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    Grandmother

    To my Grandmother..

    sup grams, just want you to know you helped me grow my heart,
    mom dukes told me lots, like my uncle and aunts sold your spot
    the roads are tough, no ones holding jobs, I try to keep my cool
    you know I used to sleep in school, now that I reach my diploma
    "I got a teaching persona", same government-breeding tool
    everyone needs whats new, but I still spit of skilled sorts
    I work in a thrift shop, in a city's immersion of rich sports
    the media's absurd and distraught, where children's kids
    are learned and mistaught, I'm living where I always inhibit
    we keep our apologies with us, sorry we hardly would visit..
    then we'd stop in from Boston cause your cribs a calming place
    consolidates, but I look at my reflection to see a monsters face
    you'd hand me an awesome plate, and say "have something to eat"
    your loving from the oven, potato dumplings dumped in churico
    got me plucking my teeth.. for real, honestly, when you died
    I didn't shed a tear, how could I? all I did was rest my eyes..
    gazing upon the test of life.. I fell inside a rotten torture
    all the doctors offers, a promise around the darkest corners..
    before the prolonging shortens, and the inevitable happens
    whatever will happen, mom loves you with immeasurable passion,
    then I'd settled your casket.. and really seen how empty it is
    you knew what readiness is, so when the rest of my family splits,
    your missed, sincerely....
    and back at our apartment we started seeing shit missing
    my brother used us, said we started treating him different,
    I was bleeding suspicion, mom wants serenity, his rent was free
    helped him get his job back, so he could live independently
    ..packed his shit and didn't give a thing, it riled my mind
    mom needs to smile in spite, I just can't see her crying at night
    your hopes we're higher than mine.. and look, of all people,
    your granddaughter is taking loot from the root of all evil..
    and I'm at your funeral in a tuxedo, it called for my styling
    only cared if my rhymes are sick, I never wore any designer shit..
    prayed your grapevine was left... Lex wanted me to move to Maine
    my little run away, but I don't think she really loves the same
    overprotective and underpaid, a dumb mistake.. I catch feelings
    it's like my next ailment comes as soon as my heads healing,
    you were the best caring, and mikes smarter than a deadly geek
    Budda promised an extra seat, to the movies if he'd stop
    getting suspended every week, those trying to be finding help
    should know the question and answer always remains inside myself
    I enter a quiet shell, and remember those I'll never level with
    you taught me silly things, that possibilities are limitless..

    thank you..


    always with love,
    your grandson
    Last edited by _Lyrics; February 9th, 2009 at 05:09 AM
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    Re: Grandmother

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...nt-389672.html
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...dy-389706.html

    ..I haven't dropped a real-life piece since forever ago,
    hope you enjoy what I live
    Last edited by _Lyrics; February 9th, 2009 at 05:17 AM
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    Re: Grandmother

    I'm not sure why you always seem to get slept on man, .. I personally really liked this piece.

    I'm not going to disect it, because this is obviously a piece that is more personal to you, therefore I don't think anyone can truly offer relevant crit. You know what you feel, and you seem to have really put it across well in words man.

    It was in my opinion a well written piece.

    Keep on dropping man

    Peace & God Bless
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    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ot-389956.html
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    damn man... great read.

    got me plucking my teeth.. for real, honestly, when you died
    I didn't shed a tear, how could I? all I did was rest my eyes..
    gazing upon the test of life.. I fell inside a rotten torture
    all the doctors offers, a promise around the darkest corners..
    before the prolonging shortens, and the inevitable happens
    whatever will happen, mom loves you with immeasurable passion,


    ^that part had me going man... your grandmother sounds just like mine, but then again I suppose most grandmothers of our age have so much wisdom and caring that they all seem perfect... they're the glue that binds our families together, and when they pass... our families do stupid shit, they separate, betray other family members instead of sticking up for them... sadly enough, it does happen... it's fucked... I can relate to this hardcore becuase my grandmother was a huge part of our family. I mean last time my family from Arkansas visited us was at her funeral which was over 8 years ago... so word... I can relate to wanting to get away... everything about this was just dead on/accurate with LIFE... great read man, thanks for that... you hit me deep, thanks for the reality check.



    nomin' this for ya, duke... personal pieces don't often make OMHoF but imo this deserves the fighting chance to get a spot in there...

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    man I was almost sure this was going to die
    thanks for the revive, i'll rtf when I get home from work...
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    one....laast....revive............
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    Re: Grandmother

    yo this was nasty

    not sure really how to rate pieces like this


    but it is what it is


    its sick man

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    this was a awesome piece...and i feel this ALOT cause my gramps recently passed 2 months ago....i'm not gonna go simp on you and say i almost couldn't finish reading it...but it was more of me almost not wanting to finish the read...but if i did stop...it woulda been disrespectful....all in all...

    enjoyed.
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