Divine Divergence (Lyric and un_conscious_one )

[Laureate]

Unconscience - Itallics
Subconscience - Regular


Divine Divergence

the east wind howls, forcing each green blade to bend
yet dogs urination leaves a mocking trend
a certain blood flows, hidden deep within a graze
its vein to thick for a pretending padre to save
lobes of string bring pre-constructed cognition
only developing some other false omniscience

Trees sway in the wind, swirling thoughtful whims
Leaves twirl on the breeze of pondering hymns
As I look up to the sky, sun streaming through clouds
My soul trembles at His gaze, always peering down
I’m a borderline Catholic, A Sunday school teacher
Feeding knowledge to children, a studying preacher

black scars lay behind forcing beliefs through whipping
a split sea wall held, miracles they wish to be mimicking
blind white eyes can hide somewhere inside
their book towords heaven, revealing a false guide
Led me into confusion, so I know where to run

My soul is possessed by the spirit of One
I believe in Him, and religion must follow suit
Broken record in my head, won’t allow it to mute
The Divine shines light on all who choose to listen
Wisdom penetrates the walls of Hell’s prison

forced thought creates a leapords running bite
which will in time bite the preachers wage
and as their moribound chains leave mind’s sight
Light will lumify from freedoms gaze

Invisible ceilings keep my ego tightly devout
Enclosed by colored windows and lightning rods
Obese faith in cramped quarters leaking out
Keep me safe from where the demons trod

dilute dreggy ink as it drips and leaves a page
White emptiness satisfies urges until old age
And its unique passage…lends reasons to stay

I stand strong, until the ground gives away
I pray to the Heavens, hoping someone hears it
I’m afraid of ghosts, except the holy spirit

in an isolated field I’ll burn the book of hell
a solo mind nourishment till death I’ll dwell

One without the other, chances are remote
Exhaling toxins, as smoke rises with my hopes

and cry for a angel floating with maverick wings

Descending for believers, purifying havoc’s Kings

blood edged knives,
................................caked in the lost faith
Fate produces and creates,
..................................bodies hung in drapes

[Laureate]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=170726
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=170017

[gem n eye/*DUO*]

I liked how this was structured.....how it dropped from 6 to 5 then 5 to 4 and so on.
Being a fellow believer in God, w/e people take it as, I liked this verse. I liked the battling positions, the highlighted inner struggle. Written very poetically in style. But here and there it was just to lah di dah and didnt have that flow that captured you, y'know? Youd start reading it and would drift off into the words as if you couldnt wait to finish, Im sure you know what Im talking about. It had great meaning and all, but nothing really jumped out of it and grabbed you, got your intention or wowed you. It was just kinda lulla byed.....but I like it.

[Center Sight]

the whole thing was kool.. i was feelin the regular font more tho, as far as rhyme scheme n flow, which makes anything u spit sound better.. good use of vocab and some nice imagery.. nice back n forth OM.. few downs.. but the ups were good enough for u to forget about it.. all in all nice piece, hit this up plz
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=170305

[Tha DraGoN]

yo that was nice u got some reaal skill talkin bout our lord and savior holla back

[Foreshadow]

Damn this was a nice piece. I liked how both of you had such good details and such good imagery. Un you did a nice job I wasnt expecting this type of work from you maybe because I havent seen you post before but this collab was a real good one and it should be hall of fame.

[Laureate]

everyone who said "yo that was nice u got some reaal skill talkin bout our lord and savior holla back"
is a moron...and obviously didnt read and/or understand the drop

[Laureate]

Dont get discouraged

[Bounce]

I liked the tone of this peice, it was done in a way that made the reader feel at ease.
I do not like the strucutre, but that is me being picky and shit, I thought the meter would have been captured better in a slightly altered strucutre. Very poetic yet didn't sit on my mind as a poem does. The imagery was very good lyric, you did better in that area than anything else. Don't ge me wrong the entire peice was a damn good one, just the imagrey stood out more than anything else. Another solid peice from one of RB's up and coming elite... Well done, keep dropping the hotness bro.

-Bounce

[Laureate]

Thanks Bounce