Depths of Thought (Lyric and Mesmerize)

[Laureate]

Depths of Thought

Mesmerize=Normal
Lyric=Italics

A blanket of ecstasy encases me as your arms embrace my waist
Erased reality into a divine dream of loves enchanted place
Embedded beneath your arms as you trace your fingers down my spine
Profound sublime entwined my heart as your benign eyes confine
Your redolence seeps among my breath and lifts me to utopia
Unlocking the gate of my chateau filled with blissful cornucopia
Hoping a night like this will never cease the plateau of its existence
For my subsistence now depends upon your sweet and tender kisses
Your presence is like Gods holiness and I feel so unworthy
Because You’ve healed me in times when life would never grant its mercy
And to lay here in the night with you by my side
Is the place id give my soul for an eternity to reside
Procrastinating the new day for being away from you is dying
I can only hold on to you longer, no getting up and trying
Your words are such a symphony filling me with thankful tears
You send me to tranquility whispering sweet nothings in my ears

Looking deep into your loving eyes, time possesses the key to close them
Attempt to keep my vision focused, determined to cherish every moment
Our hearts beat to the same song, your breathing slows to a steadier pace
Your beautiful figure outlined in the dark, starting to drift off far away
Floating on clouds of dreams in distant lands, elevated above all despair
A smile on your sweet lips, as I kiss them softly with passionate care
My arm serves as your pillow, ignore the sharp tingling as it falls asleep
But I dare not even flinch, for fear of awaking you from your fantasies
Feel your breath glancing off my neck, all troubles take a back seat
Comforting arms surround like seas, providing a deep dense of security
Holding you near to me, is better than anything I could ever imagine
Why do I need to dream, reality is better than anything I could fathom
But tiredness eventually consumes me, I just want to hold what is true
And potentially everyone must sleep, so I might as well dream of you
Cast me off into the night, let our bond grow stronger as I set sail
My lids heavily begin to drop, I set off to join you in your fairy tale

[Laureate]

Links in progress...will edit them here
Kaotic.Theory's I loved you
MC PINACLE'S Self-Portrait

[Laureate]

upp

[Mesmerize]

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[Ace of Aces]

i already dropped feed on this in Poetic Scriptures, i don't know why its bein slept on, this piece is dope, which is why i recommended it for top ten of the month.

nice jobs peepz.

peace

[Kaotic Theory]

top ten is right...
i mean damn,i dont really think i can say anything bad about this peice,mezmerize and lyric makes a dope collab,this had imagery,emotion,excellent structure and i mean the vocab was also on point,,this was hotness,lol its was so good in my opinion that i actually read this twice.....wow
you two keep droppin

[Laureate]

thanks guys

[Rule.]

You guys left me sayin damn.

Here's why.

From the very beginning, all the way until the end, you 2 seemed to successfully connect every word together so it came out so easy to read and everything seemed just to gel together. The rhythm was constantly on point, which made the read easy and able to focus on the meaning rather than having to go back and re-read something written choppy.

The imagery was amazing. So much detail throughout, and sometimes it was packed into one or two words. Both of your choices of adjectives painted this awesome display, and I got mixed feelings sometimes, wondering if you were leading me to see one thing, and then it totally changed. I loved it.

I could tell that Mes knows her vocabulary, it was really strong throughout, entwining her words together to create a steady rhythm. Some people just throw in big complicated words for bonus points, but she used them well to illustrate her picture.

This was one of the best pieces I've read in awhile, and I usually dont drop comments unless its worth commenting on.

This is the type of shit people jack and call it their own.. thats how nice it is. Mad props to both of you, this piece deserves more recognition than its getting.

[Mr. Elixir™]

Top 10.

Whole piece was flawless, from wording to imagery, vocabulary, flow, creativity. You 2 braught this to the next level.

[Laureate]

Thansk Rule, great critique, thanks Mr. Elixir™...upp

[2hot2handle]

damn, great vocab. great job. definetly needs more responses. i think this site needs to be more strict on responses cause im slept on also. It was tight and I think its the first time I actually saw cornucopia in the rap. Nice job definetly not seen. Nothin bad bout it. Needs to be seen more.

[CAMROK]

some really good stuff... & no complaints from my side either..
very poetic all throughout, so I see this as a top 10 in PS
imagery and rhythm to this is the two best aspects in my mind..
vocab along in the imagery, it was amazing..
written beautifully in both verses.. nice flow.. &
this even had emotion...
hit the topic really well, and makes one think.. my kinda piece..

keep up boys n girls.. good job.

[Laureate]

thanks fellas....appreciate it

[NovA - N.E.T]

yo man top ten defo u flipped da switch on dis 1 mann. Ye totally flawless u need 2 get da appreciation ya need 4 dis 1 keep pumpn
Peace
Nova

[Laureate]

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