Love Wasn't the Mission

[Cody Nash]

Love Wasn't the Mission
By: Cry





"Doing a thing well is often a waste of time." - Robert Byrne

With his frame on hers, leaning in to say it once,
screaming "I love you" to her in a crimson lake of blood,
unmoving, because of the way each break was done
when he threw her down; scratched her face to dust,
and even more in reverse, her waist is touched,
but just as seductive - she takes his gun,
escaping lust, while feet bind up to floor -
and that's when he did line one through four..

"Baby, I want you more.. a man with power is sexy!
lets kill that bastard, he's so sour with envy..
give me flowers with every passing day of the week,
and I'll let you fuck me, we'll never stay on our feet."
is what she'd say on the street, just moments before,
and this is the crap that had him gropin' the whore..
exploding in form from the previous carchase,
he shot a cop, like her hands; immediate heart-race!
heavy beating, it starts plain, he gets away in a flash,
but it doesn't take long for cars to stray at his back,
lights spin and attack.. he slams into a cruiser,
one hit and it's smashed, semi tips but he's through first,
its chains snap and do worse, the fall is comin' -
huge logs pile off.. killing all but one pig,
a rookie, the dumb kid, he tries to dodge it but can't,
the assailant leans out and fights him off with one blast..
stops it all just like that, Bonnie n' Clyde on the run,
'til the beginning of the story, where she dies in her blood.

But..

before the chase, and pickin' her up from the cop-shop,
the man was with his brother, getting orders to lop off
any head in his way.. when he helps her escape!
then he'd be rewarded, which would help for his place..
so.. hell for some grace, that's how it looked to begin with,
and he killed half the force, making good of the dimwits..
a little wood with some finish, bugs repelled and stopped now,
as pristine skill's helped him unlock her cell and walk out.

So..

last but not least, we'll end with the start of the story,
the man had his talents.. but his heart was informing -
him that he must part with the boring, make use of life soon,
because as it all goes.. it takes two to find you,
so rewind to verse two if you're looking for what is..
"lets kill that bastard" - otherwise her husband,
his brother's fucked test.. one for allegiance to family,
telling her to kiss our guy just to see if he's grabby..
then lastly.. once he kissed or grabbed back -
she was to take his gun, shoot him in the back, and..
with his frame on hers, leaning in to say it once,
screaming "I love you" to her in a crimson lake of blood,
unmoving, because of the way each break was done
when he threw her down; scratched her face to dust,
and even more in reverse, her waist is touched,
but just as seductive - she takes his gun,
escaping lust, while feet bind up to floor -
and that's when he did line one through four..







peace..

[Cody Nash]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...483/index.html
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[MAFIOZO]

creative, this was nice in that it made full circle. i thought it was incomplete untill i saw the 3rd verse, it was a good read. I wasn't even gonna read it but i'm happy i did.refreshing.Interesting title too. Lookin forward to the next. Plz RTF

[HYPOKRIT]

Entertainment pure entertainment. This was a great little story, I thought the abstract start and finish bit were slightly forced and didnt work that cleanly but i still got the idea.

""Baby, I want you more.. a man with power is sexy!
lets kill that bastard, he's so sour with envy..
give me flowers with every passing day of the week,
and I'll let you fuck me, we'll never stay on our feet."
is what she'd say on the street, just moments before,
and this is the crap that had him gropin' the whore..
exploding in form from the previous carchase,
he shot a cop, like her hands; immediate heart-race!
heavy beating, it starts plain, he gets away in a flash,
but it doesn't take long for cars to stray at his back,
lights spin and attack.. he slams into a cruiser,
one hit and it's smashed, semi tips but he's through first,
its chains snap and do worse, the fall is comin' -
huge logs pile off.. killing all but one pig,
a rookie, the dumb kid, he tries to dodge it but can't,
the assailant leans out and fights him off with one blast..
stops it all just like that, Bonnie n' Clyde on the run,
'til the beginning of the story, where she dies in her blood."

I thought this whole section was dope.

"escaping lust, while feet bind up to floor -
and that's when he did line one through four.."

These rhymes didnt work for me the rhyme seems forced. I think if ou had of added THE and TO to make it

escaping lust, while feet bind up to THE floor -
and that's when he did line one through TO four..

even though the words dont rhyme the syllables are there and it makes it smoother just my 2 cents

Good drop

[Erun.]

This was a good story, there was a lot of detail, imagery, and the idea was thought out well. Only problem I had is that you did a great job taking me into the story to the point where I was hoping for a better ending, basically, it didn't go the way that I wanted it to so that disappointed me. Your flow wasn't par to the storyline or content, which stopped it from being a flawless drop, because you had everything in there except a smooth flow. The parts that did flow weren't consistent enough to make it all smooth out you know what I mean? Overall though, I enjoyed the story, it had emotion and great content.

[Johnny 6-feet]

Good work geez, you brought the creativity and imagery that i've come to expect from you in your writtens. The circular nature of the piece was a trip to read and you stayed on point most of the time with your rhyme scheme and generall flow (the odd fluctuation but it was barely noticeable) not hard to see why you've got so many HoF pieces. Can't really find any real fault with this. I enjoyed the story, never got bored with it.

Keep posting, cheers for the rep.

[Cody Nash]

word, thanks guys.


the whole thing was an experiment.. I thought to myself and said that I'd never written a piece BACKWARDS before, which is how this story is told.. it's told from the ending to the beginning instead of the beginning to end. it was more of a fun exercise for myself than anything.. writing this way was actually a bit more challenging as well. try it some time!

[Cody Nash]

yup..

[Cody Nash]

once more?

[Nahlidge]

lollllllllllllllllllll. hahahahaha. I went back and read it again. Slick shit duke. Put together nicely once you read it the 2nd time. Written dopely to not be completely understood the first time. I like these types of pieces where shit isn`t what it seems the first read through. Good shit. Like I didn`t even catch the "and that`s when he did line one through four" in the first stanza. I caught it in the last one tho. Good read.

[AlphaMetric]

this was dope man.... haven't read something quite like this before.... and it was dope... I like how you put the begining at the end type shit and the end at the middle start type thing, real creative.... the rhyme scheme was pretty much on point... even thos this was a simple piece... it was real deep this shit, like on another level and I like that... good read....

if you got time, check this out...
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...125/index.html

[xEvilDx]

very creative almost like a pulp fiction movie, A story of love , betrayal and cop chases

[Cody Nash]

thanks guys.

[mickey spotz]

still dont totally comprehend the whole plot but shit is mad intricate on this one. lot of thinking went into this piece i can tell. maybe you could elaborate on why his brother was testing him in the first place? but anyway, dope in the sense that im gonna have to read this a few times. good drop

[-SynText-]

dope shit...i was gonna stop after the first few lines but it grabbed me and sucked me in...i've read it 3 times and love it everytime...imagery was grweat story was dope....the whole full circle line thing was beautfully put togethor.....good job...9/10mics