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    Ponder On This.

    Life consists of turns and twists and dead ends
    Shrouds of mist to clear skies, to foes and friends
    It tends to have ups and downs like a valleys peak
    And some things are spoken, but we don’t speak
    Some things look luscious but are bleak inside
    Like Tectonic plates rubbing some paths collide
    Cos love and hate’s equilibrium, we cant hide
    It’s a divide that balances the world keeping it flowing
    Enough of abstraction now its time to get going…

    You can roam thru life like nomadic wanderers
    Or be sporadic and dynamic or even squanderers
    Some are Conjurers, inventing themselves over
    Jus like the universe and the mighty supernova
    Cos each Persona is unique and our path is too
    We plot a graph, some are similar, but you are you
    Your wrath is your own, and so is your view
    And our revenue is lost when living ends, like life
    Cos we only get one roll of the dice, never twice
    So make your number suffice, don’t divide, multiply
    We speculate to accumulate, we all can if we try
    Who wants to die, not I, but to deny this is a lie
    You can’t defy nature’s laws, but you can open doors
    Cos thru our course some are shut thru our flaws
    And the pain we cause had repercussions thru out
    And will remain on earth, wilting us like drought



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    YO YO
    this was some dope shit dawg
    Very very good vocab in there,we had some good rhymes and shit-
    This was a xtremely good spit man

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    this was wack

    lol

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    thnx, speacially emerge as always a very indepth reply... i didnt get to the end of it, it was too long and tedious... lol....
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    the verse was alright i wasnt really feeling ya topic but you had good vocab and wordplay. Ya flow was tight and ya didnt force any multies so i would give it about an 6/10

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    hmm... I found the piece oddly nice. it rhymed nicely, and the rhyming and flow matched the content pretty well. you didnt really throw any twists in there, just calmly progressed through it. i liked it.
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    This was a decent drop. Good flow. The topic was a bit abstract, and the verse started to wonder after a while. This was still an above average drop. Keep doin' it, homie.

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    Yo it had a good message, and good vocab, but you're flow sucked man. I think in open mic, thats where flow counts the most, but your's sucked man.

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    This drop was kinda hard for me to follow...

    Not the rhyme scheme or flow...
    (real tight, nice multi's)

    More the message.
    WTF?

    I know it's about bettering ourselves.
    Dealing with the enevitable, good topic, seriously.
    But I'm lost or missed the "how to" part of it.
    You started in on math and I hate math, sorry, that's where ya lost me.

    Overall I get it...
    Very good message.
    Sorry I got clouded on one part of it.

    We all need to improve as people.

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