Dad (Played off Stan-Eminem)

[Genocide`]

dear dad, I called you but you musta missed me
left a message & my number, guess you was too busy
n' I still ain't got that letter you was sposed to give me
you prolly forgot to put a stamp on the envelope
honestly, you coulda took the time to call me though
..on another note, man, your boss sure is a jerk
don't see why he didn't let you e-mail me from your work
your car musta broke down cuz you never came by on the 1st
damn, you must be cursed.. not only you, but me too
anyway dad, i really gotta leave soon
i just wrote today to tell you how much i need you
please dude, pick me up from school tomorrow, we'll have fun
you can be late too, long as you come
dad, i love you.. you're number one
truly yours,
this is your son


[chorus]
i only feel pain and i'm wondering why..
you even say you're gonna call
I wait for your letter to arrive
but there's never any mail at all
even if you got back with mom
i doubt we'd ever talk at all
and it reminds me, that i have no dad,
i have no dad..



More to come.

[G-Money]

i thought this was okay drop .... i mean for playing off stan... but ur probably gonna get hated on cuz i did a drop like this to tupacs how do u want it n every one hated on it... but n e ways i thought it was coo ... i can relate to that shit ...deep... good shit

[Genocide`]

Thanks for the feedback.


http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...99#post1925299

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...30#post1925330

[Prohibit]

Yeah...ok...the first few lines were set out nice,but kinda died a bit..not like were wack but wernt as good as the first two...need deeper techniques..but i thought the idea of running it off stan was cool....not many verses witch kinda spoilt it....structure was thur....flowed well also...
Overall...7/10
Nice Drop man

[Genocide`]

Aiyo, thanks.. but I said at the end of it.. "More to come".. and I will revise it, I typed that up in about twenty minutes or so, I just wanted to get it out there so I can come back to it later.. thanks for ya feed though.. pz.

[Knoxxious]

yeh dawg, thats a nice drop, flowed well, good structure, explainin urself, i also can relate 2 this.keep droppin like this.pz.

[ninjaboy]

u know, even tho you dropped to stan, shit was tight. you hit the beat dead on, so it wasn't like it was a bad copy. nice drop, the chorus was pretty good too, lookin forward to the next verse. hit me back: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=161554