10-15 lines
Drip ASAP
Bye
Rippar
Trogdor
10-15 lines
Drip ASAP
Bye
Trogdor, the brother from Windsor, ima give it to ya raw
i'll slam your face in the door, while you bein a whore and slammin yo ass to the floor
I'll pass by and rob you of your draw, when i tread on you.... bum's sucking up ya blood thru a straw
I'll reverse the raw and create a war
I'm like the vietnamese while your like an american screamin "please, spare my life" I live by the sword you do by the knife, "do you wanna ryde or die" i'll kill you over twice, electrute you through a kite, you don't belong out at nite,
crawl back to windsor till i split your head open with a chainsaw, serving up brains raw.
lol.......
i'll fry ya nuts like squirels in winter travellin across pole wires
u can try, but you wont put me to rest like costrophobic vampires
u aint drivin, ur1 big accident waitin to happen like no streets lights
and your only good with bars when ur downtown on homosexual gay nites
forget victory, u have a better chance not catchin crabs from portajones
helps required when it comes to ur style, you'll need a whole hair salon
u'll get shut down, rejected, like underage teens tryin for smokes at beckers
this battles guna be easier to win than gettin signed to bad boy records
this is the end, i stripped this thing, like a pranksters graduation tip
those punches were as consistant as Kobe's and Shaqs relationship
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One sided...
Trogdor easily took this...
Rippar not very good here...
you attempted punches,
but nothing really hit...
you had more filler than anything,
and your verse was void of personals...
aside from that yer structure was bad...
and it fucked up the scheme...
work on punches, personals,
try using a simple struture/rhyme scheme,
and be more creative...
elevate....
Trogdor okay verse...
not bad as far creativity...
some decent punches...
try and stay away from gay/sex punches though
they're played...
you also should use more personals...
you didnt have any, and they can really
help u win a battle..
better structure and rhyme scheme..nice and simple
overall average verse...
v/ Trogdor
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Trogdor- Good verse, kinda made me laugh. Punches were good they hit hard. But then his also. Wordplay you did good on that too. Your structure was good also. But i thought your personals were good. So overall you killed this newb..for better punches hit harder and better verse..
Rippar- An okay verse..but fix it up a little next time. Punches wern't that good gotta work on dem. Personals i thought you needed more of dem cuz they didnt hit that hard. Structure decent enough easy ta read ya know. But ya need to elevate even tho you a newb a understand..
vote Trogdor
i will poll my vote when you hit mine...(honest vote)
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=124561
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\/0te... Trogdor for having an aiight verse overall.. some good punches and decent flow.. Structure was steady and fixed nicely..
6/10
Rippar.. Wack verse flow was non-excistant.. structure was all over the place.. punches fell short like you didnt have confidence in throwing them..
1.5/10
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Yo I have to go with Trogder Becuz his lines was much better.Ripper you didnt even whyme when It was time to rhyme and and things like that.But Trogder Did have better lines and He did rhyme.PLus his lines was ok but not that very good.But I still will have to go with Trogder. Aight
v/trogder
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O yea hit me up if any of yall can on who won this battle.Holla http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=124709
Rippar...
Trogdor, the brother from Windsor, ima give it to ya raw
i'll slam your face in the door, while you bein a whore and slammin yo ass to the floor
Good wordplay at least
I'll pass by and rob you of your draw, when i tread on you.... bum's sucking up ya blood thru a straw
I'll reverse the raw and create a war
Bum suck bloodabove line ok...
I'm like the vietnamese while your like an american screamin "please, spare my life" I live by the sword you do by the knife, "do you wanna ryde or die" i'll kill you over
twice, electrute you through a kite, you don't belong out at nite,
crawl back to windsor till i split your head open with a chainsaw, serving up brains raw.
That was a Ruff Ryders line.. seriously this was shit
1/10 worse than before.......
Trogdor.....
i'll fry ya nuts like squirels in winter travellin across pole wires
u can try, but you wont put me to rest like costrophobic vampires
1st line wtf... 2nd line was clever
u aint drivin, ur1 big accident waitin to happen like no streets lights
and your only good with bars when ur downtown on homosexual gay nites
ok bar but gay lines are played
forget victory, u have a better chance not catchin crabs from portajones
helps required when it comes to ur style, you'll need a whole hair salon
ok wat was that seriously?
u'll get shut down, rejected, like underage teens tryin for smokes at beckers
this battles guna be easier to win than gettin signed to bad boy records
okis my best tip..
this is the end, i stripped this thing, like a pranksters graduation tip
those punches were as consistant as Kobe's and Shaqs relationship
Good line buuut shudn't it be trick not tip...
6/10
\/0te.... Trogdor
Polled.
-Axe
Last edited by Axe; April 17th, 2004 at 04:53 PM
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