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    Curing Insomnia . .

    A pitch black room, but im not asleep or in my bed
    Cause my adrenaline is rushin’ and I got songs in my head
    I havent slept in days, so I hit the parties and clubs
    Smoking cigarettes, and drinkin’ a couple bottles of suds..
    And to wake a little sick, shit, never strikes my mind
    Cause I’ll never have to wake, if I never close my eyes
    Im the life of the party, my energy is radiant in my skin
    And I havent slept in weeks but I still got attraction
    All the ladies are just dancing… grindin’ on top my lap
    We can just kiss and talk, you know ill call you back…
    We‘re tired but awake, and I know you can now feel it too..
    Cause im still an insomniac, but can I sleep with you?

    Don't bode too well with night time, my abode is never no life line
    if the benefits in my edifice kept me alive, I wouldn't be galvanized
    Into this state of suspended suspended animation, session allocated
    to that park bench 10 minutes away, I stay to question my patience
    Untill the tension is wasted creatively embracing scene inspiration
    that comes face to face with this man mistaking dreaming for pacing
    Envisioning the empyrean and tranquil regions between gleaming stars
    watch this space till the colours change and there my intrigante parts
    A new day is conceived and once again another dusk goes without sleep
    I don't know why and even the voice of reason has prose in its speech
    Always awake and I believe my bed has become the most unvisited place
    since space- back in the 1800's when hunches and pistons were quaint

    It appeared like it was settled
    but it was not!
    the disaster grow, & our relation was unsettled
    the important things were left unsaid
    As i fall back into my bed & lights low
    lighting up another sigaret..
    as my head turns towards my window `
    looking up into this dark black sky
    seeing your reflection in the darkness
    & as a tear escaped my eye ..
    I grapped & hold on tight to your shirt
    you left it here the last time..
    when love between us had accured..
    Bright eyes is playing low..
    & his voice & the beat passed me by
    like the time this night..` so damn slow
    I am just spinning in my bed,
    complicated thoughts,
    & a failure of protecting myself leaving me imbed
    It drives me crazy, what am i to do ..
    My concerns growed bigger towards this problem and the solution thereof..`
    resulting into an excessive usage of ..`
    Alcahol & weed, .. trying to delete selective memories
    yet it has no use, this insomnia keeps victorious
    & effecting me in several degrees!

    In my spare time at night..when my eyes are in a weary state..
    I start to visualize a females sight..then I begin to masturbate..
    My forearms grow with every stroke..after my palm start to soak..
    But relatives figures start provoke..my minds state after every choke..
    Don't make this in a laughing matter..this is an insomnia induced problem..
    Acting when thoughts scatter..my frustration is a force completely solemn..
    I hope for maybe a time to rest..close my eyes hopefully at best..
    Instead I'm attacked with visions of, old ladies and incest..
    Why does my head attack me?!.. what is the main reason?!..
    Is it my other choice for relaxed glee..or is my mind in plain treason..
    But the reality of it..this isn't the affects of my insomnia disease..
    The normality of it..is that when I couldn't sleep I wrote this piece..

    Beat boxin’ vibrates lungs like base and chase repercussions of the Insomniacs
    Hip-hop will never find it's relevance when portrayed as malevolence
    Find that knowledge that ranks supreme and fulfills dreams and you will find truth
    Our mind going off on tangents connecting with currents followed through like commandments
    Microphones enhance voices and echoes meanings of the word,Go forword
    and rewind turntables with fatal intent that leave dents in that univer`soul Insomniacs
    The Insomniac being that of common sense and benevolence
    Follow our crowd with loud proud and smile then try to figure out the Insomniacs
    Our children in the slum village will fall victim to life’s pillage the unspeakable acts
    How can you question our asylum our blue moon and where we are from
    You live for free`dumb but it never comes when voices hum accepting crumbs for fun
    .........................
    The root of the matter is thereafter Skipping final chapters...

    ever since I was a little boy
    I have needed a release
    something for my boredom to decrease
    on the night's that I'd lose sleep
    over superficial things
    homework, toys, and pretty girls
    I needed something to take me
    away from this shitty world
    and the paper beckoned hence
    and I came without asking
    the margins were so immense
    that they seemed to be masking
    their devious intention
    to mould me into this written being
    by fighting my insomnia
    they made me search for deeper meaning
    in the pen scratches
    letters, numbers and punctuation
    cooking up fresh batches
    of lies, false hope and fake elation
    and my eyes will not shut
    they dry out and lose their sight
    because I lost myself to poetry
    on each one of those sleepless nights.

    I'd watched the news; scattered throughout unkempt emergencies. .
    Was something to sleep for, therefore my sense of urgency
    Would evolve. . A lonely night, no reason that I visited sorrow
    Except to enhance the lasting effects for the gifts of tomorrow
    I longed for the sun - a morning where I'd assume a graceful rise
    And shake the spacious rays and colours that illuminate my eyes
    It was late. . But next dor, a foot was tapping the brashest tune
    Which echoed in my pulse as I wandered a labyrinth of avenues. .
    Internally - I flicked on the tube where zealous lobbyists frowned
    The TV set lit the bureaus and headboards of mahogany browns
    Symbolically: flick it off, I envisioned the prospectives we hate on
    And drempt in brown, a colour serving as the world's collective liaison

    I formulate an age- with ford suburbans plowing the lunar beaches
    With scaled composites, crystal rockery and evolved foreign speeches.
    The crop circles on intergalactic dust appear when I jot astro notes
    My uncle interprets, accounting of old war stories- the apollo hero boasts.
    From the white coast of glanchinnia- housing estates pass legislation
    To the red planets sulfer deposits- no wonder they never found plantation
    Mars stinks- the surface is putrid and baron- so the inhabitants saw asylum
    Forming an underground organization- hubble and rover couldn’t find them.
    A linguistic phylum- narrating a story of a hitchhiker who travelled sector 81
    And became renowned when he captured a martian moon crossing the sun.
    Dusty stars shroud newborn planets- life adds a new ring to outer saturn
    I witness asteroid chasers and can aspire to do this- without a dream pattern



    If you must know the order, it is: `tik, Demik, `Ed, Sarcasm, `skills, Maven, Qual, Kelsey.

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    Damn, this was long. Ok, this was a decent drop. I like the contrast of the verses. They are the same topic, but every verse comes at a different perspective, from tick at the club, to Tsar choking his meat, to Kelsey's more mental and symbolic approach. Everyone did pretty good. A drop this long usually drags and drags and drags, but the constant switches in writing styles kept this fresh to the end. Nice job, fellas.

    In my spare time at night..when my eyes are in a weary state..
    I start to visualize a females sight..then I begin to masturbate..
    My forearms grow with every stroke..after my palm start to soak..
    But relatives figures start provoke..my minds state after every choke..


    ^My favorite lines. This was my favorite verse too. Shit was hilarious. Keep up the good work, fellas.

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    i think when u all collab at once it takes away the impact of some of your writings
    i cant honestly say i wasnt blown away by anyones verse in particular
    all were of above average thought and ability but still not as good as id hoped from such a group of talented writers
    having said that all portrayed completely different aspects from the same topic heading
    imaginative if nothing else
    just left with a bit of a flat feeling..
    feel you could have done better as a whole
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    Wow...YoU GuYS aRe DoPe..cAn i bE dOwN??

    on a serious note...I think this piece came out very well{Shi*,I was expecting Sarcasm
    to come weak so I can shine...My verse was the worst one..Damn...}

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    1st verse:
    had a playful feel - flow was good - scheme seemed a little simple but liked the wordplay

    2nd verse:
    much more serious - flow got better with each line - liked this line:
    "I don't know why and even the voice of reason has prose in its speech"

    4th verse:
    amusing - flow was pretty good - nice closer - was cracking up with:
    "Instead I'm attacked with visions of, old ladies and incest.."

    5th verse:
    looked like it would be shouted as an audio - interesting kinda "pay attention" style - thoughts weren't quite connected smoothly - nice "mantra-ness"

    6th verse:
    more poetic than the others - flow was good - liked:
    "and the paper beckoned hence"

    7th verse:
    flow was good - piece felt retrospective - dope closer - description was vivid

    8th verse:
    ideas flowed smoothly - creative - flow was good - saw some complexity - tied it in to the theme nicely at the end - liked:
    "The crop circles on intergalactic dust appear when I jot astro notes"

    If anybody wants more detailed feed - just say so. I didn't feel like taking up another page going over this in detail though. If anyone hasn't hit my ELEETE collab yet please do so if you get a chance. (Two Geniuses - One Mind)

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    Hey..^^^Yoo forgot verse number 3..not to be a heckler or none..and fuck yoo penskills!!!..
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    "Yoo forgot verse number 3"

    I didn't get the flow of it and rather than sounding like an idiot and critiquing something I didn't understand I chose to simply skip a review of it.

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    that was ver good..nice...quality drop...form all..poetic...flowing...long..but it fits with the title and caveat that preceedes it...insomniacs sounds nice...i think i could fit in there....hmm...but i do agree that th elength took away from it a lil bit..if you released it in parts, it would have been better...one love..kudos
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    I just realised..That we have no links on this piece...

    Then get some
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    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=118922
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=118747
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    this shit was long as fuck...but overall it was good...I think the topic is kinda played though...seeing as how I myself have done at least 3 versez on the same topic and I know otherz have used it too...but y'all worded ya thoughts nicely...
    Life'z a Bitch and she sucks...so I keep my dick at attention...

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    ^the crews name is Insomniacs...what did you expect from us?
    wordperfect?
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    ^^^so...you don't see Dipset rhymin' about politics do ya??????
    Life'z a Bitch and she sucks...so I keep my dick at attention...

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    I just quikly wrote what i did when i cant sleep w/ a lil poetic vibe .. If u dont get i suggest you read better. =), & besides people saying it wsnt that 'blazing' `we still own you in OM .. that is all.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Edicius
    `we still own you in OM .. that is all.
    ^Tell'em.....Plus,We still own you in every where else too...

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