Thoughts Of A Gangsta

[Dark_Shadow]

so dark & deep and as i roll thru these streets
alot of niggas talk, but they afraid to bust there heat
take a seat, listen to my mind, cock back my nine
if u got it & i want it, ima make it mine, fo' sho
respect to da lord iz da reason i aint a G no more
u cant run from me, afta da chase i'll leave ya feet all sore
make ya mom into a whore, ima lyrical demon
make ya mom hold my dick & ya sister swallow my semen
it aint much to a G if ya wanna have beef, then its on homie
i'll break u off all on my lonely, 187 out, i think they saw me
im creepin thru da valley of da dark, clear my eyes, im at a park
a gadget in my hand wit a safety a barrel & a 9 bullet clip
and for sum reason when i pull it out pussy niggas tend to flip
ur bitch in my tub takin a dip, then she on my bed, im offering her a drink
sum hennesy in a cup & she starts to sip, we have a moment of silence
then da cops wanna disrespect me with all there loud sirens
i go into my closet pull out my mossberg shotty
my bulletproof vest custom made to perfectly fit my body
take a puff of da 'dro and take a final sip of bacardi
bullets fly around like a Downtown jamican party
my bars are wicked, & wit da flow im sick wit it
aint it amazing how i can tell a story and u aint gonna believe it?
but its ok Rb iz full of fakes that say it but dont wanna live ithttp://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...09#post4481509
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...=1#post4481493

[Sinful Thoughts]

Blah... I Really Wasnt Feeling This, Structure And Flow Was Below Par.
Played Subject To I Felt You Forced It And It Was Stretched....
Overall Poor Drop... (No Hate) Elevate 4/10.

[Dark_Shadow]

nigga u dont kno how to give feedback!!
how was my verse stretched?!!
my flow was good nigga, damn u suck dick like ya pops
can i plz get sum real feedback

[Max.Cleveland]

This was not hot
more like patch work
you difted so many time
I couldnt keep up with all the subject used.
suggest'n you start over from scratch
basic rhyme, basic vocab
do this for the next drop

[Forever]

Yea this was just ok. The concept was still on that ima gangsta and I aint afraid to pull the trigger shit but it was okay for whats it worth. I thouht the flow and rhyme scheme was on point I dont know why that dude said it was strecthed. But I feel if you apply some of your skills to more important concepts you could be better. Know what im saying like nobody wants to hear that gangsta I aint afraid to pull it rap, So if you could get some original concepts you could be one that I would like to read from again, no hate stay up...

[Forever]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=293835

If you could hit this up in return that would be appreciated