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Thread: Can You Feel The Soul (uve got to feel dis)

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    Can You Feel The Soul (uve got to feel dis)

    It's always the little niggas mournin, tryin to eat
    lookin for the come up with an eye on the street
    he tried sellin weed, never got alive on the scene
    So he had to resort to sellin crack to the creeps
    for that cabbage to eat, startin receivin the chips
    and it gave him a reason to live in the season of shit
    He got the paper stacked, a crib with a Ray B. suana
    that in time the kingpin would give to his baby momma
    the true love of his life, it was a young lady Named
    Jenny, and he'd always find sunshine in a babys face
    Now aint aint talkin his boo, that bitch was a clucker
    but i'm talkin bout the three month old kid she mothered



    so you there cryin, hey can you feel the soul
    if the good die young, why do they need to go?
    i pray everynight, because jesus is sayin so
    but self sacrifice, babe can you feel the soul?



    See now jennys growin up, and shes on the free for all
    Pushin 16 and she gets drunk, smokes weed, and all
    First time she met a dude, she put her hands up
    long story short now our mans a grandpa
    She know her papa cookin, and she never done work
    You see the gateway drug propaganda would love her
    she wants to get higher, steals some dope from her pops room
    Calls up her baby daddy, like "MAAAAAANNNNN i got you"
    skip weeks shes a crackhead, hangin in the backroom
    and if u dont let her daddy know, she'll bang u in the bathroom
    see he's slightly aware, that she do that workin that crack
    but let him catch her, he'll put the hurt in her ass
    so she borrow money, from the loanshark on leafland
    and he adds a stack large, due the first day of the weekend
    You see, she gonna follow her father, boom that quick
    and hope to slang enough, to support her habit
    but no one wanna buy from a chick, dont matter how white
    so what she couldn't sell, gonna end up in her pipe


    so you there cryin, hey can you feel the soul
    if the good die young, why do they need to go?
    i pray everynight, because jesus is sayin so
    but self sacrifice, babe can you feel the soul?
    cant hold on no longer... i've got to let it go


    So it's a week later, she been up for days
    got a quarter gram left, cant put the cut away
    she's @ her fathers w/ her man, hangin some plants
    when a car pulls up, it's that candy lac
    and damn he's strapped, she never told him
    and forgot about the 6 hunny she owed him
    He didn't even speak a word to the bitch
    just pulled out his pearl handle grip
    the longest second old dude ever felt before
    just a step away from tradin his life for hers
    father for daughter, and thats when he leaped
    bullets busted off, and her man took the heat


    Hey little girl cryin, can you say goodbye to his soul
    feel it pass your hands, and climb the clouded road
    without a hope, a father and husband took it right in his lips
    because this grandfather wouldn't die for his kin
    so let the tears, cleanse the soul tonight
    because your baby daddy, traded for a life




    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...67#post3118867
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=228747
    Mista Loc
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    Omg.
    This was a dope piece here young boul

    I was definitly feeling the story.
    Real nice.
    Just overall fire...
    pretty original too.

    dope kid.

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    decent shit. Liked the grit of it, had alot of real emotion... good story line, some of the multi's were extras, not really necessary but made the flow nice..

    overall, I'd say like 7-8/10

    just bein real.

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    This was good, the flow stood out the most to me in this piece.
    You told a good story you didnt stray off topic which always helps a story rap. The imagery was good but i think if you made it a bit more graphic it could of taking this even further but it was good none the less.
    The vocab was decent nothing special, the structure was fine so overall a good piece, keep writing and keep posting.

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    yall sleepin on fire.
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    ..word that shit was tight...but i got something for you to go head to head with...Silent Tears...but anyway most definitely a good piece...keep em comin....
    ..I'm So Fuckin' Hoody..!

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    ahh...going...against..krunkness....it was good, just not krunk..lol..but really i felt it mane, good drop
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