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    A Dead Love

    Theism, Interrupted…

    Youthful exuberance, an insouciant nuisance
    When true sense can only be gained
    Through years of pain and tears that stain
    Your whole entity, as enemies drain your soul’s energy
    Your coexisting synergy with mortal and infinity
    A portal to divinity eludes your vicinity
    Enemies intercede and force hope’s concession
    A breeze in the trees is your soul’s dispossession
    It’s a sole indiscretion in a life of misdirection
    For a simple misconception, my source of present aggression
    When I used to believe in creationism, Adam and Eve
    And a world populated by a single man’s seed
    And a populace vindicated by one man’s deed
    A life of confusion, intrusions and disillusions
    Problems begat problems, but I found the solution

    I used to be a Christian and I loved the Lord
    I used to fear omission and now I just ignore
    I used to be in Love with a life of piety
    Hated by my friends, and spurned by my society
    I was drunk with religion, now I see w/ sobriety
    And my joy increases an’ never ceases in propriety

    A dedication to abstinence and prayin’ arcaic sayins
    So my destination would lack the burning sensations
    Many generations of man engaged in the dance
    Disbelief in chance assigning reason to circumstance
    Many slain in vain under the guise of a Holy lance
    Cause many claim the same vision of sand as a Holy Land
    One of many inconsistencies from supposed divinity
    No less a religion than political machine
    Forgiveness for a fee, from petty to the obscene
    Indulgence and inquisition, the sordid history written
    A sorted misery of ethical prison, mysterious missions
    Bleeding statues and other asinine visions...
    I used to believe, but I’ve divorced without conviction
    Grant a good riddance to my enjoyment’s affliction

    I used to be a Christian and I loved the Lord
    I used to fear omission and now I just ignore
    I used to be in Love with a life of piety
    Hated by my friends, and spurned by my society
    I was drunk with religion, now I see w/ sobriety
    And my joy increases an’ never ceases in propriety

    And to the epitome of the idiocy…
    That one man, could deliver all to divinity
    That one God gave a damn about our infinity
    That one mob could shed the blood of a God
    It’s a bloody façade…*begins to cry*…the sadness is why I sob…
    That so many drift in ignorance, just searching for penance
    Not enjoying life without a burden of resentment
    Because they feel necessity to grovel for repentance
    The sentence in this instance is devastating….
    Secular Humanistic Leaders are celebrating…
    The edict is instituted by the European Union
    Open season on Christians with free guns for the shootin…
    Hitler solved the wrong problem with his “final solution”

    I used to be a Christian and I loved the Lord
    I used to fear omission and now I just ignore
    I used to be in Love with a life of piety
    Hated by my friends, and spurned by my society
    I was drunk with religion, now I see w/ sobriety
    And my joy increases an’ never ceases in propriety

    In the future as the Bible predicts…
    The world will be controlled by secular humanists
    And Christians will be relegated to the abyss
    Our relationship with God riding on the River Styx
    We’re already on path and God is growing in wrath
    We’ve regressed since Moses formed a snake w/ a staff
    We’re less than a half wit…God is Love…
    He shared this love with us and we killed it…
    Bittersweet

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    How the fuck do you write a piece that long without getting bored?

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    lamo... ^

    neway nice drop for the most part liked this whole peice. Alot of dope content in this ish really feelin it. neway nice drop stay up...

    Peace...

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    Sublime it looks like you have almost walked over the writing block. I think it would be good for me and you to do a collab together and you know where to find me just drop in the DD forum. But back to your piece, it was well written in your case just coming out of writters block and all. I thought that you did a nice job with what you were trying to say. The details were nice and I was feeling that aspect of your poem. But the only fault that I can point out is that the rhyme scheme seemed a little forced in some places but other then that you did an excellent job.

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    Fuck all da bitches and hoes out thurr sleepin !
    You showed me this over aim DOPE is all i can say, im nominating it for HOF cause its the dopest display of words on the first page 1luv.
    Laying face down in the mainstream.
    Po.Ethics.

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