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    being true

    This is everyday, simple and plain living life right in every way
    some may say, perfection is contradictory like hot snow in may
    pray to the unknown, just in case god can save my soul
    controlling the unforseen is impossible is what im told
    many try valiantly to mold minds of better men
    prying them like crowbars opening minds exposin’ them
    imposters posing as prophets manipulating persuasion
    suppose by sayin’ superficial facts are false personification
    aimed at placing poor phoney people on preposterous pedestals
    I will become subject to societal subjection, hear names called
    fall into the depths of a sham, project societies image on what I am, convert my strands
    disband from my true self, completely conform and execute societies popery pompous plan
    I know what I am and understand that I don’t need be like everyone else
    because my family and morals let me determine my own sense of wealth
    now the populous has me in a perpetual paradox
    I can conform or form my own feeble thoughts
    im a haver out having the have-nots, distraught
    projecting plots to punk prejudice Trent Lott
    spots of commercialism delude an honest cost
    got cheap shots running the print shops
    melting pots and theories of coexisting
    formed by the media leave me sinking
    thinking why do we need to be reminded
    blind men findin’ what is visibly ill-minded
    racism, hate, aggression and fear, draw tears
    shoot still photos of grey matter with lost years
    bares the resemblance to propaganda
    red bandanas similar to peeled bananas
    the clothes we were determine what we are inside
    and if everybody were to strip we’d reveal mankind
    we are universally the same in most aspects of life
    yet some segregate depending on damage outside
    why do we care if the skin has a bruise
    accept that they’re flesh is as real as u
    take turns learning from different cultures
    cultivate ways to mold conniving controllers
    order the ones ordering instead of ordering more orders
    visit the borders instead of sorting disorder with mortars
    quarters have two sides alike all things that keep us alive
    best learn both before you judge what to do with our lives
    Last edited by djb; October 29th, 2004 at 05:30 PM Reason: forgot a word
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    You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

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    Good...no real good vocabulary,and a great topic. I was really impressed with this man. Really enjoyed reading it and even though it was kinda long it didn't have any places where i lost intrest. Uppin ur next drop.

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    wow..this is very good..I been to RV and your lightweights..
    rap like there Vets..this was good..

    Vocab isn't very important to me..you suppose
    to CONNECT with the reader..not confuse them..
    so you used a good amount of vocab here..

    not too basic.. not to complex..very good job..fix the structure..

    8/10

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    thanks man yeah i couldn't figure out how to fix the structure. i know that one line seemed extended but i can't seem to find a way to fix it. thanks for the feed though.
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    excellent. simply brilliant. this is how you use your mind. great vocab, great flow, great concepts and vision...loved the line:
    melting pots and theories of coexisting
    formed by the media leave me sinking
    thinking why do we need to be reminded
    blind men findin’ what is visibly ill-minded..
    9/10.

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    common yall it's not that long. uppin for feed.
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    by the way thanks mint. good feed man. i Will return all favors. up
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    Its Was A Hott Piece, I Hope 2 C More Of You Posting Like That

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    yea this def is lyricism at a high level...I'm glad u in my crew...this was a good post...hope to see more of that type of drops...content was good n steady...it all flowed smooth...good job...pz
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    thanks guys. means a lot. uppin.
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    Nice Piece....


    Favorite Lines..

    "pray to the unknown, just in case god can save my soul
    controlling the unforseen is impossible is what im told"

    ^ Very true, these two lines stood out
    the most in your verse, because certain
    individuals I know have actually done
    and spoke of it.

    "spots of commercialism delude an honest cost
    got cheap shots running the print shops
    melting pots and theories of coexisting"

    ^ Nice line, my break down in meaning
    of what you were writing may differ...
    but nice.


    Over all nice piece you brought out
    some very nice points. Maintianed a steady
    flow. Structure needs some work. Good
    vocabulary using words to express what
    you want to bring out....Over all nice piece.

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    Never lost interest, liked what you were talking about, good vocab. Your pretty ill, stay with it.

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