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    blip blip the script is flipped to slit the wires and expire
    gripless chipsets cos the analog empire is required to retire
    digi-mental mindframe, a restrained brain within the card bricks
    tell motherboards and other cores to erode on our hard disks
    old engines equals junkzones junctioned to system malfunction
    recycled items crawls outdone in dusty, grey-walled dungeons
    terminated terminals string-reaching post mortem beacons
    decoding nodes to death-by-default as their modems weakens
    re-control console protocols, end-process lesser souls
    reboot, mute, refuse to compute as these droids gets old
    what is sacred? the matrix got our fate fixed as seasonal tech
    no logical inputs, bits per sec outputs by emotional wrecks

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    This is a dope representation on the dependency of man on machines. I thought it really took off when you got to the terminated terminal line as it rolled on smoothly. Binary life is tough and rigid and how you brought out the toughness of being that way with the dual representations in this only brings the pic out more. Like we are heading to that Terminated reality that the T movies bring out. Maybe this could have been sparked from the conversations on limiting AI to ensure that a digital takeover doesn't happens. Any way it's dope....


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    Indeed, one can speculate what future technology will represent for mankind. It's said that true AI is an inevitability down the line, with all it's philosophical implications. As my piece briefly reflects, how will they view "life" through machinery?

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    This feels a whole lot like a OM piece. Nevertheless, poems were originally rhymed.

    The tech language benefits you greatly because if there is anything that people constantly underestimate within their work it is the element of tone. Tonally, your language bolsters the piece and in turn makes the rhythmic flow of the piece feel mechanical just like the droids, machines, phones, computers, and other devices.

    What is sacred?

    That's an excellent question where we get new phones every year, new computers every year. Get new phone, talk about new phone, get new phone, talk about new phone. Text. No voice, no cadence, no tone or emotion beyond the attempts to interpret the words on the screen. This felt like a more articulate way to speculate on man becoming machine subtly and gradually over time whilst losing the base elements of their humanity.

    It's a shaky road we tread. Simon & Garfunkel are horrifyingly accurate, no?
    “Those whom life does not cure death will. The world is quite ruthless in selecting between the dream and the reality, even where we will not. Between the wish and the thing the world lies waiting.”

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    uppin..

 

 

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