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View Poll Results: On a scale 1-10, where did this hit you?

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  • 1: Weakest Ish I've Ever Heard

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  • 2: Closest To The Weakest Ever

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  • 3: Eh, Keep Practicing

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  • 4: Just Above The Gay-Dar

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  • 5: It's In The Middle Somewhere

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  • 6: It's Just Above Okay

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  • 7: Gettin' There, But Not Yet

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  • 8: If This Was 2 Higher, It'd Be 10

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  • 9: This Is Some Pretty Dope Ish

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  • 10: One Of The Best I've Ever Seen

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  1. #1
    The Otha White Drug B1ZK3T's Avatar
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    Reasons Why, Reasons Hide

    This song when finished will go on a mixtape. So the titles not definite yet...

    I just wanna fill each line with heartfelt emotion
    Make it known that all this commotion is me explodin'
    My consoulment is ta know when I'm amongst noble men
    I'll be home then. When I show them, the secrets I hide
    It's descretely inside, defeating demise, it's......pride
    Look into my eyes and you'll see the truth behind rhymes
    It's so I'm forever satisfied, knowin' I influence lifes
    When I, get enough money I'll start a company for the economy
    As my apology for all the hippocracy we seen recently,
    honestly it's astounding we see more hate than we seen before
    Noone does nothin free no more, unless paid with green rewards
    Who do I speak for? Me and any who feel we're being ignored
    What a bore, no it's just political correctness is so infectious
    We can't say Merry X-mas, without bein' corrected and dissected
    Get disrespected when we don't get into sections and conform
    Go against the norm, brew up storms, an' not perform encores
    The only reason I'd go on tours, is ta spread this message
    To the infected that we over digested, too openly contested
    But still noone hears and they wonder why we're hateful
    We are so because this country has stole our mate's soul
    OKay so.......................
    The reason I rap, is ta earn a living 'cause my mom can't
    Her hands so cramped, she can't grab a fuckin' ice pack
    Hold a stamp, or work, or play-slap, she just hurts, always
    I rap ta tryn stack cash so the bills is gon' be all paid
    Maybe small made an' all deranged, by heart's in the right place
    On Nice days, I fight brigades, so I can buy mom rolaids, prays...

    ...To be continued, like when I think of the rest, lol...Please post feed...Rate it in the poll 1-10

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    The Otha White Drug B1ZK3T's Avatar
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    Almost 10 views no responses, it must suck ass...

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    doesn't suck ass... it's ok... a few parts you need to correct in order for it to come off a little smoother... i think the basics, nay, some of the even more complicated tools are in use...

    "What a bore, no it's just political correctness is so infectious
    We can't say Merry X-mas, without bein' corrected and dissected
    Get disrespected when we don't get into sections and conform
    Go against the norm, brew up storms, an' not perform encores"
    ^this part was really starting to pop it off...

    keep working on this and make sure to thoroughly go over your lyrics outloud... and if you are already... then good

    there are also some points where your focus on a topic, any topic kinda warbles and wavers... that's ok out in the real musical world it's acceptable... but it doesn't hurt to mention that here

    keep working and i'm pretty sure you deserve at least a 7
    Hence Forward

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    ok, its good, but i didnt feel the flow, too nippicky, like you had good flow....Then you would fuck it up all of a sudden.... I liked the wordplay, could use better vocabulary, but hey that was pretty damn good.... I would love to see the mixtape of it, to see how it sounds 2 you..... i give it a 7/10

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    The Otha White Drug B1ZK3T's Avatar
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    It sounds damn near perfect on audio, if anyone wants to collab with this, maybe whip up a chorus...Get a beat we'll do this audio, I think that would better justify it

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    not bad man.....the rhymes were pretty good..vocab was aiight..sum places good
    flow was smooth all the way...strucutre was even and it made it an easy read
    ropic was iight....wasnt really feelin it but it was just aiight to me......
    overall this was descent.....keep elevbating...peace

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    Like mag mentioned you show potential here, you need to further develope this and the rest of your drops. You had hot spots, now work on keeping them hot throughout. Keep at it man...

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    yeah, potential definitely
    flow - gd, consistent
    structure - gd
    rhymin - mainly gd, developed it from one syllabuls, i liked tht
    i liked the piece, you got potential
    can u comment on 'Level Up' - in open mic, first page at the moment

    peace

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    i liked it, felt the structure and vocab whole way through. I would like to see this on audio, probably does sound great...

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    I give this a 7... It's creative just gots no flow.

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    really dunno its good but im missin the flow

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    Cool Daum

    cmon that mixtape will be hot but

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    its realy bad i dose suck shit

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    Please keep the stupidity outta my threads, thank you...And UPPIN' for FEED

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    nice peice man good flow good vocab an it was a nice drop just keep at it

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