10 Lined Due 48 Hours
This Is My Check @Remnant Thoughtz
RemnantThoughtz
Harmcity
10 Lined Due 48 Hours
This Is My Check @Remnant Thoughtz
Okay, i'm already writing so whenever you submit yours i'll submit mines i'll be done before midnight.
Don't care anymore, here...
Better call code red like mountain dew because this shit is going to get heavy.
"VISCERA", the way I put this heavy fist to ya, given you a big lip like an african lip gauge.
This shit staged, your lines more phony than Criss Angel when he picks someone random from the crowd to ENGAGE.
But these lines magical, So deep i'm ending your battle career, Illunatic is going to send you on a brief subbatical.
I know these lines baffle you, but its pregame, it's time to stretch so my reach doesn't cause hyperextension.
I'm ready to "FINISH" you, so lets see if you can withstand my "TEST", here comes the "BIG BOOT".
Got them "RHINOS" on speed dial, fast with them sharp horns, impact cause a lot of "GORE".
They will lift you up, and send you to "VENIS", so try to avoid them "FLYTRAPS".
But the throw is tom brady style, 100% accuracy so when sent to "VENIS" thats a "MONEY SHOT".
So don't get caught or i'll turn you into one of my Remnant Thoughts.
You stupid clown? RB is the wrong place to claim as your proving grounds
No justice, No peace, but check out my Will Son as Harm begins to shoot him down
you can tell this guys a nerd, i can almost guarantee he's celebate
any idea you had? watch me pop that bubble, now Thoughts irrelevant
tryna join LLL, well first you need to up your status from rookie to ILLOriginally Posted by ILLunatic
Rem is like a virgin at nightclub, to me its just another pussy to kill
watch Harm smear the makup all over this joker's face, this hoax is great
Thoughts better then me, thats like comparing a bic to a hellstorm, not even a close debate
for this body i have no Thoughts of resentment, with this 10 bar im gonna end it
i've strapped TNT to this boy, and pressed the button now this newbie's in remnants
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No links, don't you know the rules @RemnantThoughts
any ways Rem dude you need to structure yo bars into a more readable format, seem like ya creativity lacks substance and ur no impact frm punches,
nothing worth quoting Imo from harm but, at least you stopped that long bar bullshit tbh got @Harmcity clean sweep here one sided battle,
mvgt harm
@RemnantThoughts u have 24h to get voting links in
harmcity has a better idea of what to drop in text whereas remnant's struggling to adapt so far. carrying on schemes is dope in live battles but not really acceptable in text. just set up then punch bro & u'll be a much stronger force. harm u need to cut out the filler and go for the jugular every line. pop that bubble line was cool. vote harm
LOL
Wilson, bubble line
Vs.
Concepts u get the basis and now u need to get aggressive and just blow for blow tbr. Y'all both got potential and I can tell you guys get the point if things just need to flesh it out
ARTIFICIAL | PO'ETHICS | INTELLIGENCE
Yo Rem my dude ur rhyme scheme switch up for text format is all over the place concept wise was cool but ur bars seemed similar to N AUDIO Format the way they were displayed. some of the bars were stretched too. work on shortening the length of ur bars and make sure u have a setup and finish that rhyme.
Harm
You stupid clown? RB is the wrong place to claim as your proving grounds
No justice, No peace, but check out my Will Son as Harm begins to shoot him down
concept itself people gonna quote it overused but I did like the creative wordplay u did with it
you can tell this guys a nerd, i can almost guarantee he's celebate
any idea you had? watch me pop that bubble, now Thoughts irrelevant
good np
Quote Originally Posted by ILLunatic View Post
Go prove yourself in Front Lines first.
tryna join LLL, well first you need to up your status from rookie to ILL
Rem is like a virgin at nightclub, to me its just another pussy to kill
nah wasn't feeling this metaphore
watch Harm smear the makup all over this joker's face, this hoax is great
Thoughts better then me, thats like comparing a bic to a hellstorm, not even a close debate
ok flip
for this body i have no Thoughts of resentment, with this 10 bar im gonna end it
i've strapped TNT to this boy, and pressed the button now this newbie's in remnants
ok nameplay
Felt harm took this easy he better displayed text format material and connecting punches. Rem just needs to get an understanding of how texting format goes and shorten up his bars.
V/Harm
Wilson
Vs.
Nothing
Remnant has the basic down per say but isn't harsh nor executing it to plan really. I like his direction but he needs to get more creative and wittier with going at his opponent. Harm takes this with one line easily but u can see the potential resonating nicely. Rubs off sort of longboat but u can see the potential tial and him bettering his concepts makes him deadly
.v/ Harm
ARTIFICIAL | PO'ETHICS | INTELLIGENCE
5-0 Bump
THIS BATTLE WASNT THE STRONGEST BUT I'LL HAVE TO GO FOR HARM.... HARM HAD A BETTER IDEA OF HOW TO THROW A PUNCH ... BUT BOTH NEED TO WORK ON THEIR CONCEPTS AND PUNCHLINE SETUPS
VOTE: HARMCITY
aka Sorrow: the Broken Wing
Harmcity punches were on point, they connected well. Thoughts was clear but not as hard.
vgt/ harmcity
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