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    Lightbulb Seasoning

    It dictates our lives, bearing the looks of a mythical time, it. .
    Takes on temperatures & such, thus : the political climate
    The States - irate, will debate with their wonderful peers
    Without realizing that we've been in a state of summer for years
    & I don't mean Florida; I feel our prose has been just splendid
    For, our leaders have been gold ever since Roosevelt ascended
    Did the Eleventh change it? His face ranges from porous to adamant
    Some say otherwise, but so far, I feel that George has been adequate
    As we move to Autumn, relaxed, we pass the murder scenes
    But from the outskirts, I can see the shadows cast on Germany
    "Still a barren waste-land," is what I derive from fallen lads. .
    Whose epitaphs reign down on us as we arrive in Stalingrad
    Winter's inevitable; I can feel it with its deceit & rally cries
    Strapping on skis in the blizzard we call the streets of Palestine
    Past the Indian Ocean, whose very bottom looks to traffic us
    On to the universal sore sport, and the problems in South Africa
    There's more winter, ground-hogs save us; we must decide on somethin'
    For there are innumerable budding cities between Versailles and London
    Mainly Eastern Europe - though lacking unborn terror's appeasement. .
    Summer looms around the corner as the most cherished of seasons
    The people rule, to an extent; No qualms in bombing the promise-breakers
    Continue searching - for, each problem has a common denominator
    When you make it, believe. . and please pass potential fiends
    Because glory days aren't always strong enough to last for centuries

    - Quality

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    DOPE!!!!
    this was a real dope piece...honestly
    Though you already know you smart person you...
    Alright...amazing vocabulary...
    Good flow on top of that..
    nasty multis popping around..
    Content was dope...
    Big props for this piece...
    check this out please Mr.K
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=106609
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    nyce drop..........good stuff, easy read....good multi's, rhyme scheme was solid, vocab was on point, flow was smooth..............good points were brought across, solid drop......honestly, tha only shit i've eva seen you drop, i lyked it....kept me readin, keepin spittin.......work on expansion of ideas and watch out for diction <-- i guarantee you not many heads undastand what you are sayin so they arent gonna drop feedback, and i honestly dont care if you peep any of my ish, peace, 1

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    Changing The Font Size Wont Hide Your Stretched Bars, Yo ....

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    When was that my intention? I'd rather have each sentence stay on one line, if it's alright with you, mate.

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    your my favorite writer on the net .. seriously
    take what you can from that, and trust that
    i loved this piece ..
    follow me on Instagram @updowndaps

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    This was just sick.
    I love the intellect Koalatee can bring to a piece without sacrificing imagery or flow.

    Completely dope!

    Mind reading this if you get free time?
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=106765
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    High praise, Sand . Thank you , Chrit. I will check yours immediately.

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    < - can't even get replies on RB , now.

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