10-15 Lines
30 minute deadline
G-luck
10-15 Lines
30 minute deadline
G-luck
Ya lines filled with a soft n sweet touch, like crispe creams/
u need ta up ya weight, maybe get some of Biggie's beef/
Im gonna let my Tek spray all day where ya text lay/
cuz ya verse is like a Chucky doll what u sayin is childsplay/
so why waste my rhymes with this obvious waist of time/
I see the concepts your trying to make but your text blind/
Why cant he do audio?, cuz we dont want to hear a bitch talk/
i'll get a Ho with Great Aim to show u i got me a Trick Shot/
serve a survey ta ask wut could of been better with this battle/
and the results would be If Slim actually had an opponent ta battle/
Quick Verse~
Ya ''FUSE-IS-BUSTED'' 'Like Wet Plugs' Plus 'Lose Can See' This ''DUDE-IS-RUSTED''..
I'll 'Punch My Hotness' Through Your 'Blood Stream' Havin You ''OOZIN-MUSTARD''.
''FILL-SINS-GLOATIN'' 'Lying Your Ill' I'll 'Check His Neck' & ''KILL-HIM-CHOKIN''..
Coz U Couldnt Have 'A Mouth Of Hotness' If U Was 'Filled With Cum' Like ''LIL-KIM-DEEPTHROATING''.
''CHOOSE-UR-FAIT'' Yo..Look I'm Letting You 'Decide Your Death' ''LOSE-IS-GREAT''..
But Remember...I'm 'Blockin Your Light ' With ' Heavy Punches' So Dont ''CONFUSE-UR-WEIGHT''
''COOKED-AND-GRILLED'' 'Like Christmas Turkey's' This ''fuckS-ALREADY-KILLED''..
'Only Time' You Could 'Pluck Holes Through Me' Is When You ''PUNCH-WITH-DRILLZ''.
''NEWS-JUST-HEARD'' Ur Ill?But Yet 'Wins Unknown' Got Guys Like''WHO'S-THE-BIRD?''..
Cause I'm 'Gainin A Win Digit' From 'Your Words' Its Like Eyez Has ''SUED-YOUR-VERSE''
A ''FAKE-ass-GEEK'' Claimin 'Uve Won people'& U 'Bring Heat' But The''STAKES-ARE-STEAP''.
Its 'Like Heart Beat Monitor's' On 'Dead Pensioners' The Way No-One ''RATES-YOUR-BEATS''.
Took 2 long and its 10-15 lines so basically ur DQed but ill still let them vote
damn
slim thug been gone for a minute
i remember this cat from back wen i was Iceman
you must be rusty
cause you just got your ass whooped
your rhymes werent rhyming
your content was shitty
personals wasnt felt
flow was off
played concepts
rapidfire wins because he used creativity
and had wordplay and multis
he had the better verse
v/ rapid fire
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thug you back man?........................................
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ha ya im back...ima start gettin serious on this shit soon tho..The kid didnt spit in 30 like he was supposed 2 .. Mine sucked cuz it was quick but yuh ima do some shit now hola
man my computer froze and shyt but sorry .. i tryied to put it in but it got stuck and it turned off and i had to redue my whole verse so lets get some more votes on this please uppin .. LEAVE LINKS AND WILL RETURN THE FAVOR
Slimg-that was horirbly ugly and disgusting..
I've seen alot better form you that looked like
you let a newb on your name to type the verse
get rid of the / at each end of line and your
punches were played and just overall not very
well...good..or witty...
Rapid-well get rid of all the '**' and the
***-**-*** «dont do that..it messes up
dont put your stuff in caps either just bold it
and work on your structure It wasnt very good
stretched but your punches were a little less played
and they hit a bit harder both came very weak tho
My V/Rapid...go vote on my battle with Trogdor..
ScytsoPhrenia
CrazyDope
Put down the pebbles in my hand, climbed a ladder, put a brick right through your window.
"You're gonna hear me out." Yeah, hear me out on this!
Ya lines filled with a soft n sweet touch, like crispe creams/
u need ta up ya weight, maybe get some of Biggie's beef/
I liked the refrence you made, Good punch.
Im gonna let my Tek spray all day where ya text lay/
cuz ya verse is like a Chucky doll what u sayin is childsplay/
This was a good punch too.
so why waste my rhymes with this obvious waist of time/
I see the concepts your trying to make but your text blind/
Hmmm...didn't really make too much sense....
Why cant he do audio?, cuz we dont want to hear a bitch talk/
i'll get a Ho with Great Aim to show u i got me a Trick Shot/
lol....good punch...
serve a survey ta ask wut could of been better with this battle/
and the results would be If Slim actually had an opponent ta battle/
seemed pretty decent...
Over all:good job....although I've never seen you battle before...you did good...and you should work on your rhymes though....
RAPID FIRE:
Ya ''FUSE-IS-BUSTED'' 'Like Wet Plugs' Plus 'Lose Can See' This ''DUDE-IS-RUSTED''..
I'll 'Punch My Hotness' Through Your 'Blood Stream' Havin You ''OOZIN-MUSTARD''.
''FILL-SINS-GLOATIN'' 'Lying Your Ill' I'll 'Check His Neck' & ''KILL-HIM-CHOKIN''..
Coz U Couldnt Have 'A Mouth Of Hotness' If U Was 'Filled With Cum' Like ''LIL-KIM-DEEPTHROATING''.
''CHOOSE-UR-FAIT'' Yo..Look I'm Letting You 'Decide Your Death' ''LOSE-IS-GREAT''..
But Remember...I'm 'Blockin Your Light ' With ' Heavy Punches' So Dont ''CONFUSE-UR-WEIGHT''
''COOKED-AND-GRILLED'' 'Like Christmas Turkey's' This ''fuckS-ALREADY-KILLED''..
'Only Time' You Could 'Pluck Holes Through Me' Is When You ''PUNCH-WITH-DRILLZ''.
''NEWS-JUST-HEARD'' Ur Ill?But Yet 'Wins Unknown' Got Guys Like''WHO'S-THE-BIRD?''..
Cause I'm 'Gainin A Win Digit' From 'Your Words' Its Like Eyez Has ''SUED-YOUR-VERSE''
A ''FAKE-ass-GEEK'' Claimin 'Uve Won people'& U 'Bring Heat' But The''STAKES-ARE-STEAP''.
Its 'Like Heart Beat Monitor's' On 'Dead Pensioners' The Way No-One ''RATES-YOUR-BEATS''.
All I can say is you won this battle with your abundance of multies and rhyming...your punches need some improvement, though....other than that....and your flow was a bit wierd, but you had better flow than slimthug.
Vote/Rapid Fire
i like slim thug he strait bodied homie BUT fusion be spitting that pilf (hott hott shit) hard 2 decide but i like the metaphors slim used both yall hot but he got the vote honestly
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=126226
i like to tell rapid that shit was nice too i just like the chucky line it put him over the tie but u nice homie honestly
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=126226
rapid fire took this one!
Slim you need some work boy. Your stucture was on and your delivery was ok. Try shortening your lines and matching each with syllables and you'll be arite. Other than that you need some work bro! Creativity, concepts, vocabulary. all that shit needs some work man. elevate man! check the tutorial page on the main page of this forum and it'll help ya if u read it. Star line was this anyways. . .
Why cant he do audio?, cuz we dont want to hear a bitch talk/
i'll get a Ho with Great Aim to show u i got me a Trick Shot/
^ not bad... could use some work ...
Rapid fire you fucking sent a barrage of lyrics at this kid. You seemed kinda rusty but you still dealt it well. YOu had good diction, vocab, delivery, flow, etc. Your concepts were pretty cool. Personals and punches were dubbin him out well. Motha fuckah was gettin dubbed this round. Your multis bitch slapped him 2 the ground! heres your star line. . . .
''CHOOSE-UR-FAIT'' Yo..Look I'm Letting You 'Decide Your Death' ''LOSE-IS-GREAT''..
But Remember...I'm 'Blockin Your Light ' With ' Heavy Punches' So Dont ''CONFUSE-UR-WEIGHT''
^ good stuff homey!
\/ote Rapid Fire
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iight thankz uppin for more will return the favor
uppinn............................. 1x
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