Yo man, i got skills from here to the GhETTo,
i pop gats on ya punks and buy stilletos.
for my hoes, im a strait up paimp!
hold ya pants nigga imma take a claimp!
im a gangsta, and OG reppin the west coast.
my flows is wild and my ships a boat!
what do yall think? im gonna send it in to the local rap station
peace yo.
dog, you CANT be serious, u gonna send it to the local rap station? I hope you tryin to be sarcastic or sumthin...I aint just tryin 2 diss you or anything....but first of all, I already wrote as much as you and its kinda sad when yur feeback is longer then your peice....but for reel, you gotta come with somethin stronger than that, even for a freestyle...Im sayin anybody could rhyme words, if you gonna just rhyme words and tag sentences along wit em....dont post em up and ask for feedback....if yur a beginner then my bad....but assuming by the title, I was expectin something harder....I aint tryin 2 put u down individually cuz other dudes got mad weak lines but at least they try.....what u wrote look like u mistaked yur computer for your toilet bowl....try harder man....be creative...you know you dont wanna be no lame ass rapper...
Lol @ sending it to a local rap station
^ lol @ his feed bein longer then your whole verse..
anyways, dont forget your links..
this was wayy to short, try a different topic, something meaningful... this is all i can really say for now.. make it longer next time
Oh....my god...
Im speachless at the ammount of tallent Ive just bore witness too.
For real man,you need to improve.
Even beginners are better then that.
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Molding the intangible ethreal fabric of a glossopalatinus marzipan....
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NOTHING WILL STOP MY ACHE!
I WANNA FUCK ALL THIS SHIT I HAVE TO TAKE!!
My enlightened state of mind my desperate DECISION!
I find serenity in so much,pain,
Slit my wrists and let my body,drain,
Clench my fists and let my life slip,away,
Cuz' only she can stop all this,pain,
And only she can stop this fucking,pain,
I just wish these sick thoughts would..GO AWAY
And fucking stop the ache thats down deep inside.-Suicide of The Cephalo Pictorial
When Im down to my last breath,
Im gonna climb the empire state building-
Get to the last step,and still have half left.-Eminem
Keep writing to elevate. Check out the tutorials if you are serious about getting better, and wanting to get involved with a radio station. Put more time into your lyrics and post something longer to get a better feel for your flow.
r u fucking kidding me...lol that shit was whack!
Elevate man, a lot.
Try a subject and some decent rhymes, try and not freestyle and think about what you'r producing here.
Peace.
well,i think you should go to a psychologist or something...but the local radio station is a good alternative also.
lol@this guy...
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lol when he goes to the radio station and says that they'll be like gtfo lmao!
yo i don know what you PIZUNKS are talking about. all my friends say i got skillz so yall can just back off got it? immamake it BIG$ and yall are gon' be like "yo man this guys good" and ill show you who got the magic stick.
yall a bunch of wack bunch of foos.
PAICE fags
^^^lol ur lame nigga...wakk azz rhymez...hahahahhaa
FUCK YA'LL
Man you guys are poser, from ya heads to ya feet man!
Yall don’t belong here, you belong on sesame street man!
Im like oscar the grouch, scram! Youre flows are crummy!
Check out the book I wrote: its called hip hop for dummies.
Whats a matter are you pissed off at me? Don’t pull a gat on me!
Don’t pull that crap with me. You don’t belong on tv.
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^he should've said better "my flow is a river and my ships a boat."
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