User Tag List

Showing results 1 to 12 of 12

Thread: Lost Soul

  1. #1
    You've Earned a Custom Title! YJ's Avatar
    Join Date
    Nov 2003
    Location
    MTC, MD
    Age
    35
    Posts
    255

    Lost Soul(deep...must peep)

    replied 2:

    The Repossessed - Dev
    I Cry - Formula

    I'm a sophomore in high school who is lackin concentration
    the girls and this track shit got me losing the education
    I need, where would I be if I dropped out 2day or tomorrow
    I could see me behind bars n my parents wouldn't feel sorrow
    they would be suprised if I fucked up, I'm there brightest son
    my dreams still look dark cuz I haven't found the lightest one
    once one dream fails you always gotta have a secondary plan
    me and the devil are parallel and my grip is slippin man
    its like me and the devil are playin a game of car chase
    gotta hold on even though my mind is somewhere in space
    Johnny can not do wrong even if temptations take place
    me and him have forever been going at it face to face
    he's trying to bring the evil out of me he knows my name
    I can hear him callin, my mood swings are causing my fame
    to decline, and I'm gaining much more enemies than friends
    I wish I could rewind and stay away from these bad trends
    sumbody help me cuz my soul has been sold to the devil
    in full control and is not letting me move up a level
    and when it comes to evil I'm trying to become a rebel
    he got me in the palm of his hand like a little pebble
    he got me trapped in a dark cabinet which is locked
    the path which was made 4 me he successfully blocked
    the flow of blood in me stopped but i am still breathin
    Lord, split the golden gate in half, I feel like leaving
    but I can't go because I'm positive that I am going hell
    he got his eyes on my every move waitin fo me in his cell
    he got control of my lost soul!
    Last edited by YJ; March 23rd, 2004 at 10:21 PM
    BEST OF YJ
    Holla at cha Boi
    Watch Me
    Eyez of a Young Nigga
    Can't Forget yall
    Luv sick
    I can't Believe It(RIP Denise)

  2. #2
    You've Earned a Custom Title! YJ's Avatar
    Join Date
    Nov 2003
    Location
    MTC, MD
    Age
    35
    Posts
    255
    come on...
    BEST OF YJ
    Holla at cha Boi
    Watch Me
    Eyez of a Young Nigga
    Can't Forget yall
    Luv sick
    I can't Believe It(RIP Denise)

  3. #3
    You've Earned a Custom Title! YJ's Avatar
    Join Date
    Nov 2003
    Location
    MTC, MD
    Age
    35
    Posts
    255
    ....
    BEST OF YJ
    Holla at cha Boi
    Watch Me
    Eyez of a Young Nigga
    Can't Forget yall
    Luv sick
    I can't Believe It(RIP Denise)

  4. #4
    Twin Cities 651 Laureate's Avatar
    Join Date
    Nov 2003
    Location
    Minnesota 651
    Posts
    6,472
    Battle Record
    91-11
    Awards OFOTK Champion Haiku Champion Legendary PC Legendary Member PC HOF OM HOF 75+ Wins
    This was a pretty good piece man.....imagry lacked a bit...but the emotion was nice...good way to tell about current events for you...flow was on and off...but it didn't really downgrade this piece at all. Nice drop man...keep at it

    Please peep this http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=121263
    A few achievements here and there

    To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 50 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.

  5. #5
    You've Earned a Custom Title! YJ's Avatar
    Join Date
    Nov 2003
    Location
    MTC, MD
    Age
    35
    Posts
    255
    thanks! uppin
    BEST OF YJ
    Holla at cha Boi
    Watch Me
    Eyez of a Young Nigga
    Can't Forget yall
    Luv sick
    I can't Believe It(RIP Denise)

  6. #6
    flow is on and off and vocab is aite
    but a nice drop none the less and good topic and lacks in imagery but the car chase between u and the devil imagery is obvious there
    Basement Productions Inc
    [ A-Dub ] - [ Freelance ] - [ PD ] - [ Twist ]
    *human complex*

  7. #7
    You've Earned a Custom Title! YJ's Avatar
    Join Date
    Nov 2003
    Location
    MTC, MD
    Age
    35
    Posts
    255
    thanks uppin
    BEST OF YJ
    Holla at cha Boi
    Watch Me
    Eyez of a Young Nigga
    Can't Forget yall
    Luv sick
    I can't Believe It(RIP Denise)

  8. #8
    You've Earned a Custom Title! southsideloco's Avatar
    Join Date
    Jul 2003
    Location
    miami florida...the PIMP state
    Age
    35
    Posts
    220
    aiight..nice piece homie...u had sum tight vocab n the flow was aiight, ur imagery lacked but u still managed to pull a emotional nice piece...the only flaws was like every1 else said...u lacked imagery but youll get use to puttin more..jus keep flowin n hope to see more of ur drops..nice piece

    please return the favor n hit up my sig under OM n leave sum feedback on my recent piece, be much appreciated;thanx

    Peace

    To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 50 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.

  9. #9
    You've Earned a Custom Title! YJ's Avatar
    Join Date
    Nov 2003
    Location
    MTC, MD
    Age
    35
    Posts
    255
    thanks uppin
    BEST OF YJ
    Holla at cha Boi
    Watch Me
    Eyez of a Young Nigga
    Can't Forget yall
    Luv sick
    I can't Believe It(RIP Denise)

  10. #10
    Be Safe!!! Lingwistik's Avatar
    Join Date
    Dec 2003
    Age
    36
    Posts
    1,273
    Battle Record
    2-0
    yah, ur vocabulary wuz alittle off n ur imagary lacked like sed above, the flow was kinda stretched at parts, but it was still a nice piece. Good emotion and thought put into it whch shows good potential. Just keep droppin en ill check em, keep it up n u'll eleavte

    yo man, please return the favor

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...21#post1287521
    Last edited by Lingwistik; March 24th, 2004 at 08:15 PM

    To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 50 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.

  11. #11
    You've Earned a Custom Title! YJ's Avatar
    Join Date
    Nov 2003
    Location
    MTC, MD
    Age
    35
    Posts
    255
    thanks uppin!
    BEST OF YJ
    Holla at cha Boi
    Watch Me
    Eyez of a Young Nigga
    Can't Forget yall
    Luv sick
    I can't Believe It(RIP Denise)

  12. #12
    You've Earned a Custom Title! YJ's Avatar
    Join Date
    Nov 2003
    Location
    MTC, MD
    Age
    35
    Posts
    255
    I never sleep cuz sleep is da cuzin of death
    BEST OF YJ
    Holla at cha Boi
    Watch Me
    Eyez of a Young Nigga
    Can't Forget yall
    Luv sick
    I can't Believe It(RIP Denise)

Similar Threads

  1. confessions of a lost soul
    By RaYCHaSER in forum Poetic Scriptures
    Replies: 2
    Last Post: January 10th, 2009, 03:10 PM
  2. A Lost Soul
    By AlcaTrakz in forum Poetic Scriptures
    Replies: 1
    Last Post: July 3rd, 2007, 02:29 PM
  3. A Lost Soul...
    By Legacy01 in forum Open Mic
    Replies: 6
    Last Post: September 26th, 2005, 03:30 AM
  4. Lost Soul
    By MiamiSlim305 in forum Open Mic
    Replies: 5
    Last Post: July 7th, 2005, 05:20 PM
  5. - A Lost Soul -
    By ToNe-E in forum Open Mic
    Replies: 5
    Last Post: December 31st, 2002, 01:06 AM

Posting Rules

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts
  •