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Thread: Windowsill of Abolished Hope.

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    Windowsill of Abolished Hope.

    (make it so this is up for march nominations )

    Jan 4, 2005

    I'm filled with so much poor prestige....
    Grassroots leave with the death of a tree
    -My family, truely abusive and narcistic
    Have left me feeling so pessimistic.
    It's simple logistic, expressing your mind's ways
    But what do you do...
    When people don't give a fuck what you say?

    Squeeze the life from my veins.
    Show me how to bleed again.
    Leave me on the windowsill to cope.
    And fill the world with abolished hope.


    Jan 23, 2005

    My views on life are: so intense and suspenseful.
    I look at the rights, but what's left seems insightful.
    The cup isn't half full, it's half empty.
    Truely God hates me I'm NOTHING!
    Are these the views you tried filling me with pappy?
    Look at me I'm daffy!
    The smallest stick or stone could even snap me!

    So squeeze the life from my veins.
    Show me how to bleed again.
    Place me on the windowsill to cope.
    And fill the world with abolished hope.


    Feb 28, 2005

    I feel so cynical it's critical.
    I'm feeling suicidal still...
    But there's still hope, I can change.
    Arrange a talk so I won't be so derranged.
    If you ever cared about my life..
    Or maybe just want some time to kill,
    You can find my letters... on the windowsill.


    -Mitchell Barr (Nov. 9, 1988 - Mar. 7, 2005)

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...54#post2124454
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...83#post2124483
    Last edited by hollywoodnt; February 28th, 2005 at 09:59 PM Reason: link

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    This is great this was excellent man this was...this was real good man..i liked the words used and imagery the snap by a twig was good and funny
    thanx for hittin up the feel it in the air...
    this is a overall great piece...

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    uppinggg

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    what joka said

    word

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    up because nobody looks at my om's or battles (i have 3 open people, 3 of which should be won by now.)

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    This was dope cause it was different kind of like a lifeline rhyme but i thought it could of been longer the verse was to short.
    There was just real feelings in there thats what stood out to me.
    The structure and vocab were fine but work on the flow.

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