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    Feel it in the Air

    chorus:Same as in Beens

    Verse1:
    My body feels differntly...eyes blink slower..vision blurred
    I say my own name..takes time to register..sound comes it sounds slurred
    Ear drums rumble from outside noises..peek out the window no one there
    Check the bedrooms..only my girl and my daughter lay there..no one else here
    My blood pressure seems higher...veins are pulsing..arm turns red
    Heart beat stops..grab chest feel a thump...what's going on..mud treads
    As i fall onto the bed...I should relax...but my feet seem heavier..like stones
    What's that?I see shadows outside my windows..who's around my home
    I walk to living room..The air seems thicker here...i grab the clips
    Now to find my twin pistols...wait till i find it I'ma sink em like ships
    Torpedos coming there way?Nah atomic bombs...Fake my way to sleep
    Day Dream of the things i heard Ray Charles say..LIfe is similar to sleet
    Everything you go through comes down hard...in the future on you
    Visions change I'm now in a room surrounded by niggas..what an i do
    I reach for my daughter..she's crying tears drop like Purple Rain
    Slowly..too dramatic,My wife comes for her..I've lost it all nothing to gain
    Turn my back stand up and pray to God they spear me...I'm not scared
    Honestly I just want to be here for my wife n daughter..nothing else feared
    But their safety...I wake up..what's just happened my body is stiff
    Like tree's paralyzed i can't move...wind blows who's that..I've been jiffed
    Finally my body moves....It was all in my mind....My eyes are normal now
    A knock at the door someone calls my name now its normal not slowed down
    It's my mans..he has a gun..he's been tapping my whole life..I kiss my wife bye
    My daughter knows i love her I'll never leave her side...My soul wont burn in hell
    95% of ya'll expected me to die....5% saw my soul dangling in God's hand
    0.00% saw me tell em to leave i stopped that life...now i live grand
    No more air to disturb my heart..lungs are clear my daughtr is proud
    My wife...knows who i am so i dont have to tell ya she said i ove you aloud
    Life Is 10% What Happens To You;
    90% How You React To It.

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    yo man that verse was ill, good structure and wordplay, vocab was aight man, 8/10 yo keep droppin

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    hey, that was fuckin sick. structure sucked but i feel i can relate to your verse greatly. sometimes you just get the feeling that something is wrong...and you think its your imagination. until the one time something is wrong. i loved the story and imagery used. good vocab and flow.

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...08#post2124408

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    You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

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