Locksmith [Walls 2]

[_Lyrics]

before you read
here is walls
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...us-354345.html
or if you want to hear it as audio hit the sig up..
you need to read or listen to the 1st part to really know what im making
references too in the second..



I AM THE LOCKSMITH... [no wall can stop me]

I AM.. THE LOCKSMITH... [so open your mind]


reciting of shaolin mass, i'm brawling back to regroup
the writings on the wall, this wall I have a key to
it's seen as a preview, I prove my side to deceive you,
when I lose my mind, any other key seems to be seethrough..
my instinct is evil, it sinks mystical & mystically
with riddles full of sinistery, and inimical iniquity's
pitiful, admit you'll bleed, wishing me & every individual
gives a shit to see.. but visions ease with heavy visuals..
our class was raised middle, all we know is city fuss
all we grow is hideous, graves chiseled, intaglio insignia's..
you make windows, to peak or leap, or cheat to eat
your plate is bait, pots of plots that sneaks will seek
they creep to me, the scenery is felt as flaming pain
burning the pain away, what remains is regaining strength
I protean my aims, to spit heartless, hypnotic,
talking quixotic for forming melodic mirages,
never stopping the locksmith-got this animation written
and feeling blame, with fear attained in irrigation systems
to seal your fate and dealing haste to hate the victims
then scale the weight of any man with irritation in him
I forsake forgiving, you better hold your grudges
and close the shutters on almost all the wonders
where all is nothing, so retreat to grab your stuff
spittin weak for faster bucks, flippin beef like spatulas
you kidding me? I had enough, your here to release singles
& tell me to see things'll never show how my key jingles
with speech that heats lingual, its movement's aquatic
if I lose then i'm off this, to create acumen acrostics
is it cool when you talk shit? you belong in abeyance
gone with no hate on the 200th quadrant of chaos
too awesome to face flaws, like an auction to take frauds
i'm stomping to pay yours a visit, rocking them Adawgs..
unlocking what makes god, living within the supreme bean
a city that eats teams, and spits out another's free dream
to see things as they really are, damn scandalous
and leaves me in a tin can 'cause i'm cantankerous



I AM THE LOCKSMITH... [no wall can stop me]

I AM.. THE LOCKSMITH... [so open your mind]

[_Lyrics]

links:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...rt-373247.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ll-373198.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...th-373291.html

[Axe.]

hmmm just got back, you know man..been rough times, enough about me...this piece was pretty cool man I liked the concept locksmith, playing the role of somehwere who can go anywhere he wants...pretty cool, we can see he overcomes a void in his life, which is a good thing to have, you stepped away from the tragedy...yeah,, you did good on the imagery but you just over did it with some of the vocab man, I think you could have used shorter words to make the multis work, and it would flow better man, your still in the right direction of being a good writer man, just keep it up, I wanna see a tragic/suspense/triumph joint by you..those are the best! so try one.

[Ntalek]

HUH?

Well Bob...I know how you get down and it was shown here...you're multi's were crazy and nothing seemed to be forced enough to stress the issue over....I pretty much know how you execute your vocab and the read was on point IMO...the imagery was there and explain in full detail...I remember reading walls a while back..and to keep the story going and playin off the old drop was just plain stupid nice! and as always the flow was there in full blast...and the overall concept was cleverly written and easily understood...so yeah this was another good drop from Bobericc...

[_Lyrics]

uppp

[Cody Nash]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ll-373589.html
for you, feat. Deviant... feedback appreciated...






this piece was quite dope. I like the rhymescheme... VERY solid shit. the vocab in this would almost make this hard to deliver on an audio track, be cool to see if you could do it. but yeah, I like the concept of getting through any wall or "obstacle"... sort've like a self motivation type piece... like you could do anything, no pathways to greatness are locked for you because YOU are the locksmith... real nice though, nothing I found wrong and nothing at all here that I slipped up on. just a pretty straightforward piece, thanks for the read.


get back at me...

[P. Mortuus]

Bob you should of told me about this Walls 2 this is opus I was on Walls 1.....

[_Lyrics]

what up man, my fault i thought i did send you a pm but you never replied.. dont worry we can collab again if you want.

[P. Mortuus]

^sure thing my dude....I'll send you something wrote up in a couple of hours.

[_Lyrics]

more feed please

leave links

[soulstice.]

good shit my man, the flow was pretty much on point here, and thats what matters most when theres no actual story to be told lol. at least i think its a more of a flex piece, not a story? anyway, the imagery was there thanks to your word choice and made this piece strong and id like to hear it recorded on audio, i think this would be dope vocalized.

spittin weak for faster bucks, flippin beef like spatulas
you kidding me? I had enough, your here to release singles
& tell me to see things'll never show how my key jingles
with speech that heats lingual, its movement's aquatic
if I lose then i'm off this, to create acumen acrostics
is it cool when you talk shit? you belong in abeyance
gone with no hate on the 200th quadrant of chaos
too awesome to face flaws, like an auction to take frauds
i'm stomping to pay yours a visit, rocking them Adawgs..

that part was niiice, seriously think of recording this as a verse, it would sound good imo.

good job