God turned off the light.

And it became one of
humanity's most unexpected fears
When the last living man
died unaware, with Zeppelin blasting in his ears.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...25#post2502225
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...44#post2502244

[Swift Death]

I really enjoyed this verse... although it was done on a played topic, i thought you pulled it off quite well... Alot of multies kept the rhyme sounding good and it also had alot of good internal rhyme keeping the rythm going fast. Overall this was a very good peice the wordchoice was exceptional espoecially like ending and the end part of the seconde stanza stood out in my eyes... very good work here mac specially for being rusty.

[>Inertia>]

upping

[Chris Black]

The last for lines, pretty much, made this piece. This is a nice original concept, unlike most of the pieces I've been reading, lately. I felt the flow could have been a little better but, beside that, this was a solid piece. Keep writing, homie.

Hit this up if you get a chance:
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=197814

[>Inertia>]

Upping.

[Vertikle]

Good concept, nice imagery and good vocab, I liked this piece alot.Felt the flow and rhyme scheme worked perfectly together, better than most MC's try to do.........

pz 9/10

[>Inertia>]

uppppppppppppppppppppp

[Kaptin]

cool shit, the imagrey if this verse is wat got me, all the multi's helped with the flow, this is the kinda stuff i dont mind reading over and over again, the last line was pretty cool that really wrapped it all up...

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