Earth's Man

[Endeva.]

At the birth of planet earth, what came first…
Was it water, or was it the deserts dying thirst
Or the curse of life form, born on that day
To evolve, pollute, destroy and decay…
While killing one another along the way
And now the world’s in disarray, is that ok
Is it fair to say no, but control’s in our hand
We gotta plan to the future and make a stand
Demand more is done to protect the land
We should Respect these sands and oceans
Not dissect the planet with human corrosion
We’re like a potion, a mix of man made disaster
And the antidote to fix it is within our stature
The answer is to master survival faster
Put the past back behind us and find a line
Then don’t overstep it, and follow the signs
Redefine the design, turn the tears to bliss
i mean why reminisce about a place that we miss
It still exists lost in the abyss of modern man
Just we’ve ran too fast and passed why we began
Our master plan, to keep the race going strong
It’s a case of doing right and not doing wrong
Cos we belong to the planet, not the other way round
Pound for pound we’d drown without a sound
From the grounds quake, or a tidal wave
you cant enslave elements they don’t behave
They’ve got the upper hand, we’ve go the other
And If we don’t change, ours will get smothered


http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...61#post1819261
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...64#post1819264

[Endeva.]

Uppin.........................

[Endeva.]

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[SMZ]

flow's coo - scheme's good as usual - you made your point pretty well - I dunno - you just usually come across preachyish to me in your verses - some good lines in this though - I liked your second to last line in particular - keep at it - peace

[noncentz]

u have an ability to makes a person think u a martyr to your topics that is always true

[Go Go Power Rangers]

ooweeee sonin blanx off chests *holla damnit man* .:::.

[DALC]

Very deep.
Emotional.
Nice usegae and connections of words.
The only thing to increase would be rhyme complexity and vocabulary.

[Endeva.]

thnx people, i wasnt going for a coplex scheme i wanted to keep it quite simplistic... but yea thnx guys

[Born To Kill]

Seems this topic is going around alot...

Did everyone rent Day After Tomorrow and watch it together?

Still, good take on it...definately flowed, rhyme scheme was solid, good length.

Decent emotion portrayed, not your best effort though...
I've seen you really grab attention before, this was not that.

But, good message, good piece overall.

Peace

PS: If ya in the mood for freaky shit, go read "Berserk".

[Ace of Aces]

this is prolly my least favorite of all your pieces man. obviously you tried something new, it wasn't bad, but the thing threw me off at first, could hardly belief you wrote it, the meaning and everything was deep. the flow was ok, a bit choppy, and overall, this was a decent piece. nice read man. thanks for you reply. take it eazy and keep writing.

peACE

[Chris Black]

This was cool. Your flow was on. I hate when people make humans seem like a disease on earth though. It's our earth, dammit. Let the ground submit under man's feet. . Anyway, nice piece, homie. Keep writing.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=154709

[Johnny 6-feet]

a morale message here, i found it a tad preachy, but since its more original than most of the stuff on here thats not really an issue. the vocab was a little simplistic but there multis to add to the flow of it. the imagery was ok, i think you should've talked about more specifics/details to improve this. its a good effort overall and a notch above what i usually read here.

keep posting, keep elavating.

if you could rep one of my pieces i'd appricaite it.