"International Irony" - By: Jonathon & Heychoo

[Jon]

"International Irony"
By: Jonathon & Heychoo

Readers Note: This is a story, of a young man in Africa, around the age of 15. And of a child in America, nearing the age of 13. Everyone has bad days, but some are worse than others.

Woke up in the morning, before the crack of dawn
Expecting to see debris out side - nope - gone
The rain had stalled another day - and so did relaxation
For we were to head out at 6 AM - 'twas our inclination
We walked through the jungle, praying, needing food
Hadn't seen meat in 6 damn days - starvation became a mood
Finally found food for my family - a Savannah Buffalo slain
Dragged him back home - food tastes sweetest when in pain

I'm a screw up, plus today's been the worst day of my life
The pain inside aches, so I'll just mix my wrist and my knife
Made a low B on my math test, my looks aren't the best
On top of all this, I spilled half my lunch on my expensive vest!
My lip hurts, I'm tired, and I just discovered a new pimple
The whole worlds against me, why can't life just be simple?
I only got to play 3 minutes out of 5 at my basketball game
And today at my awards ceremony, they misspelled my name!

As soon as I finished eating, my mom opened her mouth to speak
"Go check on your brother, I can't bury two sons in one week"
I found him laying in a bed - virgin eyes sitting quietly
"Stay strong little brother - fight cancer defiantly"
The doctors say he can't see now - that might be true
But I think he knows I was there - he had the best view
Family means most to me - every day with them is a treat
But this is by far the best day I've had in sorrow-marked weeks

I ate too much at lunch, and I dropped my books all day
I have tons of homework, a few worksheets, and a two page essay
My best friend made fun of me, and everyone just laughed
Plus, on my favorite video game I got last in the fantasy draft
I wish I could run away from the USA, this is a place I hate
It’s supposed to be free, I'm grounded, I don't see what’s so great
I told my parents about it, & they just whipped me with their belts
I hate my life, it’s worthless, and I just wish I could kill myself!

Heychoo = Normal
Jonathon = Itallics

[Jon]

Links will be provided tomorrow morning.

[jp3]

hey you guys did some dope ish right herr-----------------------------------i mean i could image it with every word-------you 2 should be in the open mics hall of fame for this peice---------------------------------------------------hit up one of my open mics in the sig-----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

[Boxin Mics]

not bad i was feelin this collab. both had a nice and smooth flow. structure was on point. only thing i can really say against this is... try working your rhyme scheme cuz it was kinda basic (simple). either way it still came out dope so dont take it as hate. good job you both came okay. keep up the good work guys.

[Meters]

diggin heychoos bits, wasnt really diggin yours jonothan, was pretty out there.. lol killing yourself, cmon man

[Jon]

diggin heychoos bits, wasnt really diggin yours jonothan, was pretty out there.. lol killing yourself, cmon man

dude.. its a 12 year old thinking he's having a bad day. Compared to the african boy. The african dude just deals with it and moves on even though his times were harder, the 12 year old thinks he's having a bad day, but he doesnt realize how good he has it.. and don't lie..

the phrase "I'm going to kill myself" is tossed around quite a bit in america, even though they don't mean it

[Jon]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=329466

[Heychoo]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...81#post5567081

[Jon]

uppin.

[Jon]

quit the sleeping please.

[el paco loco]

ayo this peice was maaaad dope {real talk}..........i could image it and every thing this deserves to be in hall of fame........this was a really nice collab for both of you...........i know not to fuck with either one of you in a topical lol...........but on the real this was nice.........basically i give it 20/10________
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[Jon]

uppin. thanks for feed

[Jon]

upping hoes...

[Messiah.]

Nice piece here guys you made a good job of it...The vocabulary and grammar worked nice and your rhymescheme was successful also, I liked the emotion in this piece and the imagery wasnt to shabby, it had nice precision to it and the fluency was good also...Overall good piece stay up guys ^

[Jon]

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