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    Just Imagine

    [verse1]
    Imagine if you found out your whole life was wasted-
    Nothing could equal the pain and tears u've tasted
    And what if this whole universe was fake!?
    Everything in this world, was only put there by fate
    Where only doing things we need to do, to get through-
    This life, and push the pain aside too,
    So we can breathe free and still constantly-
    Reach to the top, never drop and do it succesfully
    Aliens are living among us, what if that happen?
    Would the future exist and would there be rappin?-
    Just imagine if the poor didnt have to starve-
    And how come where all sick if the best medicines to laugh,
    We all hit a wall get up and take the fall-
    Some people arent lucky thats when heaven calls,
    The ones that didn't make it, are looking from above-
    So your never alone theres no need for those drugs

    [chorus]x2
    Just imagine if all your plans went wrong
    Imagine if i couldnt write lyrics to this song-
    Just imagine if you couldnt breathe without sucess
    If that was the case only a few would be left

    [verse2]
    If we just imagined and not do anything about it-
    The world's population would die, nothing would be crowded
    Fear surrounds us so we cant take the next step-
    Where held back with no time to take the next breathe,
    We can't last when we all rely on trust
    We move fast until our hearts are crushed
    Cos we live for the hopes and dreams within ourselfs
    And we still havn't proved if theres a place called hell-
    So until thats proved, im not believing in it
    And im never quitting what i do, i'll do it every minute
    Be what ever u want, im going down my own path
    And i'll complete my goals from the first til the last
    All through the day i just imagine if i'll make it
    And im forced to say im still learning the basics
    We can only imagine, if this world will pick up
    Cos i'm sick of news reports, i've had enough

    [chorus]x2

    [verse3]
    Imagine if the human body didnt even bleed-
    And we should all do favours knowing you wont recieve-
    Cos your heart inside, builds up courage and pride-
    For such a meaningful life i need to build up the hype
    Just imagine the experience, that ive been gifted-
    From the beats and rhymes, my performance is lifted-
    And I think to myself, should i pack up and quit?-
    No way i just imagine when i make a huge hit
    Reach to the top of the charts with all the glory
    Give the crowd a taste so they'll buy my story-
    Thats exactly how it is and theres no goin back
    I no longer wait for the day when i make it on a track-
    Cos i've started my goal...to reach the top-
    And i'd be writing a song, every single chance i got
    I hope my plan works but i hope it happens sooner
    God knows, but i can just imagine the future

    [chorus]x2

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    its a lil demanding i like ur flow and scheme keep workin on it it sounds like scribe type rap and me bien maori i love it bro..... could u plz rate myn its pono aroha?

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    Thnx 4 feedback man, and yep, ima get right on it

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    Okay this was a half decent piece.
    COMPLEXITY:
    Not very high but you attempted to introspect so I'll say fair.
    WORDPLAY:
    None to speak of but this didn't hamper your piece to much. Some metaphors would have helped though especially given that is was titled "Just Imagine".
    MULTIES:
    None really. Your rhyming was basic for the most part.
    CREATIVITY:
    I felt the first verse was the strongest and you lost your way afterwards trying to deal with to many issues.
    OVERALL: It wasn't bad but could be better.

    Check out mine when u get a chance:
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=286832

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    heeeeey could i get some feedback plz, ppreciate it

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    Closed. If you post links you haven't replied to again you're on the 'waiting to get banned' list.

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