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Thread: 'Silence' by: Dazasta, Jacent & Straight Ace

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    'Silence' by: Dazasta, Jacent & Straight Ace

    Dazasta

    Cloaked in the darkness of life..traveled in stealth…
    Didn’t help..that I couldn’t rest inside to trust myself..
    So I felt..that if I cant overcome this Pain eventually..
    I’d shut off my vocal’s and succumb to my misery..
    This is me..definition developed.. So gone…
    Still I find that I lose grip on reality…as I struggle to hold on..
    I rolled on...found the tears..weighted with pain..fought to restrain..
    Took a trip back..but now im stuck on memory lane..
    It was the brain..that played tricks on my conscious..
    Lined it…a gentle mindset?still have yet to find it..
    And as the time went..the days passed..reacting quick..
    As to why im here?.i searched for it on the corpse of happiness..
    Referred as a masochist..i battled fear through the nights…
    And in my fright…I questioned Christ as I challenged death to a fight..
    Told that I was alright.. Yet these memories…im not forgetting em’..
    So I Spoke silence ‘chuz it seemed that not even God was listening..

    Jacent

    My eyelids, closed shut of silence..
    ..drowned in fear, of Mommy's violence
    Tears, My eyes blood, blended with death
    ..sounds annoyance, progressed to deaf
    Born a gift, Mom said it was handed to me
    ..being deaf wasn't a dream, but reality
    Nights of loneliness, couldn't hear my cries
    ..but I thought, I couldn't hear my own cries
    Away from the world, I hid in my closet
    ..prayed to rid this, but inside i wasn't honest
    Have I lost it? hearing voices in my head
    ..telling me to stop, join us in the dead
    Mind relapses, thoughts began to soak in
    ..Mind over matter settled, before it broke in
    Breath taken, death took over my guidance
    ..the noise so loud, it became a bellowing silence


    Straight Ace

    Silence is better than unmeaning words

    Signs of silence meld with morals & wilt..
    ..If im diein inside.. then..
    Inside of me is a burial deeply instilled..
    stand on the verge of..deeper silence i fear.
    Cores weave by..as..
    ..I..long for that screechin kazaa noise in my ear..
    Merely..Or Mostly..I write as i hear gists..
    ..& i scrabble n list these gists..
    On a paper that mirrors my inner whist..
    Empty inside..spreadin'..numb words dont form..
    ..But they're there..
    It's a matter of time.....for my inner baby's born..
    That'll speak & break the silence, rebel..stand up..
    ..In time though..
    It takes awhile for a baby can keep his head up..
    Slander senses..as i mirror my grim thoughts..
    ..Feelin ad hoc..
    Like a mere mortal between nefarious Gods..
    Starin'... eyes turn watery...as
    ...grief dances on my lashes..
    & if hate burns..watch me turn into embers & ashes..


    Witty Unpredicatable Talent And Natural Game


    My pokemon brings all the nerds to the yard, and there like "Do you wanna trade cards?" Damn Right lets trade some cards, I'll trade you, but not my charizard.

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    first shit i've seen of jacent on this site really, an im liking it!!
    dazasta just gets better in every single open mic he drops!!!
    straight ace is doing the same!!


    you guys would make my farther proud!!
    nice wordplay, vocab an immagery in this piece!!

    my fave line was
    Signs of silence meld with morals & wilt..
    ..If im diein inside.. then..
    Inside of me is a burial deeply instilled..

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    leave feed and a link i'll return it


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    This was a nice collab..
    Liked tha topic..umm
    everyone had good flow
    All your verses were nice
    I liked Ace's opener
    dazasta's grip/reality
    And jacents deaf/dream
    Nice drop yall

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    i liekd this ^^^^^^ everythin they said, lol
    hey hit my freestyle labeled..."Quick Freestyle About My Life"
    yeah, return the favor

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    dope drop...all came hard...
    dope in all aspects...wordplay, vocab etc...

    favorite lines...

    "I rolled on...found the tears..weighted with pain..fought to restrain..
    Took a trip back..but now im stuck on memory lane.."

    ill as fuck...

    "Starin'... eyes turn watery...as
    ...grief dances on my lashes..
    & if hate burns..watch me turn into embers & ashes.."

    Damn...Keep Spittin...

    Return the Favor...

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    thanks for the feedback...some more would be appreciated..thanks

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    I liked D's rhyme scheme. Nice flow. It was a good verse. Jacent had a pretty ill verse. His rhyme scheme wasnt as ill as D's, but I loved his closer. Straight Ace came pretty decent too. He dropped my favorit part of the collaboration.

    Quote Originally Posted by Straight Ace
    Starin'... eyes turn watery...as
    ...grief dances on my lashes..
    & if hate burns..watch me turn into embers & ashes..
    Pretty nice drop, altogether.

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    Witty Unpredicatable Talent And Natural Game


    My pokemon brings all the nerds to the yard, and there like "Do you wanna trade cards?" Damn Right lets trade some cards, I'll trade you, but not my charizard.

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    Nice collab..Daz and St8's verse was nice..Jacent I don't know you but,your shit was also nice..I'm liking this...all of ya had a good flow and worplay going on..good content..and most of all..N.O.G's...nucca what!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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    You know!..How we do!
    Hah..thanks man appreciate it.


    Witty Unpredicatable Talent And Natural Game


    My pokemon brings all the nerds to the yard, and there like "Do you wanna trade cards?" Damn Right lets trade some cards, I'll trade you, but not my charizard.

    <img src="http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/attachment.php?attachmentid=11608&stc=1">

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    Dope shit..

    Again top class verses from all.. three completely different styles which was nice..
    Good visions on the topic also..
    Vocab.. imagery.. depth.. all there..
    Structures were on point.. as said, all different but held well..
    Basically another tight collab.
    Props..

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    Ace, .. Good one man fo real u elevate quik like whoa!, very nice collabbo here mates, .. really enjoyed it vocab flow specially the content props man

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    Really nice drop guys. I like this peace a lot, had emotion and all and a good topic. Really tight. My favorite set was this one by Strait:

    Signs of silence meld with morals & wilt..
    ..If im diein inside.. then..
    Inside of me is a burial deeply instilled..

    very nice man. keep it up.
    All lifes end but do all lifes really have a start?
    or is it one drawn out ending, till the last beat echos out from your heart?

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    very good drop, you each complimented eachoher very well. this was a really good piece I like the different ways you grasped the concept.. very easy to follow, and you each complimented eachother nobody brought this down..
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    Witty Unpredicatable Talent And Natural Game


    My pokemon brings all the nerds to the yard, and there like "Do you wanna trade cards?" Damn Right lets trade some cards, I'll trade you, but not my charizard.

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