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  1. April 28th, 2006, 06:02 PM #1
    Don Vito
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    The Apocalypse

    Bars be merciless~turn ecosystems desolate~anti benevolence
    Drop sickness like falling bodies of cancer patients~pack da stainless
    Inject ether in language~crucified with the kings English
    Shots”Flu” hit’em like immunizations~cumulitive decapitations
    Run rampant in my paragraph war simulation
    Eclispe with physics sunlight decreases~scatter tombs to pieces
    Channel prophecy then catapult where the east is
    I’m a poltergeist in a costume imitating the human species
    A pawn in a chess game~war-n-cocaine~encrypts the length of my name
    Put the IN in the sane~flame and propane~ I piss both in the same
    Anything with a pulse becomes a target~souless and heartless
    Cremated bones is the canvas for this artist~me and bliss remain departed
    Jagged with daggers that sever the abdomen~even my priest is gat packin
    Assault bleed life oral bullets echo attackin serial killer disfigure flesh in weird patterns
    hit you with 50 like I shot the blood of curtis Jackson
    Leave “Moor” dead than Christian crusades in Europe
    Like a horizontal fight we’ll never match up
    Your attitude should be like a spine on the ceiling and back up
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  2. April 28th, 2006, 06:10 PM #2
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    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=288828
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  3. April 28th, 2006, 06:13 PM #3
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  4. April 28th, 2006, 06:27 PM #4
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    Didnt really like it didnt really make sence

    the only line I felt was

    "I’m a poltergeist in a costume imitating the human species"

    apart from that smh not really my thing... sorry pz

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    Who'd of thought my tongue was ready to kill
    You better lay still- its hunting a meal
    Leaving bodys in ice rack its it nature to chill
    Leaving you top E "so maybe" ya'l die by ta pill
    So many victums the piles got as big as a hill
    ...Punisher...
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  5. April 28th, 2006, 06:31 PM #5
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    wow a 21 year old didnt understand that? well i guess ur Uneducated..ok go to college then come bakk n read this...matta fact go bakk to high school..wadda fagget..

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  6. April 28th, 2006, 07:37 PM #6
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    that was a good piece man, i like the imagry and the wordplay... the rhymes was nice i saw some multis in there, good topic, flow was a lil off here and there, same with the structure but all in all it was a good piece and well put 2 gether, i c good potential in you... keep it up.
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  7. April 28th, 2006, 08:05 PM #7
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    good looks man ur 15 and u understood it thas good my nigga...Punisher or w/e gotta get of da PC & get a Job u feel me

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  8. April 28th, 2006, 08:28 PM #8
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    wow, how the fuck are you complex in your rhymes and post in my thread

    "LMAO .,..hahahahahhahahahaha.,, me was thinkin dat too"
    ^maybe you didnt get the reason he said that, i didnt post anything and left it blank...thats why cats started acting up
    ......

    anyways, mine as well leave feed, i think you were concintrating too hard on the vocab which was great dont get me wrong, but the flow was choppy at times, and there was clever but not "clever" just speech. i expect some similies and connections that make your eyes rise. i didnt get a poetic sence off this at all either, i feel like you were solely concintrating on the wording and forgot where your heart in the om was, no hate i was really feelin it, i just think you, yourself could use work on other aspects beside vocab

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  9. April 28th, 2006, 08:45 PM #9
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    Inject ether in language~crucified with the kings English


    i like that shit...

    some of the multies were good but the rymes themselves werent really the strongpoint and some of those little connections you made between the phrases were great...good imagery and details but the vocab did seem forced in places

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  10. April 28th, 2006, 09:30 PM #10
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    Quote Originally Posted by Bo6vious
    wow, how the fuck are you complex in your rhymes and post in my thread

    "LMAO .,..hahahahahhahahahaha.,, me was thinkin dat too"
    ^maybe you didnt get the reason he said that, i didnt post anything and left it blank...thats why cats started acting up
    ......

    anyways, mine as well leave feed, i think you were concintrating too hard on the vocab which was great dont get me wrong, but the flow was choppy at times, and there was clever but not "clever" just speech. i expect some similies and connections that make your eyes rise. i didnt get a poetic sence off this at all either, i feel like you were solely concintrating on the wording and forgot where your heart in the om was, no hate i was really feelin it, i just think you, yourself could use work on other aspects beside vocab
    im Don Vito..thnx for da Feed but i reall thought what u wrote was stupid srry dawg
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  11. April 28th, 2006, 09:36 PM #11
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    Quote Originally Posted by Dark_Shadow
    im Don Vito..thnx for da Feed but i reall thought what u wrote was stupid srry dawg
    how about im Bo6, and i could give a flying fuck what you think
    'Chaeta
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  12. April 28th, 2006, 09:43 PM #12
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    ^lol word man this lil niggas talk mad shit cant see real talent u feel me?

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