Open Mic

[Jae Hott]

im from b-lo but i handle my bizz in the south//
where if you talk to much youll get blasted in ya mouth//
catch slugs in ya back while you fuckin ya spouce//
the only time you hold hammers is when you fixin ya house//
i been hot since TLC labled broke niggaz scrubs//
i blow minds like bulbs//
and leave shirts and rags red like bloods//
poppin fake thugs wit thick slugs//
dont sale nicks and dimes it straight dubs//
i sip bub and twist bud while im gettin my back rubbed//
choppin up bricks of hard white thats the length of my bath tub//
i spit bars that i should get metals for//
niggaz spit punch lines,false acts and metaphors//
spittin is light work to me its real easy//
im here to get money fuck bitches and talk greasy//
dont floss around me if you dont wonna get robbed//
charm chunky wit thick studs like corn ona cobb//
i run up bare face ready to blaze the klobb//
you get shook to pull out and pop yaself inthe nuts like cheddar bob//
niggaz show us respect like the black mob//
cuz my flow is like whoa like mya and black rob//

LETS GET IT POPPIN JAE A.K.A YOUNG BREEZ
DROP NIGGAZ TO THEY KNEES SPITTIN FIRE WIT EAS
IM GONE STAY G.Y TIL I DIE NIGGA WHY WOULD I LIE
AINT NO OPSTICALS BETWEEN ME AND THE SKY
I FROWN UP AT.. ALL YALL STUNNERS
BISS AVE FOOT SOLDIER A.K.A YOUNG GUNNERS

[Ndustrial Minded]

Not too bad man.....good drop it wasn't that bad....
keep droppin.....i'm a little too lazy to give a real big bunch fo feed
i'll follow this up tomorrow when i'm not lazy......
hit up my new OM i just posted called "Lost"

[Mistral]

You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

[Jae Hott]

You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

^^ what u mean ?

[Stuff'd Aminol]

you need to give feedback to 2 open mics and post the links to the feedback you gave,

anyway, i got two open mics in my sig that are getting slept on in case you want to reply to them

but this was ok for a beginner, just some advice though, the whole braggioco gangsta bit is kind of played so i think it would be best if you tied to expand your talent in the sense of imagery and creativity in your lyrical content, also try and work on your flow and structure

[Jae Hott]

you need to give feedback to 2 open mics and post the links to the feedback you gave,

anyway, i got two open mics in my sig that are getting slept on in case you want to reply to them

but this was ok for a beginner, just some advice though, the whole braggioco gangsta bit is kind of played so i think it would be best if you tied to expand your talent in the sense of imagery and creativity in your lyrical content, also try and work on your flow and structure

^alright ill take yo advice into concideration

[demolish]

its pretty good.
try flexin a new style. im not talkin shit but try spittin a new style, cuz everybody has da gangsta rap style, and everybody has da same flow, and da same "im a balst you" shit dats just being repeated.
overalll its pretty good though.
Just try havin originality.
its pretty good just keeep workin hard.
at least it wasn't wack. you deserve da props you earn, so maddd props but ya need more creativity.
peace.

[Jae Hott]

thanks for yo opion and honesty i need that

[Na~Ledge]

Not to bad. A lot of people at this site don't really get into the thug shit though, so a little advise. If you are going to do that make sure you come up with some ill vocabulary and an original or abstract way of sayng it. But overall not a bad starting place. Keep elevatiing. Holla

P.S. Check out my drop Triple Homicide in OP. I have a link to it in my sig

[Mistral]

No Links.

And if you dont know how to leave links. Just leave the persons name and title of the piece then.