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Thread: Let it Bleed(now im serious)

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    Brownmagic808
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    Let it Bleed(now im serious)

    Let it Bleed

    Let it Bleed, between the finite axels of my silent heart
    Switch open the valves of love and close off its hybrid parts
    Now violence starts, pouring through veins like a liquid
    Cold and frozen by the dawn of something that this did
    I've pissed it, away into a celibate world of my lifes desire
    Searchin beyond my transending mine like an entire fire
    My empire's tired by excessant dreams that go unheard of
    Like whispers between birds that hurt what deserve none
    This words done, so let it bleed between minds and bodies
    Drenched into the calamity of casualties, like rust its rotting
    My minds embodied, by your ever-present lust of something
    Turning what was once blood, into my reason for loving...you

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    You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

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    Brownmagic808
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    droped some feed
    i hit up gobys and aces

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    HoPe
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    This was pretty good verse, pretty good for a person that hasn't been here for a while atelast lol. It had good multi's okay vocab, but i liked the imagery to it. keep it up, im lookin forward too more!

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    No, I saw the kind of feedback you left and it wasnt good. Just saying "tyte" just doesnt cut it man.

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