The Hidden Diaries: Cannibalistic Needs

[P. Mortuus]

Separation of Earth, Snapshots of hell viewed
Nightmares are born, sins causing life to get subdued
Shrewd mind of a man, when empty is an invite
For Satan to reside then recite his wishes and ignite
Desire, Greed in turn dominates the human mind
Sins committed, theft, murder, nothing left behind
Life disconnected, can’t get through, engaged dial
Kin slaying kin, blood thicker than water, Red river Nile
Man is an image of God, yet malformed and flawed
Unlike Jesus, man fell, when satanic temptations called
Holy men are seen, fasting in the desert for 40 days and nights
One awakes, dismayed at the sight of spectral lights
Surrounding trees set alight, voices recite, scriptures of hell
Man remembers Moses, misunderstood, on his knees he fell
Mimicking Gods ways, the Devil seeks attention
Making men commit sins, under false pretension
Shadows reach across; demonic seeds plant his brain full
Murder is committed, terror spreads, at the sight of a cannibal
Man devours man…Satan rejoices his plan
Succeeds, his followers hail, his disciples chant and stand
Tears fall out of the sky, Satan engraves evil in every blood gland
Like Atlantis, the world slowly crumbles…. to sand
Heaven unleashes fury, the clouds thunder and pelt
Gambling of fate, evil, good, the cards are dealt
God lays down 3 kings, he grins, distaste spreads on Satan’s face
Faux grace, the tables are turned as Satan reveals an Ace
The world falls to despair, thriving in cannibals and preachers
Children forced in school, learn religion…through satanic teachers…

Demonic seeds caused repulsive deeds
Repulsive deeds committed by cannibalistic needs
Satan heeds, man eats flesh, drinks the liquid that bleeds
Holy books are corroded, searching for answers impulsively
“Eat my flesh and drink my blood”, words taken literally
World falls, judicial system devoured by its initiator
Satan celebrates, while tears roll down the eyes of the creator
(Page ripped………….Last page has to be found)

[P. Mortuus]

Link 1
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=271272

[P. Mortuus]

Link 2
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...31#post3942131


Now gimme love

[EyeCandy]

hmmm another dope piece...this should be interestin pak.. stil i'ma qwote on this later on aiite... stay up..

[Tae Profit]

shyt was hot nigga, only thing i cud find wrong with this is that it was somewhat boring in the beginning...thats about it tho, dopeness....and the chrorus is piff.keep at it

[ryhmin for the t]

dope ryhme yo ... check out i'm flying higher (revised version)

[P. Mortuus]

dope ryhme yo ... check out i'm flying higher (revised version)

The OM got closed........but thanks for all the preciation.........yea i see what ya mean T but i couldn't think of much then lol, anyway uppin'

[dopestspitaeva]

yeah iz pretty cool 4 a text piece.. not sure if the language used would come accross as tuff rap track.. working more as poetry..perhaps even spoken poetry.. in all truth i aint stuck up on text flows right now..but this was a good drop still...some rhymes was cool some was bit basic...i prefer more complex multie rhymes whenever im flowing..

i liked the ending chorus..that was flowing lyrical fosho

had a couple coo wordplays.. try addin some metta anext time
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[Mythical]

That was a hard hitting piece Pakaveli. Your vocab really help build the story up and even though the flow was touchy in just a couple of spots, you pulled it off well. The last stanza was a great way to end the piece. I'll be waitin for the next hidden dairies.

Take it easy.

[P. Mortuus]

Yeah i see y'all is noticing, i've started to prefer writin' in poetry style now.......so all the preciation is welcome.
Yeah i'm gonna start writing part 3 soon......hope it lives up to peoples expectations

[.:VoKab:.]

Yo i really liked this piece...came hard..thats what i liked your structure was good, your rhyme scheme was decent and your vocab was good. Overall I think this is a nice piece...Keep it up...

[P. Mortuus]

Thanks preciate ya leaving feed

[P. Mortuus]

uppin'

[Illus']

Hmmm Big time hmmmmm

This piece reminds me of someone else
style which is mine...Didn't know you wrote
like this. The vocab to the rhyme scheme
reminds me of my style...

but my emotion is better lol.
nice piece indeed. Flow scheme kept it
smooth wanted to keep reading more.

Yeah we have the same style well reading
this piece I can say my rhyme scheme and
choice of vocab is similar...

I wonder if you studied some of my pieces?
yes no maybe ...?
Choosing a biblical aspect as well..


anyways overall nice piece keep writing.

[P. Mortuus]

Hmmm Big time hmmmmm

This piece reminds me of someone else
style which is mine...Didn't know you wrote
like this. The vocab to the rhyme scheme
reminds me of my style...

but my emotion is better lol.
nice piece indeed. Flow scheme kept it
smooth wanted to keep reading more.

Yeah we have the same style well reading
this piece I can say my rhyme scheme and
choice of vocab is similar...

I wonder if you studied some of my pieces?
yes no maybe ...?
Choosing a biblical aspect as well..


anyways overall nice piece keep writing.

Thanks for preciatin' but while i was writin' this i didn't study no ones stuff in case J. Christ thought i was bitin', the dogs after me for some reason and has even created an OM against me lol, but yeah i preciate you takin out time and leavin' comments