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    Invisible

    From the nuclear weapons, threatening our lives
    From the country that strives, is that really wise?
    Exceptionally fighting, but fighting to an extent
    That the only way out is the path that was sent
    From god, or no? Like a collapsing tower
    Was it caused by a man or some invisible power?
    Are we talking about mercenaries, or something much more?
    Is is gods law, or a Nuclear pour, That caused this earth to reunite once more?
    Under the protection, of the ten commandments
    or under the pressure, of new soldier enhancements
    Under the guide, of the holy books?
    Or under the jurisdiction of a thousand looks
    a thousand eyes, whatching you everyday
    Do you stay and pray, or go out and play
    Or do you do both, not knowing what to do
    when someone beats you, can you really press undo?
    And forget that who, the who that hit you
    because you gotta remember that 1+1 = two
    And you can never forget that its part of human nature
    To fight and argue and to say "i HATE ya"
    But do you really mean it, or is a empty threat
    Are you even ready for this bullshit yet?
    Think about that, every time you go for action
    Against some rebel mafia faction
    because you never really know whos watching you
    A god or someone who really loves you.
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    Uppin..
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    whatthefuck?
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    Uppin, my last one
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    this piece was ok i guess..
    i didnt really feel alot of emotion in it
    it seemed like u juss rushed it...
    the topic was cool too...there iz war going on alot too
    i hated da structure of this piece..it didnt have a central core at all
    it was juss all ova the place..lines were streched which hurt the flow

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