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    Chronicles of the Courageous: Oskar Schindler

    Chronicles of the Courageous (Pt 1)
    Oskar Schindler


    "A list has been drawn up of all those..
    ..who have died..
    ..and among those who have yet to survive"


    -Oskar Schindler

    He was such a great man, devoted, took risks
    Never in my g'fathers stories..
    ..was his character ever brisk
    .
    .
    Alas..
    ..for the sanctions past have finally met their match
    A man that held a soul among men trapped in iron casts
    Set sail with multiple masts, lives depended on his wish
    Cramming thousands of bodies over to the confindes of a list
    & for those who missed the list, certain death was forseen
    Met with the lips of death's kiss hoping it wouldn't have been
    Such a sereen scene for those that seen, optimism in view
    Only if you met this man then you'd eventually believe its true
    Against a world dividing curfue, he rotered a stand still secretly
    So many saved below those bastards nose, perfect & discretely
    Did he meet me?..
    ..No, only my grandfather tells me how our saviour took a vow
    To diminish this callous regime in so many ways that spelt now
    But it took time & effort, our families couldn't really afford
    At least his camp was non-terminal, which stayed above board
    Then his reputation soared, "A camp where people stay alive?..
    ..a place for Jewish sanctuary for our loved ones to survive?"
    The whisper spread for & wide, another hole for us to hide..
    ..& decide..
    ..whether we have the strength to live on, or curl up & die
    A Nazi General taking suicide as an option, this is more or less
    He'd never confess as this was in his heart the perfect & best..
    ..thing to do, most Nazi's didn't have a clue, yet a feeling
    That would leave the german masses over-whelmed & reeling
    A heaven sent dealing, the lord had finally seen enough
    Of all the hate & killings that alligned to our lives a must
    & with one last thrust, he pushed the masses of Jews..
    ..to a land beyond blessing where we were never refused
    The situation defused, a lord galzed with platinum in his fist
    Dented the re-write of history & then gave us Schindlers list

    .
    "Among hells fire, arose a gentle & caring soul.
    Maybe there is a god, who simply saw too much."


    -Dean Harries (Me)

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    wow, man, that was deep and awesome, i just saw that mvie a few eeks ago, this was really good, really emotional

    the flow was good and you portrayed the situaton vry well, good imagery too, considerin ve seen the moie and know hat this is about, great story telling and stuff, the vocab was great and the structure with the quotes and everything, cool topic and very original

    peace

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    Cheers uppin.

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    20 views and one reply. This sucks.

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    yah, ill help i guess

    uppin for this, all you need to learn about this story, so read this n give feedback for this

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    Personally I thought it was a bunch of crap that this beat me in WoP because I still don't think it was on topic...

    But as a piece itself, it's very, very good.

    Lemme fill in the blanks later...

    But dope verse, fo sho!

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