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  1. #1
    Newbie
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    KeyStyled ReturN

    I’m Back


    Chorus (x2)

    OoooooO

    Coz This Is My Return To Rap
    I’ve Been Gone For A While Better Watch Your Back
    Coz This Is My Return To Rap
    I’m Somethin You Can’t Handle, You Better Step Back

    Verse

    I’ve Returned I’m Here Better Drown Your Sorrow
    I’m Comin Up Hard, You Ain’t Gonna See Tomorrow
    Your Shirt’ll Be Blooded You Face Left Bruised
    With Keys On The Board, The Only Weapon I Use
    You’ll Be Desperate And Hyperventilating When You Feel The Words
    I Ain’t Jeff Wayne But This Is War Of The Worlds
    Trust Will Be The Last Thought On Your Mind
    When Your Home Boys Realise Im Back, They’ll Be On Your Behind
    Keep A Smile And Show A Front, That’s The Only Way You’ll Survive
    When The Punches Hit Your Chest The Medics Won’t Even Have You Revived

    Chorus (x2)

    OoooooO

    Coz This Is My Return To Rap
    I’ve Been Gone For A While Better Watch Your Back
    Coz This Is My Return To Rap
    I’m Somethin You Can’t Handle, You Better Step Back

    (Outro)

    This Is Just A Warm Up Haha, Sum Bitches Gonna Get Hit, I Aint Namin No Names But Be Ready….
    You'll Be Desperate And Hyperventilating When You Feel The Words, I Ain't Jeff Wayne But This Is War Of The Worlds

  2. #2
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    aight this is a decent piece for being new. good chorus and everything. it had weak vocabulary...need to up that part of ya game a lil bit. make a good storyline and ur set. keep elevatin

  3. #3
    I'm Bakk!
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    This was iight.....nothin special.......stay up...

  4. #4
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    You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

  5. #5
    The True Psycho of RB
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    This was decent nothing more, the structure was ok the flow was average vocab was aight, it was too short to really give a lot of feedback, keep writing and write something longer overall a decent drop.

    hit this up.
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=167404

  6. #6
    CelticOne
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    sounds like somethin 50 would write dog...now don't get me wrong, if you new to rappin then damn you got it goin on, but if you just new to the site and you been spittin for a minute then this just aint gon cut it. for one, there was only one verse..the hook came strait from the recyclin bin and the vocab was just average at best, just keep workin on expandin your vocab, get better at metaphorically speakin, you know? if you out for the real shit then label execs'll look at somethin like this and just walk away. now dont take it as im tryna put you down, but im tryna put things in perspective for ya

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