Last Man Freestyle...

[Wh@T]

Basically, I wrote this as if I'm the last person on earth...

Black skies, detract eyes from the light ahead//
Things looking gloomy, eyes only seeing blood red//

Streets filled with slain bodies, vengeance in mind//
Time ticking by as I struggle to survive//

Rivers run with blood, dust deserts still stand//
Sun scorches the earth, leaving green grass tan//

Destruction the main purpose, cruelity filling his head//
Prophets wrote the truth in scriptures, but no one ever believes what they read//

Just one man could have stopped it, make a difference//
I could have stopped it, but I didn't know I had it until I missed it//

United we stand and divided we fall//
The Us conquered by it's own power, the earth gone, all and all//

Barren lands and red water, one left breathing//
Here I stand and with this gun and this bullet, this world I' leaving//

[Spit]

ya all right fo reall keep ya head up n think smart add some vocab... better multis..
overall u had it there but musta not used it properly.... stay up bro...

[AbusivE]

was a nice detailing peice, came creative with the topic...but i wasnt likin your structure..not as many multis as there could be, vocab and flow were strong... but overal this was a nice peice, emotion was good... nice drop!

[Ike Ill.]

I liked this a lot. Exotic at times and very imaginative/creative piece.

Nice ideas and concepts in it, multis were excellent... had a good story line and I liked the view of the world. just a good piece.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show....php?p=2116338
^ Honestly... I know its long but please.

[noncentz]

has room for improvement but this had alot of solid talent and was consistant kept interest so no doubt this was worth the read.