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    Time's Changing. .

    I Never Would've Thought We'd See Such A Negative Progression In What We Love. .

    My Nervous System's Got Nervous Twitchin'. . .
    My Nerves Is Itchin', Words Was Wisdom. . .
    But Now I'm The Victim. . Nobody Wants To Hear What I Say
    These Fucks, They Fast Forward Past Me Then Press Play. .
    My Significance Cut In Half. . . Then Half Again. .
    But I'm Still Talking Even When My Weight Is At It's Last Percent. .
    Murderin' Merchants For Products That Lead To Speech Enchancement
    Glance N The Mic's Mint Condition Captures Eyes Like UFO's Landin'. .
    I'm Mappin', A Plan Of Rehashing My Past Verbal Actions. .
    So I Can Be Heard Once More. . . You Cannot Fathom. . .
    My Struggle To Reach Supremacy, It's Killin' Me. . Slowly. .
    To The Point That My Mind's Infantry Depends On Notebooks To Hold Me. .
    I Was Golden. . . But Now My Shine Has Actually Frozen. . .
    Never Wore My Heart On My Sleeve, But It's Fuckin' Exposed N. .
    My Axis Are Rotating, Veins Pulsating. . . Cause When X Meets Y. .
    The Beats All Stop. . . N My Mother Fucking Music Dies. . .

    [Chorus X's 2]
    An Everyday Struggle. . To Remain In The Top Position. .
    But If What I Talk About. . Is Now Deaf To Ignorant. .
    TheN I Know These Mainsteam Mu'Fuckas Ain't Listenin'. .

    I Was On Cloud Nine, They Doubt Mine. . Drifted Alot Closer
    Then Almost Ripped It Like Predicted Shit. .
    . . . But My Ace Dealt Turned Into The Joker. .
    I'm Facing A Fucking Inferno Of Hate And Non-Concious. . .
    People In The Bling Phase But My Inner Concious Says Don't Stop This. .
    Two Lane Highway Where My Ways Can't Find An Interstate. .
    Why Am I Not Being Heard ? Since When Do Vets Get Beginners Fate ?
    My Pens Claim Hurt Hearing Cash, My Hell Is Past Nine Inches. .
    My Ends Blame Ears Who Flirt With Bad Music. . .
    . . . As The Reason Money Has Changed Against My Wishes. .
    I Never Thought I'd See My Downfall, It's Like Hip Hop Owning The Grammy's. .
    This Shit Slammed Me, I Was Distraught To Be Caught With No Plan B. .
    The Game As We Know It Is Corrupted. . Shoulda Said Fuck It. .
    But The Power Of Content Once Overshadowed The Nonsense N Bullshit. .
    But I'm Not Talking About What Society Is Crying To Hear. .
    I'm Not Dying N Near The Pier That Once Held My Fear. . .
    Fuck Friendship, This Path Was Endless, I Shall End This. . .
    My Deepest Sympathies To The Deceased Friend In Me. .
    . . . The Music Business. . .

    [Alternate Chorus]
    My Death Comes With My Music. . It Dies, I Proceed. .
    I Don't Fufill Their Needs So I Am Forced To Bleed. . .
    Pay A Price For Others Taste. . It's Sick. . I Know This. .
    But Us Living Under The Ground Never Get To Show Shit. . .

    Us Living Under The Ground Never Get To Show Shit. . . There Is No Message In What We Hear Today. . . We Try To Save It. . But The Bad Outweighs The Good. . And The Light Remains To The Guilty. . While The Innocent Fades. . Time's Changing. . God Knows Time's Changing. .


    I don't have 300 posts, but if someone likes this enough, nominate me for Open Mic Of The Month. . serious.

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    This drop was aight, liked it, enjoyable read yo, keep it up aight... Peace
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    In my honest oppinion good piece, very enjoyable, makes sense, a little off on the flow I guess, I dont like the swearing but its expression...
    Well Done .. Hope to view more from you!
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    very nice. you seem to know wut ur doing. the meaning was hard to follow but
    it was felt. the flow was great. the words were nice and the style was sumwut
    unique. very well done. kept the consistancy and the metas were nice also. the
    topic is unique which is another positive. i liked it so it says a lot. lol. very long too.
    keep at it writer. lol

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    ^ ^ LoL. . I'm glad you think I know what i'm doing, because I definately should after 9 years of writing, thanks for the feed.

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    Uppin. . Leave Links. .

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    Formula, Nice.......this was a dope drop.........then again most of your shit is lol

    Evrything was good here, structure, flow, topic, etc.......

    Your imagery was nice as well......felt it the entire way through! i like that.....you cant tell youve been doing this a long time......The topic is what kept me readin the whole way through.........i like when MC's write somethin we can all relate to.......good shit dawg!

    Keep doing your thing...........dope man............peace.......an if you got the time hit my latest.....its a change in style for me.........

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    seemed different to some of your drops... alot seemed to go into multis and flow... which really came across well.... the content and vocab was also good... yeah another good drop... but take caps off..damn it!....lol.... id like to see sumthin inovative from you... all these topics ive seen before....
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    I read this late last night..I don't know why I didn't reply..anyway..this was something different from your usual drops..I'm so used to seeing you just spit out multis and str8 flows...these actually had some good imagery involved in it..I like this very much...it's goo d to change your style once in a while..~my sig is Dope~~

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    straight up, I think this was your worst piece...that i have read. No offense intended.
    You had solid wordplay, and all that shit, but the flow was kinda choppy, and it was just hard on the eyes. I don't know if it was how you worded it, or if it was how I read it, but i seriously disliked this. You had a good ending though, I enjoyed that.
    My only criticism would be to avoid wording thing awkwardly, cause they look that way..yeesh.
    sorry dude =(
    I want to hear the audio, it was probably just me.
    wordperfect?
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