The Hostage Negotiation Act 1

Cop:
Officer Austin, be Cautious, We Gotta Hostage Situation
Us Cops aint gonna Sit Through and Watch 'em Split thier Face In
I'm Nautious and I'm Pacin', I need to Ride a Block or Two
I Tried to Walk him Through, Maybe this Guy will Talk to You

Hostage Negotiator:
Hand me the Phone and go Stand in your Zone as I Demand with a Tone
This Plan of my Own that I can Handle Alone
Go Park the Van by the Cones and make Reporters Type the Truth
Award the Rifles to the Troops and Order Snipers on the Roofs

Cop:
The situation so far that's been Brought into Context
He was Robbin' this Complex like it Thought it was a Contest
She bought a new prom dress then he snuck in the door
Started buckin the 4 and made em duck to the floor
Now he's stuck in a war without a way to escape

Hostage Negotiator:
My Magnum Case will have this place decorated with tape

Cop:
But what About our Right of Shutting Down the Light
And Cutting Out his Site and Hiding in the Southern Route to Fight?

Hostage Negotiator:
Before You Cock and you Burst lemmy Talk to him First
I'd rather him Walk with a Nurse then leave the Block in a Hearse
You're Stalking him Worse, I can Handle it Standing here
Demand you Man to Clear Near the Candle Lit Chandelere
Man the Gear and Span the Rear, Put Some by the Fences
If he don't Come to his Senses we'll Summon Defences
At the Front of the Entrance, feel Free to start Rushin' Close
Clutchin' Toast, and we'll See how the Discussion Goes
Leave him with a Busted Nose, Lookin' Deprived
But have him Tooken Alive, I want this Crook to Survive
So we can Book him and Drive, 'cause Bullets Dentin' his-Jaw
Aint like being Sentanced to the Full Extent of the Law
I Know the Tension's so Raw, you need Medicine, Coughin' Queezy
But you Know Better Then Often We aint Lettin Him Off that Easy

Cop:
He's in the Top Apartment with the Chopped up Carpet, He'll get
Popped by Marksmen from the Cop Department when we Drop the Target

Hostage Negotiator:
Is your Gun Ready?

Cop:
Yeah, but I'm Feeling Un Steady
I don't wanna shed the Blood Letting with the Sun Setting

Hostage Negotiator:
Well, hopefully we wont Have to Fight till After Night
Attachin' Site with Flash Lights to Cross his Path of Flight

Cop:
I Lost my Appetite, From Huntin' Those-Fugitives
I Don't Wanna Go Through with this

Hostage Negotiator:
Son, that's So Ludacris!
I'm trying Keep it Peaceful! Quit Mopin' About!
Think about These People 'for you Open your Mouth!
What if they were Related to Us? Would you be Afraid to Just
Pull out a Blade to Thrust or Blow 'em Away to Dust?

Cop:
No I would Take the Cuffs and have him Locked in Cells

Hostage Negotiator:
What if he Held a Glock, Cockin' the Shells?

Cop:
That'd be Akward as Hell but I'd do Well with my Intelligance
To Have his Melon Clenched then Tell 'em it was Self Defense

Hostage Negotiator:
To Hold the Cards, Patroll the Yards behind the Boulevard
Have the Soldier Guards Pull it Hard and leave him Bullet Scarred
What do we Know so far?

Cop:
He Drove that Old Car
Plus he's got a Low Scar like this Older Soap Star
He's Holdin' a Crowbar plus he's got a Sniper Rifle

Hostage Negotiator:
Trace the License off his Viper before his Pipe can Stifle
Get some Back Round Checks,so I can Aim for the Details
Try to Track Down Text to get the Name on his Emails
He's saying No Surrender, but before we Go and Enter
Let's Consult a Family Member who can Lower his Temper
And Show him some Tender love and Talk him Down
Walk Around the Block of Town and Knock at every Lost and Found
Before I Cock a Round with the Shotgun Sound
Before the Paramedics gotta Wear a Doctor Gown or Chalk the Ground

Cop:
Lock it down, I caught a glimpse something wiggled
Boss I found it, it's an incomming signal

Terrorist:
Hey You! Zoomin' Peakin' Through, to Whom am I Speakin' To?
I Might keep these People in this Room for a Week or Two
Assumin'- you Weaklin's Do whatever I Tell you To
But if you Go to Pull something Clever, To Hell with You!

Hostage Negotiator:
My Bad! Just Calm Down, I Had a Bomb Found
Under my Steering Column

Terrorist:
Son, you got a Hearing Problem
So Pull Through, I Hate Bad Listeners
I just Told You Straight I Had Prisoners
Not Knowing if there's Children, you Gone Changin' This Discussion
I'll be Blowing up the Buildin' like Spontaneous Combustion

Hostage Negotiator:
I apologize my Bawlin Eyes werent seeing too clear
There's no one squeezing down here, so there's no reason to fear
And no one's Lurkin About, my Friend is Gone, Let's Negotiate
We can Work this Out, Dependin' On your Emotion State
Let's close debate, I'll tell my men to shut it where it stands
And send them brothers by the vans, to go attend some other jams
Before the Blood is on your Hands and Tension Suddenly Expands
Mention Somethin' from your Plans and tell us What are your Demands

Terrorist:
You think they'll give you money or a Medal of Bravery
To Settle this? Or would you feel Better for Saving Me?
The Ghetto's in Slavery, Banned from Fun Enjoyment
'Cause a Man of Unemployment isin't One to Toy With
I got some Information I won't Exchange with that Other Dude
That Brother's Rude, he made me Change to Another Mood
Arrange for some Southern Brewed Heiniken Dropped
From that Iverson Cop behind the China Men Shop
You see that Vitamin Top on the Dash Board of your Trashy Ford?
(Pop!) Let it Go! You aint Gettin' No Cash Reward!
The Last Resort is to Ask the-Lord's Vast Source
To Teach a Crash Course to Beat the Blast Corps or Task Force
Past Wars Handled Terribly Can't Compare to Me
I'll leave a Man too Scared to Be Demandin' Therapy
So why you Fightin' with this Kid? I'd Find your Site if-you Hid
And get you Right in the Rib like that Vitamin Lid

Hostage Negotiator:
Hold your Fire the Whole Entire Room is Imprisioned
Resume the Posistion best to Zoom in for Vision
But don't Assume your Decision to be Sent in the Fight
You see that Broom in the Kitchen? There's a Vent to the Right
That we can Enter Tonight while we're Wearin our Goggles
With Various Products we can Carry in Bottles
To fill the Air with an Awful Lotta Smoke and Watch him Choke
Cough and Croak, Nautious, then take his Hostage Folk
Fix the Aimers on your Gun and make sure the Chaimber's Spun

Cop:
Sir, we got a Child here who Claims to Be his Son
He Came to me to Run from the Lies he's been Tellin'

Hostage Negotiator:
Tell the Guys to Stop Yellin', it's time to Suprise the Fellon


End Of Act 1

Check Back Soon For Act 2

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=325549
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Real talk it's late as hell lol, i got school in the mourn, but from the looks of it this seems pretty dope, but hey I'm going to edit in some real quality feed , please hit up my link piece "sherwood gardens".

Just gonna drop a quick reply. Cause its 2:20AM here and I got work at 5:00. This just happened to be the most DOPEST piece I've peeped since I been here. And you stayed on topic. And painted a fuckin' masterpiece with it. So I'll be waiting on Act 2 to see what happens when the guy finds out his sons with the cops now. And whats it gonna lead too.... But yeah man this was seriously off the fucking hook. And you should really start dropping shit more often. Cause it could improve alotta skill on R.B.... and lead those who dont know much to the right direction. So anyhow ill be waiting on Act 2... and see if its here after work... so take care, man...

I think it sounds pretty good man... the only thing that was hard for me to follow was the flow... good lookin read, enjoyed, you're a damn good story teller

Tim, you have a natural knack for putting wonderful words into a piece...usually. This from you seemed either rushed or not thought out well enough. I liked the idea, but the flow was cut up badly, mainly due to the fact that you basically had a rhymin conversation the whole time. I liked the storyline, however, which I apllaud you on and it was interesting, just hard to follow really. Keep it up Tim, you know what the fuck you're doing. Good luck on part 2.

if you could...
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=327098

yo i love pieces like this that user the puts conversation take into it when its done right and this did becuase you kept it flowing well in my opinon and you kept it sounding real hardly awkward anywhere the third terroist part was my fave you seemed like a young eminem with the way you made two words rhymes with on that usually woldn't and the storyline really seemed to go nicely in with this one of my favorites pieces this far into the month really

all in all super dope keep writing shit like this Tim i am waiting on part 2

thanks for the feed guys

ill hit up links later

rise the bucket

hit mine up leave links

Hey Tim, its been a while. Seen your piece here and thought i'd check it out. You impressed me man, the concept was original as hell and the imagery was strong as fuck. Way to show all these kids why you're a true topical writer. The multi's were dope for the most part but their was the odd line where you seemed to have put them in for the sake of it. The cop and negoiator also seemed to be going over the same subject matter just one time too many as well but this was minor shit in an otherside great piece. You kept my attention til the end and thats hard to do in a piece this length.

Keep on posting.

Damn this was dope as fuK......first off this was one of the most descriptivly better worded pieces I've read in my entire RB career..The story line itself was enough to grasp my attention..but what you did with this piece..was truly amazing...It flowed flawless from beginnig to end and I loved the way that you provided imagery...this was a very exciting and entertaining piece from..you and I can't wait to see part 2...

thanks guys

uppin

this concept was pretty sick, though it seemed you rushed it just a little bit, you took the time to make the story the focus here. I felt putting a human face on the terrorist instead of making him your typical angry terrorist, wouldve been a better direction, since it wouldve added another dimension. All in all this was sick though, you did your thing as always. What can i expect though, didnt you start out in Warlords under my subcrew, which i dont remember the name at the present moment ?

Epic piece lol...size was big and truthfully a bit daunting to begin with though your piece picked up nicely and then got me interested into actually reading it through succesfully lol. Overall, it was an interesting read, descriptive and vivid and allows the reader to get into the piece and actually hear it like na mean. This was a more storyline based topical than a flowing one though some flow issues could be adjusted to get the piece even more better. All in all, a good piece, Stay up^ man.

This peice was incredible. The Usage of space and rhyme and creativty was awsome. reminded me of the movie Hostage. With bruce Willis. This was great dude. The stroy line was just..wow. Keepit up.

just 1 more up then ill post the new one