1o lines
blinds. . . .
45 min. . . .
house rules
check in. . . . .
UNDEAD
÷Thìñg÷
1o lines
blinds. . . .
45 min. . . .
house rules
check in. . . . .
Checking in.......ummm why doesnt this battle have a poll?? i wanted a official battle bro is dis for fun or is it gonna be recorded?
oh its ok i see the poll now my thing must of been fuking up ok start the battle now peace good luck.
yo checking in bro. . . . .
omfg what theres a poll yo i kno how to make battles lol. . . .
undeads tha alias..then deaths tha kryogenic fetish for this alien said
cant kill tha gone?..ya castrated worse than night of tha living dead!
u zombie..come back fo more like ya residents evil..but im the devil
i'll easily discard u like worthless pebbles..& ya peasants 'great' level!
i mean look at ya sig its big & ugly & whats worse is thats u n the middle
1 wit beady green eyes ya hides a bone..a skelatons erode is all brittle!
even ya avy is ugly..& ya glow colors 2..but wait jus look at ya krew?
ya threw..if i cant kill the dead than i guess i shudder..look! its true!?
lol fuck it 8 lines man i dont wanna go over on time and shit
but jus in case..man yer gay and ya names gay and ya sig
heres this cats sig in case she changes it lmao
im talking bout him n it and that those dead ppz r her krew
http://www.angelfire.com/ar3/undeadbk/group.GIF
yo 45 min is up homie drop right away or imma finn ta get ya ass dqed if i can
This clowns got ÷ in his name, well this maths equation will bring you shame
when our battle gets five votes , you wunt get 1 cause your lines are so lame
thats why the guy in your avy is so blue , wearin gold make him feel old
but you aint ever gonna be a vet cause the best youll get is a pension
your spit so weak i smell how bad .:it:. reaks of blue shit, cant hit
the mark cause the target is moving, while this bitch is stuck in ooze
im just prooveing the point that you got no talent , you bout to looze
my verbal vice grip , will ring this thing's neck , bust his nose and his lip
without even layin a hand on him , ive hurt his pryde, so now he about to hide.
away to go sing, away his woes cause no one likes this Thing to spit or blow.
÷ = (divide)
k break it down
flow - thing
structure - undead
wordplay - thing
opener - thing
closer - thing
i think thing came out on top, he was better overall as he had flows, wordplay and better opener and closer.
plz vote on my battles
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=119611
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=117453
damn this was a sirece one sided battle thing took this real essaly
my favirote line was:
u zombie..come back fo more like ya residents evil..but im the devil
i'll easily discard u like worthless pebbles..& ya peasants 'great' level!
i mean look at ya sig its big & ugly & whats worse is thats u n the middle
1 wit beady green eyes ya hides a bone..a skelatons erode is all brittle!
NICE
line from undead :
thats why the guy in your avy is so blue , wearin gold make him feel old
but you aint ever gonna be a vet cause the best youll get is a pension
your spit so weak i smell how bad .:it:. reaks of blue shit, cant hit
wack needs alittle help
played out line:
the mark cause the target is moving, while this bitch is stuck in ooze
im just prooveing the point that you got no talent , you bout to looze
damn some that was wack that killed it
breakdown:
flow:thing
mutlies:no one
strcture:thing
opener:thing, okay opener
enjoy reading:thin
closer:thing, thought it could have been better
v/ thing
1..
decent battle.
thing- you came pretty good. nice structure and flow. you filled your verse up wit some nice personals. sum of them coulda used a little work, but thats about it. overall, ur punches were good. fav linie is ur closer.
undead- you came pretty good to man. ur punches were decent, ur opening personal was good. prolly the best in there. you got a little sloppy wit some of those rhymes tho. ur structure was a little of so it messed wit ur flow.
vote- ima give this to thing...he had a slightly better flow, everything else was equal. props to both. this is a close one.
peace
2..
÷Thìñg÷
undeads tha alias..then deaths tha kryogenic fetish for this alien said
cant kill tha gone?..ya castrated worse than night of tha living dead!
that was ight.. didnt feel to whole idea of the bar at all tho.. =\
u zombie..come back fo more like ya residents evil..but im the devil
i'll easily discard u like worthless pebbles..& ya peasants 'great' level!
the 1st bar was startin off ok.. then you just feel off.. and the punch was a lil weak.. =\
i mean look at ya sig its big & ugly & whats worse is thats u n the middle
1 wit beady green eyes ya hides a bone..a skelatons erode is all brittle!
ok no too hard..
even ya avy is ugly..& ya glow colors 2..but wait jus look at ya krew?
ya threw..if i cant kill the dead than i guess i shudder..look! its true!?
wow that was a weak way to end a battle.. =\
you need work.. i didnt feel any real slow here.. work on your punchlines too
UNDEAD
This clowns got ÷ in his name, well this maths equation will bring you shame
when our battle gets five votes , you wunt get 1 cause your lines are so lame
basic but nice..
thats why the guy in your avy is so blue , wearin gold make him feel old
but you aint ever gonna be a vet cause the best youll get is a pension
that was a lil weak.. =|
your spit so weak i smell how bad .:it:. reaks of blue shit, cant hit
the mark cause the target is moving, while this bitch is stuck in ooze
lol that was weak man.. wow..
im just prooveing the point that you got no talent , you bout to looze
my verbal vice grip , will ring this thing's neck , bust his nose and his lip
... what in the fuck?? didnt even rhyme =|
without even layin a hand on him , ive hurt his pryde, so now he about to hide.
away to go sing, away his woes cause no one likes this Thing to spit or blow.
wow after seein this i have no more to say..
your shit was ass.. you need work in all areas.. fa real.. =|
Breakdownz
flow/thing
mutlies/not any
wordplay/ not any that was good enough
punchlines/ thing
personals/ thing...
Vote
Thing..
this battle was ass.. yall both need lots of work.. vote in my battles.. =] ghost..
wtf!!! 300 post!!!!!! yall cats must think yall vets... sad.. =\ o well..
opener - thing
structure - undead
wordplay - thing
flow - thing
closer - thing
thing took it but i realy didnt like either finisher but you just took it...
undead you had a good structure but thats the only thing you had the advantage on....
Invalid, Unexplained vote. Disqualified. -ILLunatic
Last edited by ILLunatic; March 21st, 2004 at 07:34 AM
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