Baby.. Blue.. Eyes..

[Freeman]

As I write this.. A gorgeous face flashes across my mind
Come to think of it, its the face im seeing all the time
I stand behind.. Always there to back you up when needed
You are everythin I want and more.. Expectations exceeded
Ive been seeded.. Seed implanted similar to cupids arrow
Struck with a pleasure that is makin my pupils go narrow
High not low.. Girl your keepin me floatin up to the sky
Normally I'm trying to float away from all hurt and lies
But your by my side.. Your my special cute little shorty
I can see us being together until we're well above forty
And still youll be naughty.. Dirty but your always clean
You keep me up all night jus like I was full of caffeine
Your my beauty queen, you turn me on easily like a light
On my own, no.. But together we have reached this height
Doing it right.. We will succeed where others would fail
Building our relationship with bricks of trust and detail
We will prevail.. Already in my life i've found my prize
Forever im gona be lookin into your sexy, baby blue eyes
I think of you all the time, its far more than jus daily
Cause baby.. I love you.. My cute little shorty.. Hayley

[Freeman]

Links..

#1
#2

Have fun..

Pz..

[Reeco]

Do you do one of these everyday, i cant handle this amount of dopeness all the time :-)

This was another really good piece by you free, the flow was really spot on proberbly the easiest piece i've read in a while.

Structure was also perfect!! You potrayed a sort of love story with great story telling and vocab. Its prob somthin everyone with a girl can relate to.

Dope

Keep this up man. You'll soon be in legends :-)

pz

[Freeman]

Lol..

Well..

Its prob somthin everyone with a girl can relate to

Im gona give this to my girl in about a week.. Sort of mini-anniversary thing.. Lol..

And..

Keep this up man. You'll soon be in legends :-)

I will keep it up..

But..

I will not be in legends anytime soon..

Thank you for replying, my friend..

Pz..

[Endeva.]

well im pleased to see you've slightly changed your structure, like i said...lol... but i thought this was really smooth, transitions all good.... and i liked how its real... hope she appreciates it man.... but yeah i liked this, you got all you needed into it.... tight stuff.... short reply, but not much a can fault on....

[Mag...]

really nice man... you impressed me with a really tight flow... the subject matter was a refreshing change of pace from most of the stuff in OM... I think for what it was it was perfect... though not necessarily the most challenging thing to attempt...

keep it up.. and hit up my recent OM - Heart and Mind (Ode to Cam)

[Freeman]

Thanks for the replies..

Mag..

I know its not a challenging topic to attempt.. But.. Ive wrote it for my girlfriend.. So it is a necessity to write it..

She should love it..

Up..

Pz..

[Spoken]

she will love it! you showed your emotions well, and made it all sappy like without going over board lol. the flow of the piece i loved it was real smooth and easy to follow. its a great piece for what its written for, good luck man.

T

[High Class]

This was a nice drop. It had a good flow, it fell off a little at some points... But you brought it back nicely... I liked the hole idea, and it got me on a personal level. Since my X has baby blue eyes, and I still havent gotten over her. I liked the similies and structure. It looks very neet. This was a good drop, keep up the good work...

[FormulaMC]

Like the title first off. Flow was smooth, easy read. Transitions, as Dev said, were good. Structure was great, helped the flow tremendously. Of course, topic wasn't original, but you made it good. Not much more I can say, feeling this piece. . Nice drop Freeman.

[Freeman]

Thank you all.. ..

I think my girl will love it..

[UNDEAD.]

this was a dope piece man started of slow then reallty excelled and this got me thinkin if u were to propose to this gurl she'd say yes! lol keep up the good shit..thanx peace
p.s - can ya hit up my open mic Love - 2 - Hate thanx

[High Class]

Thank you all.. ..

I think my girl will love it..

^ I did the same thing, I wrote my girl " Remember Our Love "
because we were in long distance befor we broke up... She loved
it like hell, i think this will go nice with the relationship of yours,
good idea... ^

[Freeman]

I remember reading that piece you wrote..

It was pretty cool from what I remember..

Thought id be nominated for OM of the month by now..

Right..

If this doesnt.. If Angel doesnt (WTF, that should)..

Then my thinking cap must go on..

I will be back with extreme dopeness..

Up, by the way..

Pz..

[Aisle Phive]

I thought that this was coo'. Flow was there, topic was played though. But evidently it's just a romance drop. The internals were solid, multis were used appropriately. I was feelin' this though, keep it up.

We sh0uld collab.