The Things We're Missing

[Engivale]

Lately the pen seems like it hates me again,
The ink knows not to bring flows from where my cranium's been,
It's like I'm Damien and Satan's in the lake for a swim,
A Bachelor's last words are, "I do,"
...And he'll never say them again...
The saga continues, live at audience venues,
Chew apart the human heart when the body has been used,
It's probably friends you would have never expected,
You need the grind they leave behind to get better connected,
I'm misbehavin', sippin' fifths on my sixth probation,
In summation I'm a fuck-up but what's my situation?
Screaming, fists are blazin' I'm bleedin' and hit the pavement,
My life is repossessed but I digress,
...I never skipped a payment...
Every single inch of me is tense, I'm flinching instantly,
Then I get to thinkin' we behave so fuckin differently,
Like Ren & Stimpy we're gross, our human density grows,
Intensity flows like laughter after askin' Casper,
..."Who's the Friendliest Ghost?"...
No spirit is kind, each evenin' the sightless keep leadin' the blind,
This nightly trip is the type of shit you only see with your mind...

The thing I bitch about is the life in which I'm missing out,
Mixing doubt with liquor I'm just in a bigger kitchen now,
I move on with a smooth palm tomorrow's a New Dawn,
Put my groove on and lose the style I've borrowed for too long,
New song, pick a beat and let it fit the peak,
If you take advice and hate your life hold control alt,
...And hit delete...
No need to be sad, I've got weed in a bag,
I keep smokin' the bowl cuz it's the only thing keepin' me glad,
I'm 24 and I've got more gray hair than a state fair,
My STD takes ecstasy finds pussy and stays there,
Put the kids in daycare, go to work and go berserk,
Make your bed, brush your teeth and take your meds,
...Then fold your shirt...
Each minute on this planet there's a cynic that can't stand it,
Pacific to Atlantic every inch of this shit where we've been stranded,
If life was spendin' the night buzzed with a prostitute,
I guess it's cuz Cupid can't shoot it,
...When he just brought the flute...
Why do doves symbolize love is it because it rhymes?
Or the fact that we've all flown in and out a couple of times?

[Engivale]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...940/index.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...931/index.html

^^^links

[soulstice.]

this was sick yo, you have one of the most unique styles and ability to convey seperate messages in one piece.. its like some people flex and write about killin cats, and you flex and just drop knowledge and its ill.

Lately the pen seems like it hates me again,
The ink knows not to bring flows from where my cranium's been,
It's like I'm Damien and Satan's in the lake for a swim,
A Bachelor's last words are, "I do,"
...And he'll never say them again...
bachelor line is legit.
The saga continues, live at audience venues,
Chew apart the human heart when the body has been used,
audience is kinda forced with body has been because the been is kinda shared with venues and the end of audience. and audience is a much quicker set of syllables than three seperate words... dope concept tho.
It's probably friends you would have never expected,
You need the grind they leave behind to get better connected,
I'm misbehavin', sippin' fifths on my sixth probation,
In summation I'm a fuck-up but what's my situation?
Screaming, fists are blazin' I'm bleedin' and hit the pavement,
My life is repossessed but I digress,
...I never skipped a payment...
just stoppin this to say dope flow.. concepts werent as fire, but your stream of conscienceness style relys on images as well.
Every single inch of me is tense, I'm flinching instantly,
Then I get to thinkin' we behave so fuckin differently,
Like Ren & Stimpy we're gross, our human density grows,
Intensity flows like laughter after askin' Casper,
..."Who's the Friendliest Ghost?"...
No spirit is kind, each evenin' the sightless keep leadin' the blind,
This nightly trip is the type of shit you only see with your mind...
casper was nice.. the imagery was there too, as well as the concepts. best part so far.

The thing I bitch about is the life in which I'm missing out,
Mixing doubt with liquor I'm just in a bigger kitchen now,
I move on with a smooth palm tomorrow's a New Dawn,
Put my groove on and lose the style I've borrowed for too long,
New song, pick a beat and let it fit the peak,
If you take advice and hate your life hold control alt,
...And hit delete...
this was alright, i didnt see much connection or relateable concepts/wording to put in the control alt thing, i got the whole delete part.. it just seemed somewhat extraneous. flow was fire though, it jumped suddenly to the next scheme, but it didnt bump the flow around. nice
No need to be sad, I've got weed in a bag,
I keep smokin' the bowl cuz it's the only thing keepin' me glad,
I'm 24 and I've got more gray hair than a state fair,
My STD takes ecstasy finds pussy and stays there,
ahaha
Put the kids in daycare, go to work and go berserk,
Make your bed, brush your teeth and take your meds,
...Then fold your shirt...
very nice image to describe the daily grind here
Each minute on this planet there's a cynic that can't stand it,
Pacific to Atlantic every inch of this shit where we've been stranded,
thought this was stretched a biiiiit and pretty basic and played concepts as well.. but its two lines, not a big deal whatsoever
If life was spendin' the night buzzed with a prostitute,
I guess it's cuz Cupid can't shoot it,
...When he just brought the flute...
Why do doves symbolize love is it because it rhymes?
Or the fact that we've all flown in and out a couple of times?
ahhh the ending was killer man. great way to end it with a rhetorical question, and two great insights on love.. idve liked some punctuation after love.. like a "-" or a comma, but whatever... good shit, great ending

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...12/index2.html
hit it if you got time kind sire

[Galactus The Devourer]

Iight I never peeped your work before... and from the very first lines I knew that I would enjoy this piece.

"Lately the pen seems like it hates me again,
The ink knows not to bring flows from where my cranium's been,
It's like I'm Damien and Satan's in the lake for a swim,
A Bachelor's last words are, "I do,"
...And he'll never say them again..."

starts off strong, I love drops about god/satan and almost horrocore drops..

"Chew apart the human heart when the body has been used,"
nice imagery and like I said horrorcorish..

"Screaming, fists are blazin' I'm bleedin' and hit the pavement,
My life is repossessed but I digress,
...I never skipped a payment..."

ill.. Nice flow, I felt the imagery of the fight in such a short descriptive line.. nice.

wasnt feeling the ren and stimpy line or casper lines tbh..

ending to the first verse was nice..

"Mixing doubt with liquor I'm just in a bigger kitchen now,"

dope

"If you take advice and hate your life hold control alt,
...And hit delete..."

kinda played playaaa..

std line was funny but ehh..

these lines had me laughing with a nice flow.Put the kids in daycare, go to work and go berserk,
Make your bed, brush your teeth and take your meds,
...Then fold your shirt"

"for real sometimes the daily routine is just too much.Each minute on this planet there's a cynic that can't stand it,
Pacific to Atlantic every inch of this shit where we've been stranded,
If life was spendin' the night buzzed with a prostitute,
I guess it's cuz Cupid can't shoot it,
...When he just brought the flute...
Why do doves symbolize love is it because it rhymes?
Or the fact that we've all flown in and out a couple of times?"

the ending overall was pretty dope.. I liked the questions.. your style is so damn different, and I enjoy it. Anyways I was feeling this, pretty enjoyable other than an occasional slighly overused or slightly corny line .. that was still rare in this verse.

nice witty drop with lots of meaning and some good questions and subject matter brought up.

pz plz rtf .

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[Engivale]

thx for the good feed, guys...

Just got finished w/ Mother's Day weekend, very big for restaurants...

Anyways I'll RTF tonight I gotta go back up in that bitch and close it down tonight, too, so I'll have time tomorrow. But thanks for the feed

[BadBoiKilla92]

thats wassup bro, love it

[Cody Nash]

Why do doves symbolize love is it because it rhymes?
Or the fact that we've all flown in and out a couple of times?


^^that was a great fuckin' line my dude...


entertaining read no doubt.. I like how you relay a message in every piece.. you're talking about real life shit on a constant basis and spinning it into a web of words we can clearly understand.. each line is like a sentence.. like some philosophy on life... flows like butter... this shit is the type of shit I love readin' from you.. one man's pain is another man's glory so to speak.... some creative shit.. I liked the casper line.. the repossessed... the cupid one... dope material man.. it's amazing that this shit is like riding a bike to your ass.. you come back from the dead every other month just to write some shit, haha... def enjoyable.. nothing bad from my end...


props..

[Tragedian.]

New song, pick a beat and let it fit the peak,
If you take advice and hate your life hold control alt,
...And hit delete...

This was amazing, I've always loved your work dude.. you've never written anything I haven't liked. Not in depth feed, just wanna say it was great.

[SCK]

You are amazing nuff said