Roulette

[Truth Iscariot]

I need to get you out of my system that much is clear
Dear, I've chased you with Vodka and Gin which seers my throat
Tears in scope, with my lack of hope, spirit bottled with my fear
Eloped to pain, I can't cloak my maimed status
Your blade the apparatus which kills so quickly
I fall infinitely into this pit of despair. An unholy trinity
Your absence, so callous
My love left challenged
Rendering me unbalanced
And between these changes I have been painted.
Worthless, writing misworded, but truthfully it was never perfect
The home in my heart, incomplete, unfurnished
The weed won't burn it away, even as I puff green for days
Becoming a slave to the high, arriving winged, Icarus caged
Despite all my rage, I do not break free
The darkness of Incarceration shallows me
But am I prisoner to the reality of life or the feeling
Which set of bars leaves me reeling the most?

You probably hold my severed head high while boasting
Coasting from coast to coast evoking soapbox rants
Your killing blow awoke me. To how fickle and scant
The remnants of truth were in your words
Who ever died of a lie?
Casualties of an unkind killer to which the lawmen are blind
Bias eyes always scar the mind. And yet I try
To build my case
Using haste as a weapon
My arms not laced with dynamite
Life led without a tool to step with
But yet, words to wreck with
As I count the seconds we've been apart
You Left your mark, then flew the coup
The Loop-dee-loop lover you are
You Left your mark, the scars, abuse aplenty
Problems always seemed so many...
I guess it's just easier this way
When life does not deal pleasure in spades
To Trump the Kings and Queens in the deck

So now hopes of success in roulette is all that's left

[Tempest]

This was a dope return piece my friend. It had everything. Rhyme scheme. Story. Originality. Creativity. Wording. Sorry for the lack of feedback, playing FF8. I'll return with more detail in a bit. nom'd.

Okay, so now that I'm done playing the game for a bit to focus on internet stuff lol. This was fucking dope man. I really liked it all around. At first glimpse I was really iffy about the structure of your rhyme scheme but the further I read the better it got to me. Pure example of never judge a book by it's cover. Flow was very fluent from start to finish and creative at that. I liked the concept and felt you delivered beyond expectations on it. It's nice to see a writer come back from hiatus with little to no rust. I thought I was the only one who could do that. Good job man. Hope you stick around.

[Truth Iscariot]

Thanks bro

[Tempest]

For sure. Checkout Moonlight Sonata in return please.

[Shaka Zulu]

Wow. One unique portion of this OM is probably the poetic rhythm placed into it. It is nonconventional but it flows to a natural pace & how you phrase the simplest things can seem extraordinary. This is a job well done.