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    Anatomy of life: The lover left in the corner

    Anatomy of life: The lover left in the corner.

    Warning to the wise:
    She moves like finger tips soaked in acid
    Posing as beauty yet smiles with chipped
    Teeth; twisting the spinal chords to sound
    Out of tune. Her lungs yearn for a taste of
    Oxygen, whilst she lingers in turmoil of
    Smokey waters; drenched in an alcoholics
    Speech impediment; walking in a semi
    Straight line towards the place she calls
    Home; a grey mesh of colour, hindering
    The visions that we call our ideals, with
    Sandy hair, haggard by the journey of
    Mankind, bleached by the suns fury

    Taste her; she’s good to me so watch
    Your mouth when you kiss her ivory
    Lips; the stop sign is up, yet the danger
    Warnings mean nothing, as she is the
    Food for thought I lust for in my veins.
    Party on the tongue; lovers of rapture
    Slicing through the nervous system as
    The rivers of love flow in the wrong
    Direction; laughing as she seduces me
    Into submission, vinegar smile, sour to
    The senses, yet sweet to the taste

    I do not wish to come down; I’m quite
    Happy to stay upon this cloud I rest
    & Besides, white rose petals are quite
    The spectacle through the eyes of
    The partially blind marriage councillors

    Resist the temptation to love her,
    She’ll eat you alive my friend, you’re
    Not even in her league sir, believe me.

    And this I spoke to her:
    I once tasted you, we were close you
    And I, yet over time you had no use
    For me, you moved out of my veins
    As soon as the flat line called you for
    A moonlit dinner, was he worth it baby?
    Did his cancerous touch supply you with
    cold shivers in the nights you slept?
    Not alone, yet infected by your own
    Misjudgement; now walk with me
    As I fall to your pardon, grace no
    Longer suits my fancy, so cross’s
    And prayers of the wealthy will
    NOT be needed for sympathetic
    Ears! Dammed for your sins.

    You’ve left me to set in stone
    Sitting with the clocks hands
    Wrapped around my cradled
    Skull, the flag of humanity
    Hangs around my neck to
    Prove that your noose is tighter
    Than meets the throat.
    Celebrating your arrival with
    Nothing more than pebbles
    In the eye lids, to show my
    Gratitude for the time we had
    Spent together, my darling!

    Non-the less I wish you well
    in your new relationship, Mr
    and Mrs death, it does have a
    certain ring to it doesn’t it?

    -Poeta.
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    Re: Anatomy of life: The lover left in the corner

    this wasa nice catchy piece....some very nice wording here mr.poeta. you displayed why you are one of the highly recognized poets on this site....your vocab was used nicely and well done as thepiece spoke nicely with emotions real serene and calm. you had me from start to finish dazzled from this piece i mean people do this type of writings all the time but you worded yours with great caution to notify yours into originality nah mean?.. you had it on lock with a vice grip. your own emotion was the main thing that i loved as you know me LOVING emotional pieces..aswell as you doing it well with nice metaphors man.. i love shit like this..nice read and it really appeals to the readers eye to understand. big ups fellow mate.

    hit this link up in return pls.
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    Re: Anatomy of life: The lover left in the corner

    Thanks, and i'll hit your link up.

    Upping.
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    Re: Anatomy of life: The lover left in the corner

    Upping
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    Re: Anatomy of life: The lover left in the corner

    upping. c'mon people.
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    Re: Anatomy of life: The lover left in the corner

    dude how could this be getting slept on people....step up to the plate....oh yea and poeta dont forget please about IE cus i have a hunch were gonna have a bunch of no shows...
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    Re: Anatomy of life: The lover left in the corner

    Cool man, oh and i just fed on your piece dude.
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    Re: Anatomy of life: The lover left in the corner

    cool man thanks...

    now one more piece if you could the one you wanted out to be posted in PS cigarette faith. you asked i did cus in hinesty i wasnt gonna put cigarette faith in PS i was gonna skip it but you said put it so i did....if you dont got time its cool i understand. if you dont remember i can link you...
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    Re: Anatomy of life: The lover left in the corner

    link me man
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