10 lines....
u know when its due...
normal rules apply
g/l
10 lines....
u know when its due...
normal rules apply
g/l
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aight................im just checkin in......................lets get started right now...........
Gen yer essentially retarded,
an its hard not 2 laugh at yer words...
though kid u r deemed as 1 of the best...
at boostin' the self-esteem of herbs
curbed, yer merked more often than not
and its gotta be discouraging, foo...
cuz pathetic's n understatement when u cant make it...
into an imaginary crew
dude, yer going absolutely nowhere
so forget battling, u embarass yerself...
4 u winning's like a snowball n the sense...
that there's no chance in hell
and well yeah, ^ that was a played cliche
but that it dont matter's a worthy summation...
cuz even when dropping fill, 4 yer verse there's still..
'no way out of extermination'
so be patient, and maybe just maybe
u might actually one day throw a punch...
until then Gen putting on yer thinking cap..
the one apropriately labeled dunce
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yo check it....
Fucking Pussy.While you still sucking your mama's nipples.
Bitch thats wack.I ain't laughin'...see my dimples.
Smash ya, Squeeze ya, Pop you like a Pimple.
Too bad cause defeating me ain't that quite simple.
Epithet. ur verse tickeled me and made me laugh.
Your unlikely to make it to the Rap Battle Draft.
Cause you'll neva be a legend or reach the top.
As long as im around im the one you'll have to stop.
me im infinate. rip ur verse into shreds of papah.
Better pray to God, that he'll be here tp save yah.
This is America, but here we don't sign treaties for make peace.
Conquered your home. now putting it up for lease.
Im gone cause me and your girl going toast it up and feast.
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Epithet's verse wasn't that great, but it did have a few decent punches and personals... You started off pretty weak with your verse, but the imagenary crew personal was pretty nice... The snowball line was ok, but as you said played... you followed it up nicely with the personal about his sig which was good... your closer could've been better, but the dunce line was ok.. your flow and structure were good.. just try and use harder punches, and more often and you'll be set
Geno's verse was wack... your flow was off and your structure was bad... the whole full stop thing is gay, it reads like your talking rather than rapping... your lines didn't really diss him that well, some of your shit was corny like the tickled line and the rest was played like the pimple line... your closing line was wack but your 2 lines before it were good, the America line and the punch about the home for lease... you need more stuff like that, some personals and just generally better disses.. and fix your structure up.. check out Extreme Elevation for help..
vote = Epithet
G'luck to both in the future... keep it up and you'll elevate
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Decent Battle so I will break it down...
Epithet
Gen yer essentially retarded,
an its hard not 2 laugh at yer words...
though kid u r deemed as 1 of the best...
at boostin' the self-esteem of herbs
^^ Decent opener... kinda complimentary... if you dont think in depth
curbed, yer merked more often than not
and its gotta be discouraging, foo...
cuz pathetic's n understatement when u cant make it...
into an imaginary crew
LoL That was pretty creative man... good stuff
dude, yer going absolutely nowhere
so forget battling, u embarass yerself...
4 u winning's like a snowball n the sense...
that there's no chance in hell
Played...
and well yeah, ^ that was a played cliche
but that it dont matter's a worthy summation...
cuz even when dropping fill, 4 yer verse there's still..
'no way out of extermination'
^ Wtf was that?
so be patient, and maybe just maybe
u might actually one day throw a punch...
until then Gen putting on yer thinking cap..
the one apropriately labeled dunce
hehe pretty creative.. i liked it
now 4 genocide
Fucking Pussy.While you still sucking your mama's nipples.
Bitch thats wack.I ain't laughin'...see my dimples.
Smash ya, Squeeze ya, Pop you like a Pimple.
Too bad cause defeating me ain't that quite simple.
^ O.K Opener.. could use some work.. seemed a lil played...
Epithet. ur verse tickeled me and made me laugh.
Your unlikely to make it to the Rap Battle Draft.
Cause you'll neva be a legend or reach the top.
As long as im around im the one you'll have to stop.
^ Meh.. not bad...
me im infinate. rip ur verse into shreds of papah.
Better pray to God, that he'll be here tp save yah.
This is America, but here we don't sign treaties for make peace.
Conquered your home. now putting it up for lease.
^ Pretty creative.. i like!
Im gone cause me and your girl going toast it up and feast.
^ LOL out of the blue closer but i like it... genocide is a housewrecker...hehe
All in all you guys both had good flow/structure
Genocide had harder hitting punches and personals so he gets the vote.
GOod battle holmes!
Vote Genocide
Epithet...you have a weird structure man...but your punches still hit...I liked your opener and you came pretty consistent with your punches and personals and metas throughout your verse....overall a good verse
Genocide....be more creative with your punches and personals and metas man....throw some wittiness into your verse and some wordplay...I mean...a line about suckin nipples? c'mon man....be creative and throw harder punches
Vote=Epithet
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uppin this to the top^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
need more votes...
Epithet
ur structure is kinda weird....i get it though, just hard to follow at times.....flow was pretty good once i got used to the structure.....metas were nice.....wordplay was pretty good.....most of the punches connected.....personals were decent.....
Genocide
ur wack gettin banned....but uhh.....structure was ok.....try and even out ur lines more....flow fell off due to the uneven line actions.....their were some metas....wordplay was ok.....a few of the punches connected.....no hard hitting personals....
Conclusion
this battle was pretty one sided....epithet had a better structure.....a more stable flow....more metas....better wordplay.....more hard hitting punches......better personals.....so basing off of that epithet gets my vote....
VOTE - EPITHET
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